Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容方面：回答触及了学习礼貌的来源（父母和幼儿园），但细节不够清晰且有逻辑混乱（如“NASA replied”显然不相关）。建议先用一句主题句直接回答，然后用1–2个具体例子说明父母或幼儿园如何教你礼貌（例如通过示范、提醒或规则），并用连接词衔接句子。语言方面：注意句子结构与词汇搭配（例如 say/tell/teach politeness，not “politeness things”），避免无关单词，控制在3–5句内。发音/流利度建议：放慢语速，思路先在脑中组织好再说。

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and my nursery. For example, my parents always modelled good manners by saying “please” and “thank you,” and they reminded me to greet adults respectfully. At nursery, teachers taught us simple rules like taking turns and sharing toys, which reinforced polite behaviour. Because of these examples, I grew up understanding why politeness matters in everyday life.

提案: 内容方面：回答表示“非常重要”，但论证混乱且重复“especially”多次，缺少具体原因或例子。建议先用一句明确的观点句，然后用两到三个有条理的原因支持（例如：建立良好的人际关系、避免误会、帮助职业发展），并给出简短例子。语言方面：精简句子，使用恰当词汇（e.g. “politeness plays an important role” not “polite is complete a significant role”），使用连接词（because, for example, therefore）。保持答案在3–5句内。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important. Politeness helps to build trust and good relationships with others because it shows respect. For example, in the workplace, polite communication can prevent misunderstandings and make teamwork smoother. Therefore, being polite often leads to better social and professional outcomes.

× Well, when I was a child I learned to be polite from my parents and the nursery.

✓ When I was a child, I learned to be polite from my parents and at nursery.

句子结构不够清晰。原句中“the nursery”与前半部分搭配不自然，且缺少逗号分隔时间状语。建议在时间状语后加逗号，并把“the nursery”改为“at nursery”或“the nursery”视情境而定，使表达更自然。清晰的句子结构有助于表达来源渠道（父母和托儿所）。

× That is because my parents always told me a lot of politeness things and NASA replied was very important.

✓ They always taught me many polite behaviours and repeatedly said it was very important.

原句使用了不正确的词汇和词类（politeness things 不自然，NASA replied 显然错误）。应使用名词短语“polite behaviours”（礼貌行为）并用副词或副词短语“repeatedly said”表达“反复说”。此外修正了拼写/用词错误。建议学习常用搭配如“teach someone polite behaviour”，“say it is important”。（中文：原句词汇搭配不当且有拼写/用词错误，应使用常见搭配并改正错误单词。）

× That is because sometimes no rules like a small society.

✓ This is because sometimes there are no rules in small social groups.

原句句子结构混乱，缺少谓语并且名词短语“不像小社会的规则”不清楚。改为“There are no rules in small social groups” 可明确表达“有时在小型社群中没有规则”。注意主语、系动词及介词短语的完整结构。

× Well, for me I would say definitely yes.

✓ For me, I would definitely say yes.

副词位置不当。虽然时态没有大错，但副词“definitely”放在动词之后更自然。建议把副词放在助动词与主要动词之间或动词前，使语句更地道。（中文：副词位置更自然的调整。）

× Especially I think polite is complete a significant role in our daily life especially it can really impact the social and communicate with others especially if we lose points that may made a lot of mistake and misunderstanding.

✓ I think politeness plays a significant role in our daily lives; it greatly affects social interactions and communication with others. If we are impolite, we may make many mistakes and cause misunderstandings.

原句存在大量词类错误和重复使用“especially”。“polite is complete a significant role” 搭配错误，应使用动词“play a role”。“impact the social and communicate” 结构不当，应改为“affects social interactions and communication”。“lose points that may made a lot of mistake” 语法与时态错误，改为“If we are impolite, we may make many mistakes”。建议：避免重复连接词，使用正确动词搭配（play a role, affect communication），注意主谓一致和时态一致。（中文：指出了形容词/副词错误、词序与搭配问题，并给出改进建议。）