Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar mistakes, avoid unclear words (e.g. “blindness”), and add one specific example using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

例: I learned to be polite from both my parents and my teachers. For example, my mother always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher rewarded polite behaviour with praise. As a result, politeness became a habit that I carry into adulthood.

提案: Answer directly, fix grammar and word choice, and add a concise supporting reason and example connected with a linking word. Use precise vocabulary like “reduces conflict” and “professional settings.” Limit to up to five sentences.

例: Yes, I believe being polite is very important because it reduces conflict and builds respect in professional settings. For instance, when I speak politely to colleagues, they are more cooperative and meetings run more smoothly. Therefore, politeness helps create a positive work environment.

× When I was a child, my parents and teacher used to teach me the words like thank you and please at my school and my home.

✓ When I was a child, my parents and my teacher used to teach me words like 'thank you' and 'please' at school and at home.

Pronoun/possessive consistency and article use: the original mixes 'parents and teacher' without parallel possessive 'my' before 'teacher', which is awkward. Also 'the words like thank you and please' is incorrect article use; 'words like' is correct. 'At my school and my home' is wordy; use 'at school and at home'. Suggest adding 'my' before 'teacher' for parallel structure or remove both for general reference, and remove the definite article before 'words'.

× They also praise my good manners and that's why the blindness become a good habit.

✓ They also praised my good manners, and that's why politeness became a good habit.

The sentence has wrong word choice and tense/voice issues. 'Blindness' is incorrect word choice (likely meant 'politeness'); use 'politeness'. The original mixes present 'praise' with past context 'When I was a child'; change to past 'praised'. 'Become' should be past 'became' to match timeframe. Also comma and conjunction needed. Suggest using the correct noun 'politeness' and matching past tense verbs.

× Well, yes, being polite is very important because it makes the conversation less arguments and respected at work.

✓ Well, yes, being polite is very important because it leads to fewer arguments and more respect at work.

Incorrect noun form and adjective/adverb use: 'less arguments' is ungrammatical; use 'fewer arguments' for countable nouns. 'And respected at work' lacks a subject and verb; use 'more respect at work' or 'helps you be respected at work'. Also 'makes the conversation' is odd; 'leads to' or 'results in' fits better. Suggest using 'fewer' with countable nouns and a parallel noun phrase 'more respect'.

× When I call somebody with politeness, it makes the person feel respected and it create a good environment.

✓ When I call someone politely, it makes the person feel respected and creates a good environment.

Verb form and subject-verb agreement problems: 'call somebody with politeness' is a wordy construction; use the adverb 'politely' after the verb. 'It create' is wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'creates' to match singular subject 'it'. Also 'somebody' -> 'someone' is stylistic. Suggest using adverbial form and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.