Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答有直接回应问题，也提到了父母的示范作用，但存在明显的语法、搭配和重复问题，例如“learned quite quite”“remind”应使用过去时“reminded”，“show”应为“showed”，“learn by them”应改为“learned from them”。“respect for behavior”表达不自然。建议使用“首先说明来源，然后给出具体例子，最后总结”，并控制在3—4句内。

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they showed respect when talking to guests. By watching their behavior, I gradually learned how to treat other people politely.

提案: 回答的观点明确，但第一句“maybe we are a child”无法表达清晰意思，且“polite”重复；“we will into the corporations”语法和词义错误，可能想表达“进入职场”。“polite”是形容词，应使用名词“politeness”。建议先明确表态，再说明礼貌有助于沟通和建立良好关系，并使用准确的连接词。

例: Yes, definitely. Politeness is important because it helps people communicate smoothly and build good relationships. We learn this from our parents and teachers, and it is also useful when we enter the workplace.

提案: 回答列举了求职面试、课堂和见对方父母等场合，内容方向正确，也有具体例子。但“place”应改为“places”或直接说“occasions”，“such as attend”应改为“such as attending”，“them parents”应改为“their parents”，并且“school classes”不是最自然的场合表达。建议用“especially”引出重点场合，并用一个完整例子展开。

例: We should be polite in formal or unfamiliar situations, especially during job interviews, in class, and when meeting someone’s parents. For example, when I meet my friends’ parents, I greet them warmly and say goodbye before I leave. This helps me make a good first impression.

提案: 回答尝试提供例子，但“when I would choke”似乎是口误或不完整表达，导致内容不清楚；“I always be polite”“some channel”也存在严重语法和词汇问题。不要先说“记不清”，可以选择一个普通但具体的童年行为，例如向长辈问好、说谢谢、等待别人说完。建议使用过去时，并按照“行为＋场合＋结果”的结构回答。

例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults and saying “please” and “thank you.” For example, whenever I visited someone’s home, I said hello to their parents and thanked them before leaving. My parents were happy because I behaved respectfully.

× When I was a child, I learned quite quite from my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I learned a lot from my parents.

“quite quite”不能这样重复使用来表示“很多”。这里需要使用副词短语“a lot”，修饰动词“learned”，表示“学到了很多”。

× They always remind me to say thank you and please.

✓ They always reminded me to say thank you and please.

前文使用了过去时“When I was a child”，所以这里描述童年时期的习惯，也应该使用一般过去时“reminded”，而不是现在时“remind”。

× And when guests came into my home, they always show respect for behavior.

✓ And when guests came into my home, they always showed respectful behavior.

“came”是过去时，因此并列的动词“show”也应改为过去式“showed”。“respect for behavior”搭配不自然，使用“showed respectful behavior”更符合语法和表达习惯。

× So I learn by them by watching them.

✓ So I learned from them by watching them.

这里是在回忆童年经历，应使用过去式“learned”。表示“向某人学习”时使用介词“from”，所以应说“learned from them”，而不是“learn by them”。

× Yes, of course maybe we are a child.

✓ Yes, of course. Maybe when we are children, we learn to be polite.

主语“we”表示复数，不能与单数名词“a child”搭配，应改为复数“children”。同时补充“we learn to be polite”，使句子结构完整。

× My parents and teachers always told me to be polite polite and in the future, we will into the corporations.

✓ My parents and teachers always told me to be polite, and in the future, we will enter companies.

“will”后面必须接动词原形，不能直接接介词“into”，所以应使用“will enter”。“be polite polite”中的重复词应删除。

× I think polite is basic to communication.

✓ I think politeness is basic to communication.

“polite”是形容词，不能在这里作主语表示“礼貌”这一抽象概念。应使用名词“politeness”。

× I think we should place in some important locations such as attend some job interviews and school classes for example.

✓ I think we should be polite in some important situations, such as job interviews and school classes.

“should place in”句子结构不完整，不能表达“在某些场合应该有礼貌”。应使用“should be polite in...”。“such as”后面应直接接名词短语，因此将“attend some job interviews”改为“job interviews”。

× When I meet someone's parents I always say hello and goodbye to them parents.

✓ When I meet someone's parents, I always say hello and goodbye to them.

“them”已经是代词，后面不能再接名词“parents”。可以说“to them”，或者说“to their parents”，但不能把两者同时使用。

× It helped me make a good impression.

✓ It helps me make a good impression.

这里描述的是一般情况下礼貌带来的效果，而不是某一次已经结束的经历，因此应使用一般现在时“helps”。

× When I would choke, oh that's pretty long ago.

✓ When I was a child, oh, that was a long time ago.

“would choke”不能表达“当我还是个孩子时”，这里应使用“was a child”。因为是在回忆过去，所以“that's”也应改为过去时“was”。固定表达是“a long time ago”，而不是“pretty long ago”。

× I can't remember special things but I think I used to meet someone's parents I always be polite.

✓ I can't remember any specific things, but I think that when I met someone's parents, I was always polite.

原句缺少连接词和完整的从句结构。“when I met someone's parents”用于引出时间，“I was always polite”是完整主句。过去习惯或过去状态应使用过去时“was”。

× I always be polite.

✓ I was always polite.

“be”不能直接放在主语“I”后面表示过去状态。因为这里讲的是童年时期的情况，应使用过去式“was”。

× Some channel say for example say hello and goodbye to the parent.

✓ For example, I said hello and goodbye to their parents.

“Some channel”不能构成符合语境的句子，且“say”重复使用，句子结构混乱。这里应使用完整句“I said...”来举例。因为描述过去经历，动词使用过去式“said”。

× Say hello and goodbye to the parent.

✓ I said hello and goodbye to their parents.

如果指某人的父母，应使用复数“parents”，而不是单数“parent”。同时补充主语“I”，并将“say”改为过去式“said”，使句子完整并符合上下文。