Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容有帮助理解的主旨，但有较多语法错误、词汇使用不当与表达不清的问题。建议： 1) 语法与词汇纠正：把“pilot/person/pilots”改为“polite/ polite behaviour”，把“make recognization”改为“get to know”或“recognise someone”。 2) 简洁结构：先用一句主题句直接回答（How did you learn...？——“My parents taught me to be polite.”），然后用1–2句具体例子支撑。控制在最多5句内。 3) 使用连接词并给出具体细节：用 because / for example / they advised me to… 等连接，说明父母如何教（示范、提醒、送小礼物）以及这些方法的效果。 4) 发音与流利度：减少犹豫词（uh），多练习完整句子，提高自信。

例: My parents taught me to be polite from an early age. For example, they always reminded me to greet strangers and relatives with a friendly “hello” and to say “thank you.” They also encouraged me to show appreciation by offering small gifts or notes on special occasions. Because of these habits, I felt more comfortable meeting new people and making friends.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在多处词汇错误、句子不完整和结构松散。建议： 1) 直接给出主题句：例如“My answer is yes, politeness is very important.” 2) 用清晰原因支持观点：给出具体原因（build trust, maintain relationships, create opportunities），并用连接词（because, so, therefore）组织句子。 3) 完成句子并避免重复：不要重复“pilot/person”，改为“polite person”，并把“social cycle”换成“social circle”或“network”。 4) 增加一个简短例子或结果：例如“Because when you are polite, people are more willing to help you at work or in daily life.”

例: Yes, I think politeness is very important. Being polite helps you build trust and makes others more willing to get to know you. For example, polite behaviour at work can lead to better teamwork and more opportunities. Therefore, politeness can expand your social circle and improve your relationships.

× Well, actually, when I was a child, my parents always told me to be pilots when I meet strangers or the family members for several ways on for one way, you can greet them and respectfully and you can just give them small gifts to show your gratitude and, uh, appreciation.

✓ Well, actually, when I was a child, my parents always told me to be polite when I met strangers or family members. For example, you can greet them respectfully, and you can give them small gifts to show your gratitude and appreciation.

错误类型：13（形容词或副词使用不当）。 说明（简体中文）：句中多处词汇选择和词序不当。“be pilots”使用了错误的名词（pilots 意为“飞行员”），应为形容词 polite（有礼貌的）。动词时态要与上下文一致，原句“when I meet”与开头的过去时间状语“when I was a child”不一致，应改为过去式“when I met”。短语“greet them and respectfully”副词放位错误，正确为“greet them respectfully”。另外，句子过长且结构混乱，建议拆成两句并用 For example 引出举例。改进建议：学习常见形容词 polite 的用法，注意动词时态与时间状语一致，副词通常放在动词之后或句末，保持句子简洁明确。

× Yeah, definitely to be a pilot person is really important for ourselves, because if you are pilot person, the other people will trust you and want to make recognization with you, and they really want to make a friend with you.

✓ Yeah, definitely being a polite person is really important for us, because if you are a polite person, other people will trust you and want to get to know you, and they may want to become your friends.

错误类型：2（第三人称单数问题）及其它问题，但主要需按照清单修正为第三人称相关表达。说明（简体中文）：原句中多处词汇错误和短语不自然。“to be a pilot person”同样错误使用 pilot，应为 polite；“for ourselves”用法不当，改为“for us”更自然；“make recognization with you”不是英语表达，正确应为“get to know you”（认识你）；“make a friend with you”应改为“become your friends”或“make friends with you”。此外主语一致性与动词形式需要匹配。改进建议：注意形容词 polite 的使用，学习常见短语 get to know someone, make friends with someone，并保证代词（us/ourselves）用法正确。

× In that way you can enlarge your social cycle and you.

✓ In that way, you can expand your social circle.

错误类型：26（句子结构错误）。 说明（简体中文）：原句“enlarge your social cycle and you”结构不完整且用词不当。英语中更常用的搭配是“expand your social circle”（扩大社交圈/人际关系圈）。句末多余的“and you”使句子不完整。改进建议：使用固定搭配 expand your social circle，避免直接逐字翻译“social cycle”，并删去多余短语，确保句子完整。