Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，也给出了父母和学校两个来源，但有明显语法和搭配错误，例如“carry it when me”应改为“corrected me”，“promised me when I should good manners”表达不清。建议使用清晰的结构：先直接回答，再分别说明父母和老师的影响，最后给出一个具体例子。注意使用完整句子，并避免“for example”后停顿或断句。

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and my teachers. My parents taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” while my teachers corrected me whenever I was rude. For example, my mother praised me whenever I used good manners, so I gradually developed this habit.

提案: 回答观点明确，并说明了礼貌有助于相处和表达尊重，但后半部分有严重的词语和句子问题。“the auto machine is better”与语境不符，可能想表达“the atmosphere is better”；“competition is easier”也不准确，建议使用“communication becomes easier”。结尾句不完整，应直接说明自己在日常生活中会如何做。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps people get along. For example, saying “thank you” or “sorry” at work can create a more comfortable atmosphere and make communication easier. That is why I try to use good manners in my daily life.

提案: 回答提到了社交场合和工作场合，方向正确，但语法错误较多：“in social”应改为“in social situations”，“I was always say”应改为“Whenever I ask”，“this makes competitions”不符合语境。建议明确列出场合，并使用一个具体、自然的办公室例子来支持观点。

例: We should be polite in social situations, at work, and whenever we ask someone for help. For instance, I always say “please” when I ask a colleague for assistance in the office. This shows respect and makes people more willing to help me.

提案: 回答能够直接说明小时候使用“please”和“thank you”，并提到感谢老师，但存在明显语法和表达问题。“to adult either this”应改为“to adults”，“My toys with friends”应改为“share my toys with my friends”。建议把两个行为分别说清楚，并用过去时保持一致。

例: When I was a child, I showed politeness by saying “please” and “thank you” to adults. I also thanked my teacher after class and shared my toys with my friends. My parents taught me that these actions were respectful and helped me get along with others.

× My parents always taught me to say please and thank you and my teachers would carry it when me when I was rude.

✓ My parents always taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teachers would correct me when I was rude.

“carry it when me”结构不完整，动词和宾语搭配错误。这里需要使用完整的动词短语“correct me”，表示“纠正我”。

× My mom promised me when I should good manners so I kept doing it.

✓ My mom reminded me that I should use good manners, so I kept doing it.

情态动词“should”后面必须接动词原形，不能直接接名词“good manners”。应说“should use good manners”。同时，句中需要使用“that”连接从句。

× My mom promised me when I should good manners so I kept doing it.

✓ My mom reminded me that I should use good manners, so I kept doing it.

原句中的“when I should good manners”结构不完整，时间连词“when”在这里不能正确连接句意。应使用“that”引导宾语从句，并补充动词“use”。

× So I always try to be. In daily life.

✓ So I always try to be polite in daily life.

“try to be”后面缺少补语，不能单独构成完整句子。应在“be”后面加形容词“polite”，并将“In daily life”放在句末。

× So I always try to be. In daily life.

✓ So I always try to be polite in daily life.

原句被错误地拆成两个不完整的部分。应将“in daily life”放回完整句子中，并补充“polite”使句子结构完整。

× I think we should be polite in social and at work because it shows respect and helps communication.

✓ I think we should be polite in social situations and at work because it shows respect and helps communication.

“in social”后面缺少名词，导致短语不完整。“social”是形容词，应与名词“situations”搭配，组成“in social situations”。

× For example, I was always say please and thank you, but I ask for help at the office and this makes uh competitions.

✓ For example, I always say “please” and “thank you” when I ask for help at the office, and this makes communication easier.

这里描述的是现在经常发生的习惯，应使用一般现在时“say”，不能使用“was say”。一般现在时中，主语“I”后直接使用动词原形“say”。

× For example, I was always say please and thank you, but I ask for help at the office and this makes uh competitions.

✓ For example, I always say “please” and “thank you” when I ask for help at the office, and this makes communication easier.

“but”表示转折，但前后内容并没有明显的转折关系。这里应使用“when”表示“当我在办公室寻求帮助时”，使两个动作之间的关系更准确。

× Uh, well when I was a child I used to always say please and thank you to adult either this because my parents taught me it was respectful and it helped me get along with people.

✓ Uh, well, when I was a child, I used to always say “please” and “thank you” to adults because my parents taught me that it was respectful and it helped me get along with people.

“adult”表示一个成年人，而这里泛指成年人，应使用复数“adults”。泛指一类人时，通常使用可数名词的复数形式。

× Uh, well when I was a child I used to always say please and thank you to adult either this because my parents taught me it was respectful and it helped me get along with people.

✓ Uh, well, when I was a child, I used to always say “please” and “thank you” to adults because my parents taught me that it was respectful and it helped me get along with people.

“either this because”不能构成正确的连接关系。此处应使用“because”直接说明原因；“that”可用于引导“my parents taught me”的宾语从句。

× I would thank my teacher after class and. My toys with friends.

✓ I would thank my teacher after class and share my toys with my friends.

“My toys with friends”没有谓语动词，因此不是完整句子。应补充动词“share”，并与前面的“thank”保持并列结构。

× I would thank my teacher after class and. My toys with friends.

✓ I would thank my teacher after class and share my toys with my friends.

“and”后面被错误地断句，导致后半部分成为句子碎片。应把“share my toys with my friends”与前面的“thank my teacher”连接在同一个句子中。