Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good answer: direct topic sentence and relevant supporting details. To improve, avoid minor repetition and tighten phrasing; add a brief concrete example to make it more specific and natural. Also vary sentence openings and use one linking phrase to connect ideas.

例: My mother taught me to be polite by always encouraging me to say “please” and “thank you,” and by asking me to show respect to guests. For example, when relatives visited, she reminded me to offer them seats and help serve tea, so politeness became a habit at home and at school.

提案: The answer communicates the main idea but has repetition, some awkward phrasing and minor grammar errors. To improve, give one concise reason with a clear example, correct sentence structure, and use linking words (for instance, therefore). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid filler phrases like “you know.”

例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it shows respect and makes communication smoother. For instance, when I meet someone new I use polite greetings and ask simple questions, which helps create a positive first impression.

× I like in a for an example, talking to a stranger or meeting someone for the first time.

✓ I like, for example, talking to a stranger or meeting someone for the first time.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has extra words ('in a for an example') which is ungrammatical. Use the fixed phrase 'for example' as a parenthetical expression set off by commas. Remove the incorrect prepositions 'in a' and the duplicated article 'an'. This makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'for example' alone as a parenthetical phrase and punctuate with commas.

× We can use a polite language, you know, for a good impression, first impression.

✓ We can use polite language, you know, to make a good first impression.

'A polite language' is incorrect because 'language' in this sense is an uncountable noun and does not take the article 'a'. Also, 'for a good impression, first impression' is awkward and redundant. Use 'to make a good first impression' which uses the infinitive purpose structure and the correct adjective order. Suggestion: Treat 'language' as uncountable here and place adjectives ('good', 'first') before 'impression' in the correct order and avoid repetition.