Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence saying where you learned politeness (e.g., family), then add one or two specific supporting details (an example of behaviour taught, and how school or friends reinforced it). Use linking words (e.g., also, however) and avoid unclear words or irrelevant phrases. Keep it to 2–4 short sentences.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my family. For example, my parents always taught me to say “please” and “thank you,” and to greet elders respectfully. At school, teachers reinforced these habits by praising polite behavior, so I gradually adopted them.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two concise reasons and an example. Use linking words like because and for example to make your answer coherent. Avoid filler words and repetition; choose precise vocabulary such as "respectful" or "considerate." Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps people cooperate. For example, polite behavior at work or school makes communication smoother and reduces conflicts.

× Actually it's depend on how the how your family taught you the politeness as a child but it's except umm like sex.

✓ Actually it depends on how your family taught you to be polite as a child, but there are exceptions, for example gender-related expectations.

The original sentence has several pronoun and subject issues: 'it's depend' uses 'it' with a verb that needs third-person singular agreement; 'the how your family' is redundant; 'taught you the politeness' uses an incorrect object phrase. Also 'it's except' is ungrammatical. Corrected to 'it depends' (third person singular), remove redundancy, use 'taught you to be polite' (correct verb pattern), and replace 'it's except' with 'there are exceptions' to express exception. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and use correct verb patterns like 'teach someone to do something'.

× It's can be change in the school or your social life but it depends on the person.

✓ It can change at school or in your social life, but it depends on the person.

'It's can be change' mixes contraction 'it's' (it is) with modal 'can' and uses base verb incorrectly. Use 'it can change' with base verb, or 'it can be changed' for passive. Also use prepositions 'at school' or 'in your social life'. Suggestion: avoid using 'it's' before modals and use correct verb forms: modal + base verb, and choose correct prepositions.

× Sure. It's all the, it's, uh, very significant, all the people.

✓ Sure. It's very significant for all people.

The phrase 'all the, it's, uh, very significant, all the people' is ungrammatical and has subject-verb and article issues. 'It's very significant for all people' is concise and grammatically correct. Suggestion: simplify sentences, ensure the subject and verb agree and use prepositions like 'for' to indicate who is affected.

× I mean, you have to be polite in every way because if, if you want, nobody's gonna be polite for something.

✓ I mean, you have to be polite in every situation because if you don't, nobody will be polite to you just because of something you did.

'In every way' is better as 'in every situation' here; 'if you want' is wrong contextually and should be 'if you don't'; 'gonna' is informal and 'be polite for something' is incorrect collocation—use 'polite to you because of something you did'. Also replace informal 'gonna' with 'will'. Suggestion: choose appropriate quantifiers and conditionals and avoid informal contractions in formal responses.

× And, uh, we have to share our kindness, our polite.

✓ And we have to share our kindness and politeness.

'Our polite' is incorrect because 'polite' is an adjective; the noun form 'politeness' is needed. Use 'kindness and politeness' as parallel nouns. Suggestion: ensure parallel structure and use correct noun forms when listing qualities.