Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors (e.g. because, so, for example). Also correct pronoun and verb errors (e.g. 'he's' → 'she', 'long' → 'learned' or 'learned to', 'when when' → 'when'). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my grandmother because she always apologised and showed good manners. For example, when she made a small mistake she would say sorry, and she taught me to say thank you when someone helps me. As a result, politeness became a habit for me.

提案: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear opinion, use correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement, and provide a specific reason and example linked by a connector (e.g. because, for example). Reduce repetition. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps you make friends and maintain good relationships. For example, I always try to be polite with my supervisor, which has helped our working relationship run smoothly.

× I long to be polite for my grandmother, he's always say sorry when when she made a small mistake and also I have I started to say thank you when people who help me.

✓ I longed to be polite for my grandmother; she always said sorry when she made a small mistake, and I started to say thank you to people who helped me.

Errors involve incorrect pronoun use and tense consistency (pronoun 'he's' should be 'she' to refer to grandmother), repetition ('when when'), and awkward phrasing. The verbs should be in past tense to match 'as a child' context: 'long' -> 'longed', 'say' -> 'said', 'made' stays past, and 'have I started' corrected to 'I started'. Also use 'to' after 'say thank you' and 'help' -> 'helped' for past. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents, remove duplicate words, and keep tenses consistent in a single time frame.

× Yes, I think the politeness is very important because if you want to made more friends or keep a good relationships with someone, you you should be you should be polite.

✓ Yes, I think politeness is very important because if you want to make more friends or keep good relationships with someone, you should be polite.

Problems: incorrect verb form 'made' should be base form 'make' after 'want to'; unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'politeness'; plural agreement 'a good relationships' should be 'good relationships' or 'a good relationship'. Also repeated phrases 'you you should be you should be' are redundant. Suggestion: after 'want to' use base verb, remove extra words, and ensure noun phrases match number and article use.

× For example, I always keep polite with my supervisor.

✓ For example, I am always polite with my supervisor.

'Keep polite' is an awkward collocation; use 'be polite' or 'am polite'. Also 'with my supervisor' is acceptable but 'to my supervisor' is also common. Suggestion: use correct verb 'be' for states (I am always polite) and choose appropriate preposition ('with' or 'to') depending on nuance.