Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较自然但有语法和表达不够准确之处，内容较全面但有些啰嗦或重复。注意：1) 用更准确的词汇（例如 replace “phrase me” with “praise me”），2) 句子可更简洁，避免不必要的从句和重复，3) 保持逻辑连接词但不要过多。练习时控制在3-4句内，并具体说明一两件事例细节。

例: I learned good manners mainly from my mother and teachers. At school, following rules taught me what was right and wrong, and at home my mother praised me and gave me a candy when I behaved politely. Those rewards encouraged me to repeat polite actions.

提案: 回答观点明确，但存在表达错误和措辞不当（例如 “fight people with good behavior more attractive” 意义不明）。注意：1) 使用正确的句型和词汇表达观点，2) 用一两个具体理由和连接词支持观点，3) 避免笼统或重复判断。

例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps people get along and creates a respectful atmosphere. For example, polite behavior often leads to better cooperation at work, and polite people are usually taken more seriously.

提案: 回答清晰且有例子，但有少量冗余表达和语法细节可改进（例如 “in any occasions” 应为 “on any occasion”）。建议：1) 用更地道短语（on formal occasions, at ceremonies等），2) 简洁陈述并给出一具体举例说明自己的行为。

例: We should be polite on all occasions, especially at formal events like weddings or ceremonies. For instance, I always follow dress codes and greet the hosts respectfully so I don’t embarrass anyone.

提案: 内容具体且相关，但句子有重复且逻辑衔接可更自然（例如最后一句表述有点口语化且略显不成熟）。建议：1) 合并相似信息以减少重复，2) 用更自然的因果表达（e.g. “so I often said…”），3) 控制句子数量与长度。

例: My mother taught me to say “sorry”, “excuse me” and “thank you” in appropriate situations. She often rewarded me with a candy, so I quickly formed the habit of using polite phrases in daily life.

× For example, it was by obeying the regulations of school that I could know what was right and wrong, and my mother used to phrase me by giving me a candy when I was being polite.

✓ For example, it was by obeying the school regulations that I learned what was right and wrong, and my mother used to praise me by giving me a candy when I was polite.

问题类型：动词+ -ing 形式以及动词使用不当。句中“obeying the regulations of school”词序不自然，改为“obeying the school regulations”。“could know”与情境不合，改为一般过去时“learned”。“phrase me”错拼且用词不当，应为“praise me”。“when I was being polite”中“being”多余，简化为“when I was polite”。建议：注意固定搭配（school regulations），使用适当时态表达已发生的动作（learned），并用正确动词（praise）。

× Yes, not only does being polite contribute to get along well with others, but it also helps us increase discipline.

✓ Yes, not only does being polite help us get along well with others, but it also helps us increase our discipline.

问题类型：情态动词/动词搭配使用。短语“contribute to get along”不正确，应为“help/get along”或“contribute to”后接动名词（contribute to getting along）。同时，“increase discipline”缺少所有格，更自然为“increase our discipline”。建议：熟悉“contribute to + -ing”和“help + 动词原形”两种结构，并注意所有格的使用。

× For me, I fight people with good behavior more attractive.

✓ For me, people with good behavior are more attractive.

问题类型：句子结构错误。原句中主谓宾结构混乱，“I fight people with good behavior more attractive”不符合英语语序。应把“people with good behavior”作为主语，用系动词“are”连接表语“more attractive”。建议：把句子分清主语、谓语和表语，避免直译式的中文语序。

× Furthermore, a person who always treats others politely is more likely to obey rules and regulations than one who is rude and aggressive.

✓ Furthermore, a person who always treats others politely is more likely to obey rules and regulations than someone who is rude and aggressive.

问题类型：冠词/代词使用错误。原句虽可理解但在比较结构中用“one”相比“someone”在口语语境中略显不自然，建议使用“someone”以更自然表达；此处也可保留“one”，但需注意一致性。建议：在口语表达中用“someone”更自然，写作中“one”多用于替代前述名词且需保持形式一致。

× I suppose that we should be polite in any occasions, particularly in formal and important occasions such as ceremonies, commencements and weddings.

✓ I suppose that we should be polite on any occasion, particularly on formal and important occasions such as ceremonies, commencements, and weddings.

问题类型：介词使用错误与单复数问题。固定搭配应为“on occasion”/“on occasions”或更常见“in any situation”。原句“in any occasions”介词和数均不当，改为“on any occasion”或“in any situation”。建议：掌握介词短语的固定搭配，并注意单复数与介词搭配（e.g. on occasion/on occasions, in situations）。

× Take me as an example, I will make sure that I won't embarrass the hosts and guests on those occasions, so I do obey dress codes and traditions strictly.

✓ Take me as an example: I will make sure that I won't embarrass the hosts and guests on those occasions, so I will obey dress codes and traditions strictly.

问题类型：将来时使用不当。句中前半为将来时“will make sure...won't embarrass”，后半却用一般现在时“do obey”，时态不一致，应改为将来时“will obey”。建议：在表达将来计划或承诺时，保持时态一致，使用将来时。

× My mother taught me to say sorry or excuse me when interrupting others and say thank you when accepting kindness from others.

✓ My mother taught me to say 'sorry' or 'excuse me' when interrupting others and to say 'thank you' when accepting kindness from others.

问题类型：第三人称单数/动词不定式使用。在并列不定式结构中，应保持形式一致，“to say... and to say...”或省略第二个“to”。原句第二部分缺少“to”，导致结构不平行。建议：保持并列不定式的一致性，使用“to + 动词”或省略重复的“to”。

× She would give me a candy as a reward each time I showed respect for others, as a result, I used to say sorry and thank you all the time in order to get candies.

✓ She would give me a candy as a reward each time I showed respect for others. As a result, I used to say 'sorry' and 'thank you' all the time in order to get the candy.

问题类型：冠词与句子结构错误。原复合句逗号连接两个独立分句，应改为句号或分号以避免逗号拼接错误。同时“get candies”与前文“一颗糖(a candy)”不一致，应改为“get the candy”或“get candies”需与上下文一致。建议：避免用逗号连接两个独立句，注意冠词的一致性（a candy vs the candy/candies）。