Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 总体意思可以理解，但表达不清晰，语法和词汇使用有较多错误，句子不连贯。改进建议： 1) 明确主题句：直接回答“我通过父母学会礼貌”，避免模糊词汇（如 maybe、or something）。 2) 语法与词序：使用正确的结构（例如：“My parents taught me manners by…”）；注意名词与动词搭配（parents' education、parents taught me），避免错误短语（parents will depression）。 3) 提供具体细节并用连接词衔接：说明具体行为（例如：parents corrected my tone, taught me to say “please” and “thank you”）并用because/for example/so连接。最多控制在3–4句以内。 4) 词汇选择：用与养育和礼貌相关的词汇（teach/taught, manners, polite, respect, model, correct）。 练习方法：把答案分成主题句 + 1-2个支持细节，用简单准确的词汇和连接词连接，避免多余填充词。

例: My parents taught me to be polite from a young age. For example, they always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they corrected my tone when I sounded rude. Because they set a good example and explained why manners matter, I learned to be respectful to others.

提案: 回答肯定但表达混乱且含义模糊，缺乏清晰理由或具体例子。改进建议： 1) 直接给出观点并解释原因：先说“Yes, it is important.” 然后给出2个简短理由（e.g., builds respect, helps communication）。 2) 使用连接词来组织句子（because, for example, so that）。 3) 给出简短具体例子或结果，避免非标准表达（如 “we are applied”）。 4) 控制句子数量和长度，保持自然流畅。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people get along and shows respect. For example, saying “thank you” or listening carefully can make conversations smoother and prevent misunderstandings.

× I think maybe the parents education and parents will depression and through this they teach me how to describe on behavior or how we should talk or in or something else.

✓ I think maybe my parents' upbringing and my parents' discipline influenced me, and through that they taught me how to behave and how we should speak.

句中代词、所有格和名词短语使用不当：原句用“the parents education”和“parents will depression”结构混乱，缺少所有格，且“will depression”意思不明。应使用“my parents' upbringing”（父母的教养）或“my parents' discipline”（父母的管教），并把动词时态与主语一致（they taught）。另外，“describe on behavior”错误，正确表达为“behave”或“how to behave”。建议：使用所有格（my parents'）表示所属，避免直译，使用恰当的动词短语（influence, teach, behave）。

× Yes, I think it's important and what we see in today. We have not people have called as well because we are applied So that's so funny people.

✓ Yes, I think it's important. Nowadays, people are less polite because of social changes, so it's surprising to me.

原句句子结构混乱，逻辑不清：“what we see in today”应为“nowadays”或“what we see today”；“We have not people have called as well because we are applied”不成句，可能想说“people are less polite because of [something]”。需要重组为清晰的短句并补全缺失信息。建议：用简单句表达观点，先给出总体判断（It's important），然后用过渡语（Nowadays）说明观察到的现象，最后给出原因或感受。