Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is slightly ungrammatical and repetitive. Improve grammar (e.g., verb forms and articles), reduce redundancy, and add one specific example to make it more vivid. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and use a linking phrase to connect the general statement and the example.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They taught me good manners by example, for instance, my mother always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you” whenever I asked for something. Because of this, I naturally started helping neighbors and speaking respectfully to adults.

提案: The idea is clear but phrasing and grammar need work. Remove fillers like “umm,” fix singular/plural and word order, and expand with a brief reason or consequence. Use a linking word to add the reason.

例: Yes, I think it is very important, especially in many Asian countries. In my culture, showing respect to parents and elders helps maintain family harmony and social order, so people are taught good manners from a young age.

提案: Your answer lists occasions and behaviours but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Make sentences clearer by using correct noun phrases and verb forms, avoid repeating similar ideas, and add one specific example of a greeting to illustrate.

例: We should be polite at family events, work meetings, and whenever we meet older people. For example, at a family reunion I usually bow slightly and say “Hello, how are you?” or shake hands with visiting relatives to show respect.

提案: The answer is vague and contains multiple grammar errors and an incomplete ending. Give a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and sentence structure, and provide a concrete example of polite behaviour you used as a child. Use a linking word to explain the reason.

例: As a child, I often tried to listen more than speak to avoid saying the wrong thing. For example, at family dinners I would wait until adults finished speaking before I answered and always said “excuse me” before leaving the table.

× When I was a kid, I learned being polite from my parents because through them I can truly understand how to be kind and be nice to people and helping people.

✓ When I was a kid, I learned to be polite from my parents because through them I could truly understand how to be kind and nice to people and how to help people.

The original uses 'learned being polite' which is incorrect; after 'learn' the infinitive 'to be' or the gerund with a different structure is needed. Also 'can' conflicts with past reference 'When I was a kid', so tense should be past ('could'). Parallel structure errors: 'how to be kind and be nice' is repetitive; use 'kind and nice' and parallel 'how to help people'. Use of 'helping people' should be changed to 'how to help people' for parallel infinitive form.

× Yes, from what I see it is umm especially in Asian country, being polite and respect parents and elders. It's very crucial in our culture.

✓ Yes, from what I see, especially in Asian countries, being polite and respecting parents and elders is very important in our culture.

The phrase 'in Asian country' needs a plural noun or an article: use 'in Asian countries' or 'in an Asian country'. 'Being polite and respect parents and elders' mixes noun phrase and verb; use parallel gerund forms 'being polite and respecting'. 'It's very crucial' is wordy; 'is very important' is more natural. Also add commas for clarity.

× When we have a family event or work meeting, when we see elders people, we always bow our head and shake hands and say something greeting words to them.

✓ When we have a family event or work meeting, or when we see elderly people, we always bow our heads, shake hands, and say some greeting words to them.

Use 'elderly' as the adjective modifying 'people' rather than 'elders people'. 'Bow our head' should be plural 'bow our heads' to match subject 'we'. Parallel verb phrases need commas and 'and' placement. 'Something greeting words' is ungrammatical; use 'some greeting words'.

× Honestly, I remember I would try not to speak too much when I was a child because I often didn't know what should I say or being appropriate, so I would try to set their.

✓ Honestly, I remember I tried not to speak too much when I was a child because I often didn't know what I should say or what was appropriate, so I would try to stay there quietly.

Mix of conditional/modal 'would try' and past narrative is awkward; use simple past 'I tried' for remembered habit. Word order 'what should I say' should be 'what I should say' in indirect question. 'Being appropriate' should be 'what was appropriate' for clarity. 'Set their' is incorrect; likely intended 'stay there' and add 'quietly' to complete meaning.