Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，结构也比较清楚：先说明父母的影响，再补充老师的教育。主要问题是最后一句语法和表达不完整，“as school”应改为“at school”，并且“my teacher”最好改为复数或说明具体做法。可以加入一个更具体的例子，并使用“Besides”或“They also”连接信息，使答案更自然。

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you” and to listen when other people were speaking. If I forgot my manners, they would gently correct me. Besides, my teachers taught us to respect our classmates at school.

提案: 答案有明确观点，也提供了两个理由，但最后一句存在严重语法问题。“In my culture are where always trying”应改为“In my culture, we always try to be polite”。建议加入具体场景或结果，例如初次见面时使用礼貌用语可以让对方感到受尊重，从而建立良好关系。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps people get along. In my culture, we usually make an effort to be polite, especially when meeting someone for the first time. For example, using polite language and listening carefully can make a good first impression. As a result, people are more likely to feel comfortable around each other.

提案: 你回答了问题，并提到了“初次见面”这一具体场合，但句子连接不自然，不能用“Because”单独开始一个句子；“for first time”应为“for the first time”，“friend parents”应为“a friend’s parents”，“introducing self force”应改为“introducing yourself properly”。建议使用“because”和“For example”连接完整句子，并减少表达错误。

例: We should be polite in many situations, especially when meeting someone for the first time. This is because a first impression can influence a future relationship. For example, when I meet a friend’s parents, I greet them respectfully and introduce myself properly. These small actions can help build trust.

提案: 答案包含多个例子，但有较多时态、词汇和句子结构问题。“I have classmates and teachers”应改为“I helped my classmates and teachers”，“procracked books”应改为“provided books”或“passed books”，“I also give”应改为过去式“I also gave”。建议先用主题句概括，再按时间顺序列举两个具体行为，避免不清楚的表达。

例: As a child, I tried to help people whenever I could. I helped my classmates and teachers by passing them books and cleaning the classroom. I also gave up my seat to elderly passengers on the bus. These were simple ways to show respect and consideration.

× If I forgot they would correct me and my teacher also taught us to respect others as school.

✓ If I forgot, they would correct me, and my teacher also taught us to respect others at school.

表示“在学校”时应使用介词“at”，而不是“as”。“at school”是固定搭配。

× In my culture are where always trying to be polite especially when meeting someone for the first time.

✓ In my culture, we are always trying to be polite, especially when meeting someone for the first time.

原句中主语“we”和系动词“are”的位置错误，而且“where”不能放在这里。正确结构是“In my culture, we are...”。

× We should be polite on many occasions, especially when meeting someone for first time.

✓ We should be polite on many occasions, especially when meeting someone for the first time.

序数词或表示特定顺序的短语前通常要使用定冠词“the”，所以应说“the first time”。

× Because first impression can affect the future relationships for example, when meeting a friend parents, introducing self force can help build trust.

✓ A first impression can affect future relationships. For example, when meeting a friend's parents, introducing yourself politely can help build trust.

“first impression”表示一次具体的第一印象，前面需要不定冠词“a”。“future relationships”是泛指复数，不需要“the”。另外，“a friend's parents”中的“a”表示某位朋友，“friend's”表示所属关系。

× Because first impression can affect the future relationships for example, when meeting a friend parents, introducing self force can help build trust.

✓ A first impression can affect future relationships. For example, when meeting a friend's parents, introducing yourself politely can help build trust.

动名词短语的逻辑主语是“你自己”，所以应使用反身代词“yourself”，不能使用“self”。“introducing yourself”表示“介绍自己”。

× Because first impression can affect the future relationships for example, when meeting a friend parents, introducing self force can help build trust.

✓ A first impression can affect future relationships. For example, when meeting a friend's parents, introducing yourself politely can help build trust.

“force”不能表示“礼貌地”。修饰动词“introducing”应使用副词“politely”，表示“礼貌地介绍自己”。

× I have classmates and teachers when they need something.

✓ I helped my classmates and teachers when they needed something.

问题询问的是童年时的经历，因此应使用一般过去时。“have”应改为“helped”，“need”也应改为过去式“needed”，以保持时态一致。

× For example, I would have procracked books and clean the classroom.

✓ For example, I would pick up books and clean the classroom.

表示过去经常做的事情时，“would”后面应直接接动词原形，不能使用“would have + 过去分词”。并列动词应保持形式一致，因此使用“pick up”和“clean”。

× I also give my seat to old people on the bus.

✓ I also gave my seat to older people on the bus.

题目询问过去的童年行为，因此“give”应使用一般过去时“gave”。