Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more structured and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating who taught you (family and teachers), then give one or two specific examples of what they did (e.g., modeling polite language, correcting behaviour). Use linking words like "for example" or "also". Keep it to 2–4 concise sentences and avoid redundant phrases.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my family and my teachers. For example, my parents always encouraged me to say "please" and "thank you," and my teachers corrected me when I used rude language. As a result, I grew up valuing good manners and respect for others.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like "because" and "for instance" properly. Avoid vague nouns like "the disciplines" — be specific (e.g., "better relationships"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps maintain good relationships with family and friends. For instance, when people speak kindly instead of angrily, conflicts are easier to resolve. Therefore, politeness often leads to greater happiness and harmony.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence listing occasions (e.g., with elders, at work, during disagreements). Provide one concise example of how politeness helps, using linking words like "for example" and clear pronouns. Avoid repetition and run-on sentences.

例: We should be polite on many occasions, such as when speaking to elders, in the workplace, and during disagreements. For example, if two friends are arguing and both remain polite, they can explain their points calmly and avoid a bigger fight.

提案: Clarify with a direct topic sentence describing one or two specific actions you took (e.g., greeting elders, helping relatives, saying polite phrases). Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Provide a short example of a typical polite behaviour you practiced as a child.

例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting my relatives respectfully and helping them with small tasks. For example, I always stood up when an elder entered the room and offered to carry light items when visiting their homes.

× Alone with my family and my teachers to be a polite that is a good discipline for you in the future and everybody love for you then when you polite.

✓ I learned to be polite from my family and my teachers because politeness is good discipline; it will help you in the future and people will love you when you are polite.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure issues: missing main verbs, incorrect word order, wrong verb forms, and unclear connectors. I combined ideas into a clear sentence with a subject and verbs, changed 'Alone with' to 'from' to indicate source, used 'learned' as the simple past to match 'How did you learn', corrected 'everybody love for you' to 'people will love you', and added 'when you are polite' for grammaticality. Suggestion: break complex ideas into clauses with proper subjects and verbs and use appropriate tenses.

× I think polite is very important because the politeness give happiness and the disciplines with the friends and family.

✓ I think being polite is very important because politeness gives happiness and helps maintain good relationships with friends and family.

Problems: 'polite' should be a noun phrase 'being polite'; 'the politeness give' has wrong article and verb agreement—use 'politeness gives'; 'the disciplines with the friends and family' is awkward and incorrect. I replaced it with 'helps maintain good relationships with friends and family' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use gerund for abstract qualities and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× When we fight each other, only politeness can help us.

✓ When we fight each other, politeness can help us resolve things.

The original sentence is mostly understandable but a bit unnatural: 'only politeness can help us' is acceptable but adding 'resolve things' clarifies how politeness helps. Tense is present simple and suits the general truth; keep present but improve clarity. Suggestion: keep present simple for general statements and add a clear verb phrase.

× In a fight time we've been polite and just example for like friends are fighting with each other and the one people is then polite and the 2 is also polite and they don't fight each other with any reasons of talking.

✓ During a fight, we should be polite; for example, if two friends are arguing and both remain polite, they will not fight over small disagreements.

Many errors: wrong phrase 'In a fight time', incorrect tense 'we've been polite', unclear connectors, wrong number expressions ('the one people', 'the 2'), and awkward phrasing 'don't fight each other with any reasons of talking'. I rephrased to a clear conditional example using present simple modal 'should' and clarified 'two friends'. Suggestion: use simple structures for examples, correct number expressions, and use 'should' for advice.

× Also with my politeness as a so, uh, my education to relatives, like they gives me, they gives me some places.

✓ As a child, I showed politeness in my behavior; my relatives supported my education and gave me opportunities.

Original sentence has unclear pronoun use and wrong verb forms 'they gives me'. 'Also with my politeness as a so' is nonsensical. I interpreted the intended meaning and produced a grammatical sentence: 'my relatives supported my education and gave me opportunities.' Corrected subject-verb agreement and pronoun references. Suggestion: state subjects clearly and match verbs in number and tense; avoid filler words.