Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'say the words

例: %' — note: keep to correct words'), and give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid unclear or incorrect words and keep it to 2–3 sentences. For example, mention the exact polite words or gestures and who taught you them for specificity and natural phrasing. Also correct sentence structure and verb forms (e.g., 'we were taught to greet and to bless our elders'). Ensure not to exceed five sentences and avoid redundancy. Specific points: - Replace unclear terms like "wordspaux and opal" with the correct Filipino polite expressions (e.g., "po" and "opo") and explain them briefly. - Use a topic sentence: "I learned to be polite mainly at home." Then add: "For example, my parents taught me to use 'po' and 'opo' when speaking to elders." Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. - Fix grammar: 'gives means respect' -> 'show respect' or 'mean respect'. - Keep it concise and natural (2–3 sentences).

提案: Make your response more concise and complete with clear reasoning and a final thought. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons linked logically, and finish with a short conclusion. Avoid trailing off and informal fillers like 'I guess'. Use linking words such as 'because', 'therefore', or 'for example'. Specific points: - Topic sentence: 'Yes, I think politeness is very important.' - Support with specific reasons: 'because it helps build trust and makes daily interactions smoother.' - Give a brief example or consequence: 'For example, saying thank you or greeting someone politely can calm a tense situation.' - Conclude: 'So, politeness benefits both individuals and society.' - Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., remove 'means or shows' redundancy).

例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it shows basic respect and helps build trust. For example, greeting someone courteously or thanking them can make conversations more pleasant and prevent misunderstandings, so politeness benefits both individuals and society.

× It is part of our culture to always say the wordspaux and opal which literally gives means respect here in the Philippines and as a child we were also taught to always bless from our relatives.

✓ It is part of our culture to always say the words paux and opal, which literally mean respect here in the Philippines, and as a child we were also taught to always receive blessings from our relatives.

Errors: 'gives means respect' is ungrammatical and mixes verbs; 'gives' should not be used and 'means' should be 'mean' to agree with plural noun 'words' (subject-verb agreement); phrase 'bless from our relatives' is incorrect collocation. Type selection: incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (13) covers awkward/misused words and forms in the sentence. Suggestions: replace 'gives means respect' with 'mean respect' to convey definition; add commas to separate clauses; change 'bless from our relatives' to 'receive blessings from our relatives' or 'be blessed by our relatives' for correct verb and preposition usage.

× Being polite is very important because it's basic respect.

✓ Being polite is very important because it shows basic respect.

Error: original sentence is not incorrect but is stylistically weak and slightly unclear: 'it's basic respect' is less precise. Classified as sentence structure error (26). Suggestion: use a verb 'shows' to clarify the relationship between politeness and respect and improve naturalness.

× Showing respect to other people even if you don't know them means or shows that you are a good person in a way so especially nowadays because I guess a lot of people

✓ Showing respect to other people, even if you don't know them, shows that you are a good person, especially nowadays because I think many people are less considerate.

Problems: sentence is fragmented and redundant ('means or shows', 'in a way so especially nowadays because I guess a lot of people' is incomplete). Classified as sentence structure error (26). Suggestions: remove redundancy ('shows' suffices), add commas to set off the parenthetical, complete the thought by explaining why 'especially nowadays' matters, and replace 'guess' with 'think' for more natural speech. Also add a concluding clause to avoid sentence fragment.