Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly by saying that your parents taught you politeness. Improve grammatical accuracy: use “my parents” as the subject, say “taught me good manners,” and use “gave me” rather than “give me.” Avoid repeating “sorry,” “please,” and “thank you,” and replace the unclear phrase “give me a lot of birth” with a specific explanation. Use linking words such as “for example” and “because” to organize your details.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to say “please,” “thank you,” and “sorry” when I was young. For example, they reminded me to thank people after receiving something because good manners help us build positive relationships.

提案: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and then explain one or two results. Use the adjective “polite” or the noun phrase “politeness,” rather than “the polite.” Replace “see the language” with “notice how we speak to others,” and avoid repeating “very important” and “so that’s why.” Add a specific consequence, such as making a good impression or preventing misunderstandings.

例: Yes, I think politeness is extremely important in everyday life. The way we speak to others can influence their impression of us and help us avoid misunderstandings. Simple expressions such as “please,” “thank you,” and “sorry” show respect and make communication more pleasant.

提案: Mention several appropriate situations directly instead of focusing on the unclear phrase “entertainment party.” Use the plural form “occasions,” and correct the grammar in “it build a good relationship” to “it builds good relationships.” Explain that politeness is needed not only at parties but also in formal situations, at work, and when speaking to strangers. Avoid repeating the same point and use a clear list with linking words such as “especially” and “for example.”

例: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially in formal situations and social gatherings. For example, at a birthday party, we should greet the host and thank them for the invitation. We also need to be polite at school or work because respectful communication helps us maintain good relationships.

提案: Use the past tense consistently because the question asks about childhood: say “When I was a child” and “my parents taught me.” Describe your own actions directly instead of repeating what your parents taught you. Correct “any purchasing anythings” to “whenever I bought something,” and explain that you used polite expressions when asking for help, receiving something, or making a mistake. Avoid repetition and finish with a clear result.

例: When I was a child, I showed politeness by using “please,” “thank you,” and “sorry” in everyday situations. For example, I said “please” when I wanted something and thanked shopkeepers or adults after they helped me. I also apologized when I made a mistake, which helped me communicate respectfully with other people.

× I think I learned about my parents because it give me a lot of knowledge about the society and they also give me a good manners.

✓ I think I learned from my parents because they gave me a lot of knowledge about society and taught me good manners.

The answer refers to learning in the past, so give must become gave. The verb taught is also needed to express the idea of teaching manners. Use learn from someone, not learn about someone, when referring to a person who teaches you.

× They also give me a good manners.

✓ They also taught me good manners.

Manners is a plural and uncountable expression in this context, so it should not be used with the singular article a. Say good manners, not a good manners.

× I learned about my parents because it give me a lot of knowledge about the society.

✓ I learned from my parents because they gave me a lot of knowledge about society.

Society is used in a general sense here, so it does not need the definite article the. Also, parents are the people who gave the knowledge, so they should be the subject of the sentence.

× They always give me a lot of birth. That's sorry and yes sorry and sorry and please send thank you because it is very important in the life so that's why.

✓ They always taught me to say sorry, please, and thank you because these expressions are very important in life.

The original wording does not form clear grammatical sentences. Use the structure teach someone to do something. Also, connect the reason directly with because instead of using several incomplete or repeated phrases.

× Of course, the polite is very important in the life.

✓ Of course, politeness is very important in life.

Polite is an adjective, but the sentence needs a noun as its subject. Use politeness to describe the quality of being polite. Life is used generally here, so it does not need the article the.

× A lot of people always see the language, how to speak the other people.

✓ A lot of people notice how others speak to people.

Use speak to someone, not speak someone. The original phrase how to speak the other people has an incorrect preposition and an unnatural structure. Notice how others speak is a clearer grammatical structure.

× Such words that Sir, please, thank you and sorry.

✓ Words such as sir, please, thank you, and sorry are important.

Use such as to introduce examples. The original phrase lacks a complete sentence structure and uses the examples incorrectly after such words that. The word sir is normally lowercase unless it begins a sentence.

× I think a lot of occasions like birthday party, entertainment party, uh, speak politely to with other people.

✓ I think there are many occasions, such as birthday parties and entertainment events, when we should speak politely to other people.

The original sentence has no main verb for the phrase a lot of occasions. Use there are to introduce the occasions and when to connect them with the action of speaking politely.

× Like birthday party, entertainment party.

✓ Like birthday parties and entertainment events.

The sentence refers to occasions in general, so the countable nouns should be plural. Use birthday parties rather than birthday party. Entertainment events is also a suitable plural expression.

× Speak politely to with other people.

✓ Speak politely to other people.

The verb speak takes the preposition to before a person, but the sentence contains both to and with. Only to is needed here.

× It build a good relationship with the other.

✓ It builds good relationships with others.

The subject it is third-person singular, so the present-tense verb must be builds, not build. The plural form others is more appropriate when referring to people in general.

× It build a good relationship with the other.

✓ It builds good relationships with others.

The general meaning requires plural forms: relationships and others. The phrase the other is incomplete because other normally needs a noun or should be changed to the plural pronoun others.

× In a birthday entertainment party, polite language is very important.

✓ At a birthday party or an entertainment event, polite language is very important.

Use at for a specific event or party. The expression in a party is not the natural preposition in this context. Also, use or when presenting two possible types of events.

× When I am child, my parents always give me a good manners how to speak to with other people and build a good relationship with other.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always taught me good manners and how to speak to other people and build good relationships with them.

The question asks about childhood, so use the past forms was and taught. The phrase taught me good manners and how to speak is grammatically correct and clearly expresses the intended meaning.

× When I am child.

✓ When I was a child.

The singular countable noun child requires the article a. Because the sentence refers to a past period, am must also be changed to was.

× How to speak to with other people.

✓ How to speak to other people.

Speak to is the correct verb-preposition combination in this sentence. Do not use both to and with together.

× Build a good relationship with other.

✓ Build good relationships with others.

When discussing relationships with people in general, use the plural forms relationships and others. The pronoun other cannot stand alone in this meaning.

× So that's why I am uh, any any purchasing anythings.

✓ Whenever I purchased anything, I always said thank you, sorry, or please.

The original phrase is incomplete and contains repeated words. Whenever I purchased anything creates a complete time clause, followed by the main clause I always said. The words thank you, sorry, and please are expressions that are said, not kept.

× Whenever I purchased anythings, I always keep the thank you and sorry or please.

✓ Whenever I purchased anything, I always said thank you, sorry, or please.

The answer describes childhood behavior, so keep should be changed to the past form said. Anything is already singular in form and should not take the plural ending s.

× Whenever I purchased anythings.

✓ Whenever I purchased anything.

Anything is an indefinite pronoun and does not take a plural ending. Use anything, not anythings.

× I always keep the thank you and sorry or please.

✓ I always said thank you, sorry, or please.

Use or when listing alternative expressions that may be used in different situations. The original combination of and and or makes the relationship between the listed expressions unclear.

× Because it is the made a good good verse for the people.

✓ Because this made a good impression on people.

The original sentence has an incorrect verb structure and an unclear noun phrase. Use made a good impression on people to form a complete and natural clause explaining why the behavior was polite.