Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子存在大量拼写与语法错误，表达不清晰。回答没有直接的主题句也缺乏具体细节。建议：1) 开头用一句清晰的主题句直接回答问题，例如“I learned to be polite from my parents and teachers.” 2) 使用一到两句具体细节说明学习的方式（例如：观察、模仿、被纠正）。3) 注意基本拼写和语法（如 polite、taught）。4) 使用连词使句子连贯（for example, because, and）。

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers. For example, my mother always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher corrected my behavior when I interrupted others. I also copied good manners from my best friend, who was very respectful.

提案: 表达重复且含糊，词汇拼写错误（policy → polite），逻辑不够清晰。建议：1) 开头直接回应并给出理由，例如“Yes, I think it is very important because…” 2) 给出两到三个具体理由并简短举例支撑。3) 注意句子简洁，避免重复。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people get along and shows respect. For instance, polite behavior makes teachers and parents more willing to help children, and saying “excuse me” can prevent misunderstandings in public.

提案: 句子语法和词汇错误较多，表达不准确。建议：1) 直接列举场合并用连接词（for example, when, especially）分开说明。2) 使用正确词汇（polite, elderly）和完整句子。3) 提供具体情境以增加细节。

例: We should be polite in many situations, for example when speaking in public, meeting strangers, and especially when talking to older people. Being polite in a meeting or on public transport shows respect and creates a pleasant atmosphere.

提案: 表达有一定内容但语法和用词错误（politic → polite；listening them → listening to them）。句子结构杂乱，应更直接且具体。建议：1) 用主题句开头表明主要做法。2) 提供具体行为例子（e.g., saying please/thank you, listening carefully）。3) 用正确动词短语和时态。

例: As a child I showed politeness by listening carefully to adults and using polite phrases like “please” and “thank you.” For example, when an elder was speaking I would not interrupt and I would wait my turn to speak.

× My teacher told me how to be pad as a child and I learnt from my best friend and the book which teach the pilots.

✓ My teacher taught me how to be polite when I was a child, and I learned from my best friend and from books that teach politeness.

句子结构混乱：原句中时态、词序和词形错误（pad→错误词、teach→时态不一致、the book which teach the pilots 语序与名词使用不当）。建议将句子拆分并调整时态与词汇：用 taught / learned 表示过去，使用 'books that teach politeness' 表达教礼貌的书。中文建议：把句子分开并用正确的过去式，使用合适的词汇（polite, politeness）。

× Yes, I think being policy is very important for everyone because it is one step it's the first step for everyone to be a human. It's extremely important for children to be part.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important for everyone because it is the first step to being a decent person. It's extremely important for children to learn this.

使用错误词汇和搭配：policy 应为形容词 polite；'one step it's the first step' 表达重复且不自然；'to be a human' 搭配不当，改为 'to be a decent person' 更自然；'to be part' 无意义，改为 'to learn this'。中文建议：用正确形容词（polite），避免重复，使用合适搭配（first step to doing sth / learn this）。

× When we talk to others in public and talk to who was older than me, we should be polyeth with there.

✓ When we talk to others in public and to people who are older than me, we should be polite to them.

介词和代词使用错误：'talk to who was older than me' 中应使用关系代词 'who are' 并保持时态一致；'polyeth' 拼写错误，应为 'polite'；'with there' 应为 'to them' 表示对他们礼貌。中文建议：使用正确关系代词和介词（talk to people who are older than me；be polite to them）。

× When we talk to others in public and talk to who was older than me, we should be polyeth with there.

✓ When we talk to others in public and to people who are older than me, we should be polite to them.

时态不一致：原句中 'who was older than me' 使用了过去式 'was'，与一般现在时情境不符，应使用现在时 'are'。中文建议：描述普遍事实或习惯时用一般现在时（who are older than me）。

× When I first attempt to speak in public or from situations I try to be politic to show my respect and when talk to the old people, I will be listening them carefully.

✓ When I first attempted to speak in public or in similar situations, I tried to be polite to show my respect, and when I talked to elderly people, I listened to them carefully.

过去时使用混乱：问的是过去（as a child），应全部用过去式。原句中 'attempt'、'try'、'talk'、'will be listening' 时态不一致，应统一为过去式 attempted / tried / talked / listened to。中文建议：叙述过去经历时，整句用过去时，且注意动词搭配（listen to）。

× When I first attempt to speak in public or from situations I try to be politic to show my respect and when talk to the old people, I will be listening them carefully.

✓ When I first attempted to speak in public or in similar situations, I tried to be polite to show my respect, and when I talked to elderly people, I listened to them carefully.

代词及搭配错误：'listening them' 应为 'listen to them'；'the old people' 更自然为 'elderly people'；缺少主语 'I' 在 'when talk to' 中。中文建议：注意动词与介词搭配（listen to sb），保持句中主语完整。