Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details with linking words. Avoid small grammar errors (e.g., use present perfect correctly and match singular/plural). Be more specific about examples of teachers’ influence (what they did) and the habits you practiced (e.g., bowing, respectful greetings). Keep it under five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'manners', 'self-discipline', 'composure').

例: I learned politeness mainly through studying Hindustani classical music as a child. My teachers modeled respectful behaviour and expected students to bow, speak softly, and arrive punctually, which taught me good manners. As a result, I developed self-discipline and composure that help me stay focused and respectful in social situations.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid informal words like 'yeah' and repeated phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'professional environment', 'rapport', 'productivity') and correct grammar (e.g., 'help to concentrate on the work' or 'help me concentrate on my work').

例: Yes, I think politeness is very important. Firstly, in a professional environment it helps build rapport and trust with colleagues, which improves teamwork. Secondly, being polite reduces conflict and distractions, so I can concentrate better and be more productive.

× I have learned Hindustani classical music since my childhood.

✓ I have learned Hindustani classical music since my childhood.

No change needed: 'have learned' is present perfect with 'since my childhood' which is acceptable. However, a more natural phrasing is 'I have learned Hindustani classical music since childhood' or 'I have been learning Hindustani classical music since my childhood' depending on intended meaning. Use present perfect continuous (have been learning) to emphasize an ongoing activity; use present perfect (have learned) to emphasize completion. Suggestion: replace with 'I have been learning Hindustani classical music since my childhood.' Problem matched ID:9

× The contribution of the teachers who taught me this have a lot to do with the politeness that I have in my behaviour.

✓ The contribution of the teachers who taught me this has a lot to do with the politeness that I have in my behaviour.

The subject of the verb is 'The contribution' (singular), so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Also 'in my behaviour' is slightly awkward; 'in my behaviour' can be replaced with 'in my behaviour' or better 'in my behaviour' -> 'in my behaviour' kept but consider 'in my behaviour' -> 'in my behaviour' (recommended: 'in my behavior' or 'in my conduct'). Suggestion: 'The contribution of the teachers who taught me this has a lot to do with the politeness I show in my behaviour.' Problem matched ID:27

× It not only taught me to be able to concentrate but also taught me how silence can improve.

✓ It not only taught me to concentrate but also taught me how silence can help me improve.

'taught me to be able to concentrate' is wordy and incorrect; 'taught me to concentrate' is correct. The second clause 'taught me how silence can improve' is ungrammatical because 'silence' cannot 'improve' by itself; likely intended meaning is that silence can help one improve (or improve concentration). So change to 'taught me how silence can help me improve' or 'taught me how silence can improve concentration.' Suggestion: 'It not only taught me to concentrate but also taught me how silence can improve concentration.' Problem matched ID:6

× Yeah, definitely. It is very much important to maintain discipline in the workplace as you grow up.

✓ Yes, definitely. It is very important to maintain discipline in the workplace as you grow up.

'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is more appropriate in a test. 'Very much important' is incorrect collocation; use 'very important' or 'extremely important.' The rest is acceptable. Suggestion: 'Yes, definitely. It is very important to maintain discipline in the workplace as you grow up.' Problem matched ID:13

× Politeness helps a lot to build social connections in a better way and also it helps to concentrate in a work that you are doing.

✓ Politeness helps a lot in building better social connections, and it also helps you concentrate on the work you are doing.

'helps a lot to build' is awkward; better: 'helps a lot in building' or 'helps to build'. 'in a better way' is wordy; 'better' suffices. 'helps to concentrate in a work' is incorrect preposition: use 'concentrate on the work'. Also include subject 'you' for clarity. Suggestion: 'Politeness helps a lot in building better social connections, and it also helps you concentrate on the work you are doing.' Problem matched ID:11