Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with a complete sentence and explain how your parents taught you polite behavior. Correct “when I was a childhood” to “when I was a child,” and avoid ending with an incomplete clause such as “my dad told me.” Add a specific example and use a linking word such as “also” or “for example.”

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. When I was a child, my mother taught me to speak quietly in public, while my father reminded me to greet people respectfully. For example, I was expected to say “please” when asking for something and “thank you” when receiving it.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two reasons. Use the adjective “polite” correctly by saying “being polite” or “politeness,” and replace “for whole people” with “for everyone.” Avoid repetition such as “really really” and complete the unfinished sentence after “So if we use.”

例: Yes, I think being polite is essential for everyone because it shows respect and makes communication more pleasant. It also helps people build positive relationships. For example, using expressions like “please” and “thank you” can make even a short conversation feel more friendly.

提案: Mention several specific situations instead of focusing only on saying “thank you.” Improve the grammar by saying “saying thank you is enough in some situations” and avoid fillers such as “it seems that like.” Organize the answer with examples and linking words, such as “especially,” “for instance,” and “however.”

例: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially in formal situations. For instance, we should use polite language when speaking to teachers, older people, or customers. We should also say “please,” “thank you,” and “sorry” in everyday situations because these small expressions show respect.

提案: Directly describe an action you took to show politeness, rather than mainly describing a mistake. Use correct reported speech, such as “my mum told me not to do that,” and complete the final sentence. Explain how you responded and what polite behavior you adopted afterward.

例: When I was ten, I showed politeness by apologizing when I made a mistake. I sometimes spoke too loudly at home or in public, so my mum told me to lower my voice. I listened to her and said, “I’m sorry. I’ll try to speak more quietly next time.”

× For me, when I was a childhood...

✓ For me, when I was a child...

Childhood is an uncountable noun referring to a period of life, so it cannot be used after a. Use the countable noun child in the expression when I was a child.

× My mum told me you should be quiet in a public place...

✓ My mum told me that I should be quiet in public places...

When reporting what someone said, the pronoun should change from you to I because the mother was speaking to the student. That can also be used to introduce the reported clause.

× ...and my dad told me

✓ ...and my dad told me the same thing.

The sentence is incomplete because told me needs an object or a complete reported message. Adding the same thing completes the sentence and avoids repeating the information.

× Polite is really essential for whole people because polite I think it is really really natural basic manner to us.

✓ Politeness is really essential for all people because, I think, it is a natural and basic way for us to show respect.

Polite is an adjective, but the subject of the sentence should be the noun politeness. The phrase polite I think it is also has an unnecessary repetition of the subject and pronoun. Use politeness or it, but not both as the subject.

× It is really essential for whole people...

✓ It is really essential for all people...

Whole people is not the natural quantifier for referring to everyone in a group. Use all people or everyone instead.

× ...a natural basic manner to us.

✓ ...a natural and basic way for us to show respect.

The preposition to is incorrect in this meaning. Use for us when describing something that is useful or important for people. The phrase way for us to show respect is also more natural than manner to us.

× So if we use

✓ So, if we use polite language, we can show respect.

The original expression is an incomplete conditional clause. A clause beginning with if needs a main clause to complete the meaning. Add a result clause such as we can show respect.

× It is really simple, I think, because it seems that like we just say thank you it is too enough...

✓ It is really simple, I think, because we just need to say thank you. That is enough...

The original sentence combines several clauses without clear punctuation or structure. Remove the unnecessary expressions it seems that and like, and separate the ideas into two complete sentences.

× ...it is too enough...

✓ ...that is enough...

Too means more than necessary and cannot normally be used before enough. Use enough by itself when you mean that something is sufficient.

× Thank you is really simple manner...

✓ Saying thank you is a really simple way to show good manners...

A singular countable noun such as way needs an article. Also, saying thank you is the appropriate noun phrase when referring to the act of expressing thanks.

× My mom told me don't do that.

✓ My mom told me not to do that.

After tell someone in reported speech, use the structure tell plus object plus not to plus verb. Therefore, told me don't do that should be changed to told me not to do that.

× So I just said, Oh sorry it is

✓ So I just said, Oh, I am sorry.

The original utterance ends with the incomplete expression it is. Use the complete apology I am sorry. A comma after Oh is also needed because it is an interjection.