Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. For example, say when and from whom you learned manners, and give a short example of what you were taught.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents when I was very young. For example, they taught me to say "please" and "thank you" and to greet elders, so I practised these habits at home and at family gatherings.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then explain why with one or two concrete reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitations and incomplete phrases. Use vocabulary like "important, respectful, considerate" to support your point.

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and builds good relationships. For instance, polite behaviour helps people cooperate better at work and makes social interactions more pleasant.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence and then list a few specific occasions with linking words. Keep responses short and structured (2–3 sentences). Replace vague phrases with concrete examples like family events, work, and public places.

例: We should be polite in almost every situation, especially in family gatherings, at work, and in public places. For example, being polite on public transport or when meeting someone for the first time creates a positive impression.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence describing specific actions, then give a short example or cultural detail using linking words. Avoid trailing off and include complete phrases. Mention exactly what you said or did to show respect.

例: As a child, I showed politeness by following local traditions, such as saying respectful greetings like "ba" and "hop" to elders. For example, I would always bow slightly and use these greetings when I met older relatives at family events.

× Well I learnt to be like as a child when I was a child and starting to learn things and

✓ Well, I learnt to be polite when I was a child as I was starting to learn things.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant ('to be like as a child' and repeating 'when I was a child'). This is a sentence structure error (type 26). The corrected sentence removes redundancy, uses the past tense 'learnt' consistently and places modifiers in a clear order. Suggestion: remove repeated phrases and reorder to subject + verb + object + time/clause.

× Yes because being polite it means you have a good character you are developing a Um

✓ Yes, being polite means you have good character and are developing it.

The original misuses the dummy pronoun 'it' after 'being polite' and contains an incomplete clause. This is an incorrect pronoun usage (type 12) and sentence structure issue. The correction removes the extraneous 'it', connects clauses with 'and', and clarifies the object 'it' referring to 'good character'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary pronouns and complete the clause.

× in every circumstances that you have to

✓ In every circumstance where you have to.

The phrase 'in every circumstances' mixes plural noun with 'every' which requires singular, and 'that you have to' is incomplete. This involves preposition/quantifier and singular/plural issues (types 11 and 1); primary correction uses singular 'circumstance' after 'every' and replaces 'that' with 'where' to introduce the situation. Suggestion: use 'every' + singular noun and complete the clause.

× Here in our country we have this tradition like saying ba and hop and showing respect for elders know so we also address

✓ Here in our country we have a tradition of saying 'ba' and 'hop' to show respect for elders, so we also use respectful forms of address.

The original is fragmented, contains an unclear word 'know' and ends abruptly. This is a sentence structure error (type 26) and also article/word choice issues. The correction clarifies 'tradition of' + gerund, uses verbs 'to show' and 'use', and completes the idea about addressing elders. Suggestion: avoid filler words, complete the clause, and use 'tradition of' plus a gerund or noun phrase.