Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有内容，但表达不够清晰且有很多语法和用词错误。要点：1) 开头可直接回答问题，避免无意义的填充词（如“Okay”）。2) 使用清晰的主题句说明谁教你以及如何教的（例如父母通过示范、提醒或奖励）。3) 使用连接词（例如“for example”、“they taught me by”）来组织细节；提供具体例子（父母如何示范、什么时候提醒）。4) 注意句子结构和词汇准确性，避免拼写或造词错误（如“teacher gaunted”、“platoids”不可用）。练习时可把句子控制在最多5句之内。

例: My parents taught me to be polite from a young age. For example, they always reminded me to say ‘please’ and ‘thank you’ and they modeled respectful behavior when talking to others. They also corrected me gently when I was rude and praised me when I showed kindness. Because of their guidance, politeness became a habit for me.

提案: 回答有明确立场，但表达不够精确和自然。要点：1) 直接给出观点并用一句话总结原因，避免冗长或含糊的短语（如“and so on”）。2) 用更恰当的词汇替换“legal”（可能想说“harmonious”或“orderly”）。3) 用连接词（such as, for instance, because）引出具体例子或结果，提供一两个具体的情境来支撑观点。4) 控制句子数量并注意流畅度，去掉口头语“Um”。

例: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it helps people get along and creates a more harmonious society. For instance, polite behavior makes everyday interactions smoother — neighbours are more willing to help each other and misunderstandings are less likely to escalate. Therefore, small gestures like saying ‘thank you’ can have a big impact.

× When I was a child, my parents teacher gaunted me a lot of platoids such as be friendly with others and be a minded and care for others fitted.

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me a lot of platitudes, such as "be friendly to others," "be kind-hearted," and "care for others."

句子结构混乱并且有多个单词使用错误。首先“parents teacher gaunted”不是正确的动词短语，应为“parents taught me”（父母教我）。单词“platoids”拼写错误，应为“platitudes”（陈词滥调/常识性教导），根据语境也可以用“lessons”或“rules”。短语“be friendly with others”更常见为“be friendly to others”。“be a minded”是错误组合，意图应为“be kind-minded”或更自然的“be kind-hearted”。“and care for others fitted”末尾的“fitted”没有意义，应去掉，保持并列动词形式“and care for others”。建议：复查单词拼写，保持并列结构一致（动词不定式或形容词形式统一），确保主语、谓语清晰。

× Yes, I think being polite is very significant because being polite makes the society more friendly and legal such as people can help each other Um and so on

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because it makes society friendlier and more orderly; for example, people can help each other.

原句结构冗长且用词不当。首先“very significant”虽可用但口语中更常说“very important”。短语“makes the society more friendly and legal”错误：冠词“the”在此不必要，且“legal”意思为“合法的”，不符合语境，应改为“more orderly”或“more civil”表示有秩序或文明。并列部分“such as people can help each other Um and so on”结构不正确，建议用“for example, people can help each other”来引出举例，并去掉停顿词“Um and so on”。建议：注意词义选择（legal vs orderly），去掉多余冠词，使用清晰的连接词引出例子，并避免口头填充词。