Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: แก้ไขความคลาดเคลื่อนทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อที่ชัดเจน และเพิ่มรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ใครสอนวิธีไหนและตัวอย่างพฤติกรรมที่ทำให้เห็นความสุภาพ ให้ตอบไม่เกิน 5 ประโยคและใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อขยายความ

例: When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite. They showed me by example, always saying “please” and “thank you,” and reminding me to greet older relatives. In school, my teachers praised polite behavior, which encouraged me to keep practicing those habits.

提案: ปรับให้ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อ แล้วขยายด้วยเหตุผลเฉพาะและยกตัวอย่าง ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล และแก้ไวยากรณ์ (possessive) ให้ถูกต้อง

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important. It helps me form friendships and shows respect for other people. For example, saying “excuse me” in a crowded place prevents conflicts and creates a friendly atmosphere.

提案: ตอบให้ชัดเจนว่าโอกาสใดบ้างและยกตัวอย่างเฉพาะ ใช้โครงสร้างที่เป็นประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้นๆ ไม่ซ้ำซ้อน และแก้คำว่า "build report" เป็น "build rapport"

例: We should be polite in many situations, especially when meeting someone for the first time, speaking with elders, or attending formal events. For instance, greeting a new colleague politely helps build rapport and creates a positive first impression.

提案: ตอบด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ชัดเจนเกี่ยวกับพฤติกรรมของตน แสดงตัวอย่างพฤติกรรมที่เป็นรูปธรรมและใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น "for example" อย่างถูกต้อง แก้ไวยากรณ์ (respect → respect others, rapport) และจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค

例: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults respectfully and using polite phrases like “thank you” and “excuse me.” For example, I always stood up when an older relative entered the room and helped guests feel welcome.

× Honestly, when I was a child, my family always teach me how to be political person so I have learned for my family also and for my teacher also I think it was more important to learn before growing up.

✓ Honestly, when I was a child, my family always taught me how to be a polite person, so I learned from my family and my teachers. I think it was important to learn this before growing up.

Past tense issue (ID 5) and subject-verb agreement (ID 27): 'teach' should be 'taught' because the action happened in the past. 'Have learned' is awkward here; simple past 'learned' fits the context. Also 'be political person' is incorrect word choice; 'be a polite person' matches the intended meaning. Use 'from my family and my teachers' rather than 'for' to indicate source of learning. Suggestions: use simple past for completed past actions, ensure verbs agree with subject and choose correct prepositions.

× From what I said earlier, I think it's more important because it helps me make friends and show respect to other people's

✓ From what I said earlier, I think it's very important because it helps me make friends and show respect to other people.

Article and pronoun issue (ID 22 and 12): 'other people's' incorrectly uses possessive apostrophe-s; the correct phrase is 'other people'. Also 'more important' is vague without comparison; 'very important' is clearer. Suggestions: do not use apostrophe for plural nouns when not showing possession, and choose quantifiers that fit the intended meaning.

× I think mostly anytime we need to be polite because that I was said earlier, it's very important to build report with others people and show considerations for others, so for example being polite

✓ I think we should be polite at all times because, as I said earlier, it's very important to build rapport with other people and show consideration for them. For example, being polite helps maintain good relationships.

Sentence structure error (ID 26) and incorrect use of prepositions/pronouns (ID 11 and 12): 'that I was said earlier' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'as I said earlier'. 'Build report' is incorrect collocation; use 'build rapport'. 'Others people' should be 'other people'. 'Show considerations for others' should be 'show consideration for them' (singular uncountable noun 'consideration'). Suggestions: use accepted collocations, correct pronouns and prepositions, and simplify sentence structure for clarity.

× When I was a child I used to be respect for other peoples and to build report and show considerations for other people.

✓ When I was a child I used to respect other people, build rapport, and show consideration for them.

Preposition and plural errors (ID 11 and 1): 'be respect for' is wrong; use verb 'respect' without 'be'. 'Other peoples' is incorrect plural; use 'other people'. 'Build report' should be 'build rapport'. 'Show considerations' should be 'show consideration' (uncountable). Suggestions: use the correct verb forms, correct plural forms, and standard collocations.

× For example, we should be especially polite in formal meetings when speaking with older people

✓ For example, we should be especially polite in formal meetings and when speaking with older people.

Article and sentence structure issue (ID 22 and 26): The original sentence is mostly correct but needs conjunction to connect ideas smoothly. Ensure punctuation and connectors are used to form a complete sentence. Suggestions: add 'and' to link the two occasions and ensure sentence ends with a period.