Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答结构清晰，直接说明了父母和老师的影响，也提供了具体例子。主要问题是搭配不够自然：应说“taught me about politeness”或“taught me to be polite”，而不是“taught me some politeness”。另外，“Mostly from my parents”可以改成完整句，使表达更流畅。

例: I mainly learned to be polite from my parents because they always set a good example. They taught me to use words such as “please,” “sorry,” and “thank you.” My teachers also encouraged me to help others and follow social rules.

提案: 观点明确，理由充分，且使用了“because”和“for example”来展开。不过需要注意主谓一致和词形：应为“they help build relationships”，而不是“it also helps build relationship”；“saying thank you and listening carefully”中的两个动词形式要保持一致。最后的例子可以更自然地融入句子。

例: Yes, politeness is important because it shows respect and consideration for other people. Good manners make social interactions smoother and help us build positive relationships with friends, classmates, and even strangers. For instance, saying “thank you” and listening carefully can make others feel valued.

提案: 回答切题，并且通过上大学的经历提供了具体例子，但语法和标点影响了准确性。应将“demonstrate”改为“demonstrates”，并将“help”改为“helps”；“for example”前需要停顿或连接词。还可以避免重复“build relationships”，让表达更简洁自然。

例: We should be especially polite when meeting someone for the first time because a good first impression shows respect and helps us connect with them. For example, when I started university, I introduced myself warmly and offered to help my new classmates. This made it easier for us to become friends.

提案: 回答有清晰的个人经历和具体例子，但存在拼写、时态、代词和搭配问题：“plite”应为“polite”；由于谈论过去，应说“whenever I could”；“the elderly people”可改为“elderly passengers”；最后的“he made me feel proud”指代不清，应改为“it made me feel proud”或“they appreciated it”。

例: When I was young, I often used polite words such as “sorry” and “thank you” to show respect. I also helped others whenever I could. For example, I once gave up my seat to an elderly passenger on a bus. I felt that it was the right thing to do, and this made me proud.

× Mostly from my parents, they set good examples by being polite themselves.

✓ I learned mostly from my parents because they set good examples by being polite themselves.

“Mostly from my parents”本身没有完整的主语和谓语，不能单独构成完整句子。可以补充主语“I learned”，并用“because”连接原因，使句子结构完整、逻辑清晰。

× Good manners can make social interactions smoother and it also helps build relationship with friends, classmates or even strangers, for example, saying thank you and listen carefully.

✓ Good manners can make social interactions smoother, and they also help build relationships with friends, classmates, or even strangers, for example, by saying thank you and listening carefully.

“Good manners”是复数主语，所以后面应使用“help”，不能使用“helps”。“relationship”在这里表示与多个不同人建立关系，应使用复数“relationships”。此外，“saying”和“listening”应保持平行结构。

× We should be polite when we meet people for the first time because a good first impression demonstrate respect and help us build relationships for example, when I came to university, I introduced myself and offered help to my classmates, which helped me build relationships with them.

✓ We should be polite when we meet people for the first time because a good first impression demonstrates respect and helps us build relationships. For example, when I came to university, I introduced myself and offered help to my classmates, which helped me build relationships with them.

主语“a good first impression”是第三人称单数，因此谓语动词要使用第三人称单数形式：“demonstrates”和“helps”，而不是“demonstrate”和“help”。

× Good manners can make social interactions smoother and it also helps build relationship with friends, classmates or even strangers, for example, saying thank you and listen carefully.

✓ Good manners can make social interactions smoother, and they also help build relationships with friends, classmates, or even strangers, for example, by saying thank you and listening carefully.

“saying thank you”和“listening carefully”都是例子，应该使用相同的动词形式。前面使用了动名词“saying”，所以后面也应使用“listening”，不能使用动词原形“listen”。“by”表示“通过某种方式”，后面通常接动名词。

× When I was young, I usually used plite words such as sorry and thank you to show my respect to others. In addition, I also helped others whenever I can.

✓ When I was young, I usually used polite words such as “sorry” and “thank you” to show my respect to others. In addition, I also helped others whenever I could.

整段是在描述过去的经历，前面使用了过去时“was”“used”“helped”，所以“can”也应改为过去式“could”。另外，“plite”是拼写错误，正确拼写是“polite”。

× For example, I offered my seat to the elderly people in a bus.

✓ For example, I offered my seat to the elderly people on a bus.

表示乘坐公共汽车时，英语通常使用介词“on”，因此应说“on a bus”，而不是“in a bus”。“in a bus”强调人在公交车内部，通常不用于表达乘坐某种公共交通工具。

× I felt it was the right thing to do and he made me feel proud.

✓ I felt it was the right thing to do, and it made me feel proud.

这里的“he”是男性人称代词，但前文没有明确提到男性人物。真正使“我”感到自豪的是“主动让座这件事”，所以应使用指代事情的代词“it”，而不是“he”。