Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy, concise sentences, and clearer sequence. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and article use (e.g., “taught me,” “greet others,” “my neighbours”).

例: My parents taught me to be polite from a young age. For example, they showed me how to greet neighbours politely and encouraged me to share snacks with classmates, which helped me learn respectful behaviour.

提案: Answer directly and clearly with a simple reason, then support with one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid vague or awkward phrases (e.g., "bottom line for any person socialized").

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people get along. For instance, polite behaviour makes it easier to communicate at work or school and prevents misunderstandings.

提案: Give a clear, structured answer: state the main occasions, then explain why using linking words. Avoid unclear vocabulary and repetition. Correct phrases like "in public" and "at home" and clarify the contrast.

例: We should be polite on all occasions, especially in public and at school, because our behaviour affects other people. At home we can be more relaxed, but in public politeness shows respect and helps relationships.

提案: Use past tense consistently and give one specific, concrete example. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a reason or result. Remove repetitions and unclear phrases (e.g., "share my daily life").

例: As a child, I often shared my snacks and toys with classmates to show politeness. Because of this, I made friends easily and learned how to cooperate with others.

× Well, I think parents are the first teachers to their children.

✓ Well, I think parents are the first teachers of their children.

Use 'teachers of their children' rather than 'to their children' because 'teacher of' indicates relationship; 'to' is incorrect with 'teacher' in this context. Suggestion: say 'teachers of' or 'teach their children'. (ID:12)

× So my parents will teach me how to greeting others, how to share snacks to my friends and how to be nice and be polite to your neighbourhood

✓ So my parents taught me how to greet others, how to share snacks with my friends, and how to be nice and polite to our neighbours.

The speaker refers to childhood habits, so past tense is required rather than 'will'. 'How to greeting' is incorrect; after 'to' use base verb 'greet' (verb + base form). Use 'share snacks with' not 'to my friends'. 'Your neighbourhood' should match first person 'our neighbours'. Suggest using past simple and correct verb forms. (IDs:7,8,11,12)

× Yes, of course I think that's bottom line for any person socialized is so significant especially you have to suit the social and you have to learn how to communicate with others.

✓ Yes, of course. I think being polite is the bottom line for any socialized person. It is very important; you have to fit into society and learn how to communicate with others.

Sentence is run-on and uses awkward structure. 'Socialized is so significant' is incorrect order and tense. Use noun phrase 'socialized person' and present simple 'is'. 'Suit the social' is incorrect preposition and collocation; use 'fit into society'. Break into two sentences for clarity. (IDs:26,13,11)

× any occasions, but the most important situation may be in Cong in school and I mean in public because when you when you stay in your home, your parents were enduring you implied for behavior, implied for behavior.

✓ On any occasion, but the most important situations may be in public, such as at school or during events, because at home your parents may tolerate certain behavior that would be inappropriate in public.

Start with capital letter and correct 'any occasions' to 'any occasion' or 'any occasions' with article; 'in Cong in school' is unclear—interpreted as 'at school' and 'in public'. 'Parents were enduring you implied for behavior' is incorrect grammar and word choice; use 'parents may tolerate certain behavior'. Use plural/singular consistently and clear phrasing. (IDs:1,26,13)

× In my childhood, I'd like to share my daily life to my friends and I wanted to share my snacks and my new dress to to to others because I think communicates and small child is classed with those little things in our life.

✓ In my childhood, I liked to share details of my daily life with my friends, and I wanted to share my snacks and my new dress with others because I think children communicate and bond through those small things in life.

Use past tense 'liked' instead of 'I'd like' which is present conditional. Use 'share ... with' not 'to'. Remove repeated words. 'Communicates and small child is classed with those little things' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'children communicate and bond through those small things'. Maintain past tense and correct prepositions. (IDs:5,11,26)