Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答方向正确，但有明显的语法、搭配和词汇错误。将“said a very good examples”改为“set a good example”，“a site”应为“a seat”，“keep minors”可能想表达“mind our manners”。注意时态统一：讲述童年经历时使用过去时；同时用完整句子和连接词组织例子。

例: When I was a child, my parents set a good example for me. For instance, they taught me to offer my seat to elderly people on the bus. My teachers also reminded us to mind our manners and show respect to others.

提案: 回答清晰，有直接观点和原因，但“the special basic respect”搭配不自然，“make the world more beautiful”略显空泛。可以使用更自然的表达，如“show basic respect”或“treat others with respect”，并补充一个具体结果，例如减少冲突或改善人际关系。

例: Absolutely. Being polite is very important because it shows basic respect for other people. It also helps us communicate more smoothly and avoid unnecessary conflicts, especially in a crowded society.

提案: 主要问题是关键词使用错误：“planets virtually”应改为“be polite in virtually every public place or situation”。“environment or situations”需要保持单复数一致。回答可以先概括“几乎所有场合”，再列举交通工具、学校、工作场所等具体例子，使内容更准确、更有说服力。

例: In my opinion, we should be polite in virtually every public place or situation. For example, we should speak respectfully on public transport, in the workplace, and when dealing with service staff. This helps us build good relationships and avoid unnecessary conflicts.

提案: 内容与问题相关，但需要改进时态、词序、可数名词和固定搭配。“I will say”应改为过去时“I said”，“every people”应为“everyone”，“say thank you and please”比“say thank you please”自然；“offer some site”应为“offer my seat”。建议减少停顿，并用“also”连接第二个行为。

例: As a child, I always said “please” when asking for something and “thank you” when someone helped me. I also tried to offer my seat to elderly or disabled passengers on public transport. These were simple but meaningful ways to show respect.

× When I was a child my parents said a very good examples for me.

✓ When I was a child, my parents set a very good example for me.

“a”后面必须接单数可数名词，因此不能使用复数“examples”。这里应使用单数“example”。同时，“set an example”是表示“树立榜样”的正确搭配。

× Like I'm offering a site for elderly people on the bus.

✓ For example, I offered my seat to elderly people on the bus.

原句以“Like”开头，缺少完整的主句结构，属于句子残缺。应使用完整句子，例如“For example, I offered...”。此外，问题询问过去的经历，所以使用过去时“offered”。

× Like I'm offering a site for elderly people on the bus.

✓ For example, I offered my seat to elderly people on the bus.

“When I was a child”说明事情发生在过去，因此动词应使用过去式“offered”，而不是现在进行时“am offering”。

× Besides, my teacher told us we need to keep minors for other people.

✓ Besides, my teacher told us that we needed to be considerate of other people.

“told us”引导间接引语时，后面的现在时“need”通常要根据过去时主句改为过去时“needed”。另外，“keep minors”不能表达原意；表示“为他人着想”可使用“be considerate of other people”。

× You need to have the special basic respect for other people so the world can be more beautiful.

✓ You need to have basic respect for other people so that the world can be a more beautiful place.

“basic respect”表示一般概念，通常不使用定冠词“the”。因此应删除“the”。“a more beautiful place”中的“a”用于表示一个更美好的地方。

× In my opinion, we should have planets virtually in every public environment or situations, so that we can have a good relationship with other people and we can avoid the unnecessary conflicts.

✓ In my opinion, we should be polite in virtually every public environment or situation, so that we can have good relationships with other people and avoid unnecessary conflicts.

“every”后面必须接单数名词，因此“situations”应改为“situation”。如果同时列举两个名词，也应保持形式一致：“environment or situation”。

× In my opinion, we should have planets virtually in every public environment or situations, so that we can have a good relationship with other people and we can avoid the unnecessary conflicts.

✓ In my opinion, we should be polite in virtually every public environment or situation, so that we can have good relationships with other people and avoid unnecessary conflicts.

“conflicts”在这里是泛指一般的冲突，不是特定的冲突，因此不应使用定冠词“the”。应改为“avoid unnecessary conflicts”。

× Well, firstly I will say thank you please to every people to express my sincere thanks for them and in the same time I will offer some, uh, site in the public.

✓ Well, firstly, I said “thank you” to every person to express my sincere thanks to them. At the same time, I offered my seat in public places.

“every”后面必须接单数可数名词，所以“every people”应改为“every person”。如果想表达复数“人们”，可以使用“all the people”，但不能使用“every people”。

× Well, firstly I will say thank you please to every people to express my sincere thanks for them and in the same time I will offer some, uh, site in the public.

✓ Well, firstly, I said “thank you” to every person to express my sincere thanks to them. At the same time, I offered my seat in public places.

“express thanks”后面通常使用介词“to”表示感谢的对象，因此“thanks for them”应改为“thanks to them”。固定短语是“at the same time”，不能说“in the same time”。

× Well, firstly I will say thank you please to every people to express my sincere thanks for them and in the same time I will offer some, uh, site in the public.

✓ Well, firstly, I said “thank you” to every person to express my sincere thanks to them. At the same time, I offered my seat in public places.

问题询问“你小时候做了什么”，描述的是过去的经历，因此应使用过去时“said”和“offered”，而不是表示将来的“will say”和“will offer”。