Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は基本的に意味は通じますが、文法ミス（時制や語の重複）、語順の不自然さ、文の終わりが未完了な点が評価を下げています。改善点は次の通りです：1) 重複表現（went to went、responds responded）を消す。2) 完全な文にして主語と動詞の一致を確認する。3) 接続語を使って理由や具体例を簡潔に付け加える（最大5文以内）。4) 具体的な行動例（挨拶、言葉遣い）を1つ入れると内容が豊かになる。

例: I learned to be polite by watching my parents. For example, when I went shopping with my mother, I noticed she always greeted the staff politely and said ‘please’ and ‘thank you’. Because I saw this often, I copied her behavior and now I do the same.

提案: 主旨は明確ですが、語の重複（others others、disrespectful disrespectful）や語法の誤りがあり、論理の展開も単純です。改善点：1) 繰り返しを避け、理由を1つか2つの具体的な根拠で支える。2) 接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って論理を明確にする。3) 具体例や結果を短く示すと説得力が増す。4) 5文以内で簡潔にまとめる。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because respectful behavior helps build good relationships. For instance, if you treat store staff kindly, they are more likely to help you and others will view you positively. Therefore, politeness can make everyday interactions smoother.

× In my case I just imitated my parents for example when I went to went shopping with my mother I observed how my mother responds responded to the staff when

✓ In my case I just imitated my parents; for example, when I went shopping with my mother, I observed how my mother responded to the staff.

The sentence has a redundant verb form 'responds responded' where the past participle/verb form should match the past-tense context set by 'went' and 'went shopping'. Use the simple past 'responded' to keep consistent tense. Also remove the repeated 'went' and add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: keep past-tense verbs consistent (e.g., 'went', 'observed', 'responded') and avoid repeated words. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× I think so because if you don't respect others others also would be disrespectful disrespectful for you.

✓ I think so because if you don't respect others, others will also be disrespectful to you.

The conditional sentence mixes present simple in the if-clause with 'would' in the result clause; for a real conditional about a general truth, use 'will' in the main clause. Also there is a duplicated word 'disrespectful' and incorrect preposition 'for'; use 'to' after 'disrespectful'. Suggestion: use 'if' + present simple, then 'will' + base verb for likely results, remove duplications, and use correct prepositions (disrespectful to someone). Grammar problem type ID: 5