Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid saying that you did not need to learn politeness, which sounds unclear. Explain that you learned mainly by observing and imitating your parents, teachers, and grandparents. Use accurate expressions such as “I learned politeness from” and “I imitated their behavior,” and finish with a specific example. Avoid incomplete phrases such as “this is the must have.”

例: I learned to be polite mainly by observing my parents, teachers, and grandparents. They always used expressions like “please” and “thank you,” so I naturally imitated them. They also taught me to listen carefully and respect older people. As a result, politeness became a normal part of my behavior.

提案: State your opinion clearly at the beginning, for example, “Yes, I think politeness is very important.” Then give one or two connected reasons. Avoid repetition of ideas such as being heard, visible, welcomed, and winning friends, and use correct forms such as “listen to you” and “by being polite.” Complete your final sentence instead of leaving it unfinished.

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people communicate comfortably and build trust. When we use respectful language, others are more willing to listen to us and respond positively. For example, saying “please” and “thank you” can make even a short conversation more pleasant.

提案: Give a direct answer by identifying particular occasions, such as meeting strangers, speaking to older people, attending formal events, or dealing with service staff. Your main idea that politeness should be shown everywhere is useful, but avoid vague phrases like “adopt this special character.” Also, remove the unfinished ending and use a clear linking structure such as “For example” or “In particular.”

例: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially in formal situations or when meeting someone for the first time. For example, we should speak respectfully to teachers, older people, and customers. Even when we are upset, remaining polite helps us avoid unnecessary arguments and maintain good relationships.

提案: Give specific examples of polite actions, such as saying “please” and “thank you,” listening without interrupting, helping your parents, or greeting guests. Correct the grammar in phrases such as “which worked like magic,” “listen to them,” and “make sure.” The phrase “give them reward” is not natural here; explain that you showed appreciation or thanked them instead. Organize the answer with a clear example and result.

例: As a child, I showed politeness by saying “please” and “thank you” and by listening to my parents without interrupting them. I also helped with household chores and greeted visitors politely. These small actions made my family happy and showed that I respected them.

× I don't think so I had ever needed to learn how to be polite.

✓ I don't think I have ever needed to learn how to be polite.

After I don't think, use a complete clause with the subject I. The present perfect have ever needed is appropriate because the speaker is describing experience up to the present.

× Most of that feature I immied from my elder, from my parents, from my teacher, grandparents, because this is the must have.

✓ I imitated most of that behavior from my elders, including my parents, teachers, and grandparents, because politeness is a must.

The original sentence has an unclear structure and an incomplete expression at the end. Use a clear subject-verb-object order and a complete noun phrase after is.

× Most of that feature I immied from my elder, from my parents, from my teacher, grandparents, because this is the must have.

✓ I imitated most of that behavior from my elders, including my parents, teachers, and grandparents, because politeness is a must.

Elders, parents, teachers, and grandparents refer to more than one person, so plural nouns are needed.

× Most of that feature I immied from my elder, from my parents, from my teacher, grandparents, because this is the must have.

✓ I imitated most of that behavior from my elders, including my parents, teachers, and grandparents, because politeness is a must.

The expression a must means something essential or necessary. The article a is used before must in this expression, not the.

× I really do things because it opens the door for many people to become your friends and to listen your voice because in this life we want to be heard, to be visible and want to welcome all other in our life and win over as friends. So by being a polite, we can have

✓ I really do think so because politeness opens the door for many people to become our friends and listen to our voices. In this life, we want to be heard, to be visible, and to welcome others into our lives as friends. So, by being polite, we can build positive relationships.

The original response contains incomplete and improperly connected clauses. Use complete clauses and maintain parallel structures such as to be heard, to be visible, and to welcome others.

× I really do things because it opens the door for many people to become your friends and to listen your voice because in this life we want to be heard, to be visible and want to welcome all other in our life and win over as friends. So by being a polite, we can have

✓ I really do think so because politeness opens the door for many people to become our friends and listen to our voices. In this life, we want to be heard, to be visible, and to welcome others into our lives as friends. So, by being polite, we can build positive relationships.

The verb listen requires the preposition to before its object. Also, the natural preposition is into in welcome others into our lives.

× I really do things because it opens the door for many people to become your friends and to listen your voice because in this life we want to be heard, to be visible and want to welcome all other in our life and win over as friends. So by being a polite, we can have

✓ I really do think so because politeness opens the door for many people to become our friends and listen to our voices. In this life, we want to be heard, to be visible, and to welcome others into our lives as friends. So, by being polite, we can build positive relationships.

Polite is an adjective, so it cannot be used with the article a in by being a polite. Use the adjective alone after being: by being polite.

× It should be part of your personality wherever you go, whether it is a happy moment or a sad moment you have to carry that politeness with you so that you can present yourself in an effective way and be by being

✓ It should be part of your personality wherever you go. Whether you are having a happy or sad moment, you should carry that politeness with you so that you can present yourself effectively.

The original sentence contains a run-on structure and ends with an incomplete phrase, be by being. Divide the ideas into complete sentences and remove the unfinished clause.

× I used to say thank you and praise which work as magic on everybody during my childhood.

✓ I used to say thank you and give praise, which worked like magic on everybody during my childhood.

The phrase refers to actions that happened during childhood, so the past-tense form worked is needed instead of work.

× Besides this I used to help my parents and tried hard to listen them with politeness.

✓ Besides this, I used to help my parents and try hard to listen to them politely.

After used to, use the base form of the verb: used to help and try, not used to help and tried. Keeping both verbs in the base form makes the structure parallel.

× Besides this I used to help my parents and tried hard to listen them with politeness.

✓ Besides this, I used to help my parents and try hard to listen to them politely.

Listen requires the preposition to before a person or thing: listen to them.

× I always made it sure that I should give them reward in polite way.

✓ I always made sure that I should give them a reward in a polite way.

The countable noun reward needs the article a when it is singular. The singular countable noun way also needs an article: in a polite way. The natural expression is made sure, not made it sure.