Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more structured and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific examples, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition (e.g., "simple polite terms" twice) and correct unclear phrasing such as "they wouldn't mistake me as I was very strong." Also keep the answer to no more than 4–5 sentences.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents, who taught me to say phrases like "thank you" and "excuse me." For example, they reminded me to use those words when interacting with adults and friends, which helped me avoid coming across as rude. As a result, politeness became a habit and improved my relationships with others.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide one clear reason with a specific example. Use linking words (for example, therefore, because) and avoid vague or redundant phrases like "brings us to wherever we need to go." Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it helps build positive relationships. For example, showing respect to teachers and classmates can lead to better cooperation at school and more opportunities later on. Therefore, good manners are useful both now and in adult life.

× I learned how to be polite by saying simple thank you and excuse me and just simple polite terms to talk to people just so they wouldn't mistake me as I was very strong.

✓ I learned how to be polite by saying simple phrases like 'thank you' and 'excuse me' and using polite expressions so people would not misunderstand me when I was very strong.

The original sentence contains awkward and incorrect verb forms and word choices. 'Saying simple thank you and excuse me' should use plural 'phrases' and include quotes for clarity; 'just simple polite terms to talk to people' is redundant and unidiomatic. 'So they wouldn't mistake me as I was very strong' is incorrect: 'mistake me' needs an object or clarification; the intended meaning is 'misunderstand me' and 'when I was very strong' fits context. Suggest using 'by saying simple phrases like 'thank you' and 'excuse me' and using polite expressions so people would not misunderstand me when I was very strong.' This fixes -ing phrase usage and clarifies meaning.

× Yes, I think being polite and having manners is important in our daily lives, especially when we're growing up and becoming adults and teenagers 'cause it brings us to wherever we need to go in our adulthood.

✓ Yes, I think being polite and having manners are important in our daily lives, especially while we're growing up as children and teenagers, because they help us succeed in adulthood.

There is a subject-verb agreement and sentence structure issue. The compound subject 'being polite and having manners' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are' (Grammar Problem Type 27, but per instructions we only correct types from the provided list; primary error here is sentence structure). The phrase 'becoming adults and teenagers' is illogical and reversed; 'growing up as children and teenagers' is clearer. Colloquial ' 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech, and 'it brings us to wherever we need to go in our adulthood' is vague; 'they help us succeed in adulthood' is clearer. The correction improves agreement, clarity, and natural phrasing.