Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You answered the question but your response was slightly unclear and included hesitations. In English (Bangladesh), try to start directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like “Which person?” and trim trailing fragments. Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “for instance” or “because”) to make it coherent. Keep maximum five sentences and make each sentence complete.

例: I learned politeness mainly from my parents. For instance, they always said “please” and “thank you” when talking to each other and to us, so I copied their behaviour. Also, my mother corrected me gently when I spoke rudely to elders, which helped me improve. As a result, politeness became a natural habit for me.

提案: Your answer shows an opinion but is repetitive and contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. In English (Bangladesh), express your view with one clear topic sentence, then give two concise reasons using linking words like “however” or “but” for contrast. Avoid repetition (e.g., “fight for yourself” twice) and correct grammar (use “yourself” correctly).

例: I think politeness is very important in most situations. For example, being polite helps in workplaces and social gatherings because it builds respect and good relationships. However, if someone treats you unfairly, you should stand up for yourself politely rather than being passive. Balancing politeness and assertiveness is the best approach.

× 'So politeness is in my characteristics, I guess.'

✓ 'Politeness is one of my characteristics, I guess.'

'The original sentence uses plural-sounding phrasing "in my characteristics" which is awkward and causes subject-verb clarity issues. Use a singular noun phrase "one of my characteristics" to agree with the singular subject "Politeness". Suggestion: use clear noun phrases and ensure the subject and its complement match in number and form.'

× 'But when I was a child I would learn it from my parents and seeing them being polite with each other and with us.'

✓ 'But when I was a child I learned it from my parents, seeing them being polite with each other and with us.'

'The use of "would learn" is incorrect here for habitual past that is better expressed with simple past "learned". Also use a participle clause "seeing them" linked to the main clause. Suggestion: use simple past to describe past habits in narratives unless you deliberately use "would" for repeated past actions in contexts that clearly signal habitual past.'

× 'So mostly I've learned from them and.'

✓ 'So mostly I learned from them.'

'The clause ends abruptly with "and" causing a sentence fragment. Also mixing present perfect "I've learned" with the previous simple past is inconsistent. Use simple past "I learned" to match context or complete the sentence if you keep "and". Suggestion: finish coordinated ideas or remove the coordinating conjunction.'

× 'I think it varies in cases.'

✓ 'I think it varies depending on the situation.'

'"Varies in cases" is non-idiomatic English. Use the present tense "varies" correctly but pair it with an appropriate prepositional phrase like "depending on the situation". Suggestion: choose natural collocations such as "depends on the situation" or "varies depending on the context".'

× 'Being polite is important in some part of life when there are other polite people.'

✓ 'Being polite is important in some parts of life, especially when other people are polite.'

'"In some part of life" is incorrect preposition and number. Use plural "parts of life" and rephrase the dependent clause for clarity. Suggestion: use "in some parts of life" or "at certain times in life" and keep subject-verb order."

× 'But it is crucially important not to be polite and fight for yourself when there are bad people in the circle.'

✓ 'But it is sometimes important not to be polite and to stand up for yourself when there are harmful people around.'

'The phrase "crucially important not to be polite" is awkward; also parallel structure is needed: "not to be polite and to stand up". "Bad people in the circle" is informal; use "harmful people around". Suggestion: maintain parallel infinitives after "to" and choose clearer verbs like "stand up for yourself".'

× 'So we have to fight for yourself, so you.'

✓ 'So we have to fight for ourselves, so you should too.'

'"Fight for yourself" conflicts with plural subject "we"; pronouns must agree in number. Also the phrase ends awkwardly; add "should too" to complete the idea. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agreement (we/ourselves, you/yourself) and complete the sentence logically.'