Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 매우 단순하고 반복이 많으며 문법 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 직접 답한 다음, 구체적인 행동이나 예시를 하나 추가하세요. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 문장을 논리적으로 이어주고, 발음이나 단어 선택에 주의하세요.

例: I learned to be polite from my parents. For example, they always reminded me to say "please" and "thank you," and they corrected my behavior when I spoke rudely to others.

提案: 의견을 묻는 질문인데 명확한 주관적 판단이 빠져 있습니다. 먼저 직접적인 의견(topic sentence)을 말하고, 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적인 근거로 뒷받침하세요. 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요.

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people communicate respectfully and prevents misunderstandings. For instance, polite language can make conversations smoother in both personal and professional situations.

提案: 대답이 산만하고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 먼저 '언제'에 대한 일반적 원칙을 말하고, 구체적인 상황(예: with elders, at work, during ceremonies)을 1~2개 들어 설명하세요. 연결어(for example, such as)를 사용해 문장을 정리하세요.

例: We should be polite in many situations, such as when talking to older people or during formal events. For example, at family gatherings and at work meetings, polite behavior shows respect and helps maintain good relationships.

提案: 답변이 거의 이해되지 않으며 구체적 행동이 전혀 나오지 않습니다. 과거에 자신이 실제로 했던 행동(예: helping elders, saying polite phrases, opening doors)을 하나 골라 간단히 설명하세요. 연결어(and, so, because)를 사용하고 문장 수는 1~3문장으로 유지하세요.

例: As a child, I showed politeness by helping my grandparents with chores and always saying "please" and "thank you." I also tried to listen carefully and not interrupt adults when they were speaking.

× My parents. My parents often teach to me my parents always talking to me to be police.

✓ My parents. My parents often taught me; they were always talking to me about being polite.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure issues: incorrect verb forms ('teach' should be past tense 'taught'), unnecessary 'to' after 'teach', repetitive fragments, and 'to be police' is incorrect collocation — should be 'being polite'. Improve by using past tense for childhood actions, removing extra 'to', combining fragments with a semicolon or conjunction, and using the gerund 'being' with the adjective 'polite'. Suggested practice: form complete sentences with subject + past verb, avoid repeating subjects unnecessarily, and use 'teach someone' (no 'to') and 'about being + adjective'.

× My parents my parents always talking to me You to be polite because you're talking to concert to

✓ My parents were always telling me to be polite because you should speak considerately to others.

This sentence mixes tenses and fragments. For past habitual actions, use past continuous or past simple ('were always telling' or 'always told'). 'You to be polite' is ungrammatical; use 'telling me to be polite'. 'You're talking to concert to' is unclear — likely intended 'speak considerately to others' or 'speak with consideration'. Improve by choosing consistent tense and clear verb phrases: 'tell someone to do something' and 'speak considerately to others'. Suggested practice: use 'tell someone to' for commands/advice and prefer clear expressions like 'speak considerately'.

× My family always talking to me person older than you or not always your act and talked your background.

✓ My family always told me to be respectful to people older than me, regardless of their background.

Problems include missing verbs ('talking' should be 'told'), incorrect pronouns ('you' should be 'me' to match speaker), and wrong preposition/phrase 'act and talked your background'. Use 'respectful to' or 'respectful toward' and 'regardless of' for 'or not...background'. Also use past tense for childhood instruction. Suggested practice: ensure subject and object pronouns match the speaker, use 'tell someone to' and prepositions like 'to', 'toward', 'regardless of' correctly.

× I always personal than me or not politely to me and value than me always.

✓ I always treated others politely and valued people more than myself.

Original is ungrammatical: 'personal than me' and 'value than me' are incorrect comparisons and word choices. For showing politeness actions in the past habitual sense, use past tense 'treated'. 'Treated others politely' correctly expresses behavior. If intent was 'valued others more than myself', use that comparative structure. Suggested practice: use 'treat someone politely' and comparative forms 'more than' with clear subjects, and keep tense consistent.