Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more fluent, correct basic grammar, reduce fillers (uh, um), and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. Include a linking phrase when adding reasons or examples.

例: My parents taught me to be polite from a young age. For example, they always modelled good manners and reminded me to say 'please' and 'thank you', which I practiced daily. Because of that consistent guidance, politeness became second nature to me.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), avoid repetition and fillers, and give one specific reason with a linking word (for example, therefore). Use precise vocabulary like 'facilitates' or 'creates a good impression'.

例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important, especially when meeting new people. For example, polite behaviour creates a good first impression and facilitates smoother conversations, so people feel more comfortable speaking with you.

提案: Give a concise list of occasions and support one with a clear reason. Fix grammar (e.g. 'a new people' → 'new people' or 'a new person', 'politeness helps'). Use linking words (for instance, moreover) and avoid unfinished thoughts.

例: We should be polite in many situations, for instance when meeting new people, in the workplace, and at family gatherings. For example, being polite at work helps build professional relationships and shows respect to colleagues, which improves teamwork.

提案: Structure your response: a clear opening sentence describing what you did, one specific example, and a brief result. Correct tense and grammar (e.g. 'I always tried', 'my parents were'), remove fillers, and finish your thoughts. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: As a child, I always tried to be polite by greeting people and saying 'please' and 'thank you'. For example, I practised these phrases in everyday situations like at school and at home, and my parents gently corrected me when I forgot, which helped me improve.

× Well, my parents set a really good example as polite people, uh, themselves.

✓ Well, my parents set a really good example as polite people themselves.

The original has an extra comma before 'themselves' which interrupts sentence flow and misplaces emphasis. Removing the comma makes 'themselves' correctly modify 'parents'. Also consider 'as polite people' -> 'as polite people' is acceptable; no tense issue.

× They growing up, they, they only, they always taught me, uh, how to act, uh, as a good manner by saying hello, goodbye, please, thank you.

✓ As they were growing up, they always taught me how to behave politely by saying 'hello', 'goodbye', 'please', and 'thank you'.

The original misuses 'They growing up' (missing auxiliary verb) and has word order and collocation issues: 'act as a good manner' is incorrect. Use past continuous 'were growing up' or 'when I was growing up' and collocate 'behave politely' or 'act politely'. Add articles and commas for the listed words.

× And I think that's why it became the second nature of me.

✓ And I think that's why it became second nature to me.

Use the idiomatic expression 'second nature to me' not 'of me'. The pronoun 'me' should follow 'to'. Also omit the definite article 'the' before 'second nature'.

× Yes, I think it is the most important manner, especially when you meeting new people.

✓ Yes, I think it is the most important manner, especially when you meet new people.

After 'when' use the simple present 'you meet' for general truths; 'you meeting' is incorrect because it lacks auxiliary or correct verb form.

× When meeting new people, it helps us to uh, smoother for smoother conversation, umm, pleasure and umm.

✓ When meeting new people, it helps us to have smoother conversations and make the interaction pleasant.

'Smoother' is an adjective; you need a verb phrase like 'have smoother conversations'. 'Pleasure' is a noun that doesn't fit; use 'pleasant' (adjective) or 'be pleasurable'. Also pluralize 'conversation' to match general sense.

× As I mentioned before, especially when meeting a new people, politeness help us to, uh, easy to talk to each other and in my opinion, umm, polite people or truth worthy people and.

✓ As I mentioned before, especially when meeting new people, politeness helps us to be able to talk to each other easily, and in my opinion, polite people are trustworthy.

'a new people' is incorrect: 'people' is plural so remove 'a' or use 'a new person'. 'Politeness help' should be 'politeness helps' for subject-verb agreement. 'Easy to talk to each other' needs infinitive 'to be able to' or adverb 'easily'. 'truth worthy' should be 'trustworthy' and complete the clause.

× Growing up I always trying to be a polite little gentleman verbally, like saying hello, goodbye, please and thank you.

✓ Growing up, I always tried to be a polite little gentleman, saying 'hello', 'goodbye', 'please', and 'thank you'.

'I always trying' is missing the auxiliary or wrong tense; use past 'I always tried' to match 'Growing up'. 'Verbally' is unnecessary; replacing with participial phrase 'saying...' is clearer.

× I think it's really. And I try to practice it with every single day situation.

✓ I think it's really important, and I tried to practice it in everyday situations.

Original sentence is incomplete 'I think it's really.' Complete thought needed: 'really important'. To match 'Growing up' context, use past 'tried' or if speaker means present habit use present 'I try to practice it in everyday situations'. 'Every single day situation' is unidiomatic; use 'everyday situations' or 'day-to-day situations'.

× And umm, my parents was uh, gentle with me and correct me when.

✓ And my parents were gentle with me and corrected me when I made mistakes.

'My parents was' is incorrect; plural subject needs 'were'. Also 'correct me when' is incomplete; add 'I made mistakes' or 'I misbehaved' to complete the clause and use past tense 'corrected' to match narrative.