Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子有语法和用词错误，表达有些重复且不够连贯。回答应更直接地回应问题，使用一到两句主题句说明学习方式，再用一到两句具体例子支持。注意人称和时态一致，避免多余词语。举例说明时用更自然的短语，如 “greet elders” 和 “show respect”。

例: My parents taught me to be polite from a young age. For example, whenever we visited my grandparents or family friends, they encouraged me to greet elders with a handshake or a polite “hello” to show respect.

提案: 观点明确但表达混乱且有语法错误（主谓不一致、代词使用错误）。应先给出简洁的立场句，然后用两点具体理由支持，每点用连接词衔接。避免笼统表述，多说明为什么会舒适、为何自豪。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it makes social interactions smoother and helps build mutual respect. If someone treats me kindly, I feel comfortable and more willing to cooperate, and being polite myself gives me a sense of personal pride.

提案: 回答含混且句子结构问题多。应先给出要点（例如：meeting someone, workplace, family gatherings），然后用具体例子或简短解释支持。使用连接词如 “for example” 或 “also” 使逻辑更清楚。避免单句堆砌。

例: We should be polite on many occasions, especially when we first meet someone and in professional settings. For example, greeting a new colleague respectfully and listening patiently in meetings can leave a good impression.

提案: 内容简单且有明显用词错误（“smelliness”明显不合适），句子重复且不连贯。应先说明一两种具体行为（如 smiling, saying thank you, helping），随后解释原因或结果。保持句子简短，避免重复。

例: As a child, I often smiled and said “thank you” to show politeness. For example, when I helped my grandparents with small chores and greeted them warmly, they usually smiled and seemed pleased.

× They always taught me to greet elders and older relatives while I miss them.

✓ They always taught me to greet elders and older relatives when I met them.

句中使用了 while I miss them，時態和語境不符。根據句子上下文描述過去習慣，應使用過去式或過去式時間連接詞，如 when I met them。建議將 while 換成 when，並把 miss 改為過去式 met。

× For example, whenever we visit grandparents or family friends, I would say hello and both likely to show respect.

✓ For example, whenever we visited grandparents or family friends, I would say hello and try to show respect.

原句的 both likely to 結構不合英語語法且副詞和動詞位置錯亂。此處意圖表達“試圖表現出尊重”，宜用 try to show；同時前文為敘述過去習慣，將 visit 改為過去式 visited。

× Indeed, it counts from my perspective if one people is polite to me, I will feel very comfortable and want to live in harmony with him.

✓ Indeed, from my perspective, if one person is polite to me, I will feel very comfortable and want to live in harmony with them.

原句中 one people 使用錯誤，one 要接單數名詞 person；另外代詞 him 與不特定單數人搭配時用性別中性代詞 them 更自然且避免性別假設。句首的位置也可調整為 from my perspective。

× Also, while I is very polite, I will achieve a great sense of pride.

✓ Also, if I am very polite, I will have a great sense of pride.

原句使用 while I is 不符合語法且時態不當。應使用 if 引導條件句，且 be 動詞用 am。動詞 achieve 與 pride 的搭配不自然，常用 have a sense of pride。

× There are a lot of occasions for me the most important condition is when I first met someone.

✓ There are a lot of occasions for me, but the most important one is when I first meet someone.

原句缺少連接詞導致句子結構混亂；另外時態應與一般情況保持一致，使用現在式 meet（表示普遍情況）。將句子分成兩部分並加連接詞 but 或者用逗號和關係代詞重構更通順。

× I think being patient is a good way to impress others a good characteristic for.

✓ I think being patient is a good way to impress others and is a good characteristic to have.

原句缺少連接詞且結構不完整，a good characteristic for 後面缺賓語。用 and 連接兩個並列部分，並用 to have 完成表達。

× When I was a kid, I always smiled to someone in order to show my politeness.

✓ When I was a kid, I always smiled at people in order to show my politeness.

英文中常用 smile at 表示對某人微笑，不能用 smile to；同時 someone 改為複數或泛指 people 更合適，因為是習慣性動作。

× And when the elder saw my smelliness they would laugh and be more be very happy.

✓ And when the elders saw my silliness they would laugh and be very happy.

原句使用了錯誤的單詞 smelliness（氣味）且有重複 be more be 結構錯誤。應改為 silliness（傻氣）或 similar 描述兒童的行為；elders 用複數更自然，並刪去多餘的 be more 使語義清晰。