Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer more directly and complete your final idea. Correct the phrase “keen on bringing up with manners” to “keen on teaching us good manners” or “keen on bringing us up politely.” Avoid repetition such as “other other people,” and explain one specific way your parents taught you to be polite. Do not end with an incomplete sentence.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” listen carefully when others were speaking, and show respect to older people. As I grew up, I realized that these simple habits helped me communicate more effectively.

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well organized. To sound more natural and effective, avoid repeating “being polite is very important” and use a more precise phrase such as “make a good first impression.” Add a brief example to support your point, while keeping the answer concise.

例: Yes, definitely. Politeness helps us make a good first impression and build positive relationships, both socially and professionally. For example, speaking respectfully to a colleague can make it easier to cooperate and earn their trust.

提案: Your main idea is clear, but some expressions are unnatural or unclear. Replace “there are certain occasions where” with “there are specific occasions when,” and replace “being very original” with “being genuine” or “showing our true character.” Clarify the unclear phrase “in front of some India,” avoid fillers such as “uh” and “you know,” and include one concrete example, such as speaking politely during a disagreement.

例: I think we should be polite at all times, rather than only on special occasions. It shows our character and demonstrates that we respect everyone equally. For example, even when we disagree with a colleague, we should express our opinion calmly and respectfully.

提案: The answer is relevant and includes a specific example, but use the past simple consistently because the question asks about childhood: “I used” rather than “I've used.” Avoid repeating “extremely,” and improve the final structure by saying “They helped me communicate with others and make a positive impression.” You could also mention another polite behavior, such as greeting adults or offering help.

例: As a child, I usually showed politeness by using words like “please,” “sorry,” and “thank you.” I also greeted adults respectfully and listened when they were speaking. These habits were part of my education, and they helped me communicate well and make a positive impression.

× OK, as a child, uh, we are taught to be polite from our home itself.

✓ OK, as children, uh, we were taught to be polite at home.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the past tense were taught is required instead of the present tense are taught. At home is the natural prepositional phrase in this context.

× Our parents were very keen on bringing up with manners and how to deal with other other people in general.

✓ Our parents were very keen on bringing us up with good manners and teaching us how to deal with other people in general.

The phrasal verb bring up requires an object, such as us. The sentence also needs a parallel verb, teaching, before how to deal with other people.

× But growing up, I've realized.

✓ But as I grew up, I realized its importance.

The original sentence is incomplete because realized normally needs an object or a following clause in this context. Adding its importance completes the sentence and makes the meaning clear.

× Personally, I don't believe there are certain occasions where we have to be polite.

✓ Personally, I don't believe there are certain occasions when we have to be polite.

When is the appropriate relative word for referring to occasions or times. Where is generally used for places.

× As a child, I've shown politeness wherever possible.

✓ As a child, I showed politeness wherever possible.

The time expression as a child refers to a completed period in the past, so the simple past showed is more appropriate than the present perfect have shown.

× I've always used the magic words like sorry, please, thank you.

✓ I always used magic words like sorry, please, and thank you.

Because the sentence refers to the student's childhood, the simple past used fits the completed past period better than the present perfect have used.

× These were part of our education, so we learned it is extremely, extremely essential to use them to communicate with others, give them a positive impression about us.

✓ These were part of our education, so we learned that it was extremely essential to use them to communicate with others and give them a positive impression of us.

The clause needs that after learned to introduce the information being learned. The two purposes should also be parallel: to communicate and give. The phrase a positive impression of us is the correct construction.