Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 总体回答自然且直接，结构清晰，有主题句并提供了支持细节。但仍可改进：1) 语言准确性：句子“I learned to be polite mostly from my parents.”很好，但后句可避免重复“polite”一词，使用替代表达使词汇更丰富；2) 细节具体性：可以举一两个具体例子（例如父母如何示范、特定情境下的礼貌举动），让回答更生动；3) 连贯性词汇：加入一两个连接词（e.g. For instance, For example）使细节更有逻辑；4) 长度控制良好，保持不超过5句即可。建议用更丰富的词汇如“manners, courteous, set an example, instilled”来替换部分重复词汇。

例: I mostly learned good manners from my parents. For instance, my mother always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my father showed respect by listening attentively to others. Because politeness was part of our family routine, those habits were gradually instilled in me and now feel natural.

提案: 回答态度明确且主题句清晰，但存在一些问题：1) 语言错误：单词“Planners”应为“Politeness”或“Being polite”；注意主谓一致和拼写；2) 冗余表达：第一句和第二句都在强调重要性，可合并以避免重复；3) 细节可以更具体：给出一两个具体结果或文化例子（例如在工作或家庭场合的礼貌表现）；4) 使用连接词（e.g. Moreover, For example）可以增强连贯性。建议改用更精确的词汇并给出具体场景。

例: Yes, I think being polite is extremely important. Politeness shows respect for others and helps build trust, which is essential both at work and in personal relationships. For example, greeting colleagues courteously at the start of a meeting often leads to more cooperative teamwork.

× Planners shows great respect for others and helps to build good relationships, and it can also make social interactions much smoother and more pleasant.

✓ Politeness shows great respect for others and helps to build good relationships, and it can also make social interactions much smoother and more pleasant.

原句中“Planners”用词不当且与后面动词单数形式“shows”不匹配。此处应为名词“Politeness”（礼貌），意思与句子语境相符；句子主语为单数名词，动词用单数形式“shows”是正确的。建议用更贴切的名词表达：Politeness（礼貌）。