Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article use, and give one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors. Avoid vague phrases like “deficiencies” and unclear structure. For example, say who taught you, how they taught you (rules, modelling, praise), and describe one concrete outcome.

例: When I was a child, my teacher taught me good manners by explaining polite phrases and by praising polite behaviour. For example, she encouraged us to say “please” and “thank you” and to listen when others speak, so I learned how to express my feelings respectfully and avoid offending people.

提案: Make the response concise and structured: give a clear topic sentence, then two specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., “because”, “also”); correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and word choice (e.g., “strangers”, “future tasks”). Provide a short example or result to support your point.

例: Yes, I think politeness is very important because it helps you make friends more easily and also builds trust with colleagues. For instance, when I speak politely to new classmates, they are more willing to help me with group work, which improves our collaboration.

× In the child, my teacher told me how to have a good manners when communicate to my classmates or to the elders.

✓ As a child, my teacher taught me how to have good manners when communicating with my classmates and elders.

Errors: 'In the child' uses incorrect article and preposition; correct phrase is 'As a child' (idiomatic). 'a good manners' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'good manners' (no article). 'told me how to have' is awkward for learning a habit—'taught me how to' is better (verb choice and tense). 'when communicate to' is wrong: use gerund 'communicating' and preposition 'with' not 'to'. Use 'and elders' rather than 'or to the elders' for natural coordination. Suggestion: learn common idioms ('as a child'), match article with noun number, use correct verb forms (taught, communicating), and use appropriate prepositions (with).

× In the child, my teacher told me how to have a good manners when communicate to my classmates or to the elders.

✓ As a child, my teacher taught me how to have good manners when communicating with my classmates and elders.

The sentence mixes past verbs: 'told' is past but 'communicate' is base form; the correct consistent form is past with gerund 'communicating'. Also 'told me how to have' is acceptable but 'taught me how to' is more natural for past instruction. Suggestion: keep tense consistency—use past tense and appropriate verb forms (taught, communicating).

× In the child, my teacher told me how to have a good manners when communicate to my classmates or to the elders.

✓ As a child, my teacher taught me how to have good manners when communicating with my classmates and elders.

After time adverbial 'when' describing simultaneous action, use a verb in -ing form ('communicating') rather than base form. Also 'have good manners when communicating with' is the correct sequence. Suggestion: use gerunds after time clauses like 'when' if indicating ongoing or simultaneous action.

× In the child, my teacher told me how to have a good manners when communicate to my classmates or to the elders.

✓ As a child, my teacher taught me how to have good manners when communicating with my classmates and elders.

'a good manners' is incorrect because 'manners' is plural and cannot take the singular article 'a'. Remove the article or change to a singular noun (not applicable here). Suggestion: remember which nouns are countable singular/plural; use no 'a' with plural nouns.

× In the child, my teacher told me how to have a good manners when communicate to my classmates or to the elders.

✓ As a child, my teacher taught me how to have good manners when communicating with my classmates and elders.

'In the child' should be 'As a child'. 'communicate to' is not natural here; use 'communicating with' to indicate interaction. Also 'to the elders' is odd; use 'elders' or 'older people' without 'the' in this context. Suggestion: study common collocations: 'as a child', 'communicate with', and omit unnecessary articles.

× That is really important process lets me know how to express my emotions instead of deficiencies or offense others.

✓ That was a really important process that taught me how to express my emotions without hurting or offending others.

Original has missing articles and connectors: 'That is really important process' needs article and tense agreement: 'That was a really important process' (past context). Missing relative pronoun 'that' before verb 'lets'. 'lets me know how to express' is wordy; 'taught me how to express' fits past learning. 'instead of deficiencies or offense others' is ungrammatical and unclear—likely intended 'without offending others' or 'without showing deficiencies' but 'deficiencies' is wrong choice. I corrected to 'without hurting or offending others' which is natural. Suggestion: ensure clauses are connected properly, choose correct verbs, and use natural expressions for 'not causing offense'.

× That is really important process lets me know how to express my emotions instead of deficiencies or offense others.

✓ That was a really important process that taught me how to express my emotions without hurting or offending others.

Tense mismatch: previous sentence speaks about childhood in the past, so use past tense 'was' and 'taught' not present 'is'/'lets'. Keep verb tenses consistent to reflect the time frame. Suggestion: when recounting past experiences, use past tense throughout.

× That is really important process lets me know how to express my emotions instead of deficiencies or offense others.

✓ That was a really important process that taught me how to express my emotions without hurting or offending others.

'Really important process' needs an article: 'a really important process'. Also 'instead of deficiencies or offense others' misuses nouns/adjectives—'offense' should be verb 'offend' with appropriate form. I replaced awkward words with 'without hurting or offending others' which correctly uses verbs and adverbs. Suggestion: check parts of speech and use verbs where actions are intended.

× That is really important process lets me know how to express my emotions instead of deficiencies or offense others.

✓ That was a really important process that taught me how to express my emotions without hurting or offending others.

Original omits needed relative pronoun 'that' before 'lets me know'. Also 'me' is fine but the clause needs a connector: 'process that taught me'. Suggestion: include relative pronouns to connect clauses correctly and make meaning clear.

× Yes, definitely being polite is important that it not only make you easy to make friends with the stranger but also it can help you to build a strong connection with others that may help for your following task.

✓ Yes, definitely being polite is important; it not only makes it easier for you to make friends with strangers, but it can also help you build strong connections with others that may help with your future tasks.

Multiple issues: after 'not only' the verb must agree and use third person singular 'makes' (subject 'it' or 'being polite'). Use 'easier' (adjective) rather than 'easy'. 'make friends with the stranger' should be plural 'strangers' and no article. 'help you to build' -> 'help you build' (omit unnecessary 'to'). 'following task' is unnatural; use 'future tasks'. Also use gerund/infinitive forms correctly and maintain parallel structure. Suggestion: maintain parallelism in 'not only... but also' constructions, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct noun forms.

× Yes, definitely being polite is important that it not only make you easy to make friends with the stranger but also it can help you to build a strong connection with others that may help for your following task.

✓ Yes, definitely being polite is important; it not only makes it easier for you to make friends with strangers, but it can also help you build strong connections with others that may help with your future tasks.

'it not only make' is incorrect because the verb should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it' (or 'being polite'). Also maintain parallel verbs after 'not only... but also': 'makes' and 'can help' are correctly coordinated. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects and keep parallel verb forms in correlative constructions.

× Yes, definitely being polite is important that it not only make you easy to make friends with the stranger but also it can help you to build a strong connection with others that may help for your following task.

✓ Yes, definitely being polite is important; it not only makes it easier for you to make friends with strangers, but it can also help you build strong connections with others that may help with your future tasks.

Problems: 'make friends with the stranger' should be 'make friends with strangers' (no 'the'). 'help for your following task' is wrong preposition; use 'help with your future tasks' or 'help you with future tasks'. Also 'make you easy' should be 'make it easier for you'. Suggestion: learn common prepositional phrases: 'help with', 'make friends with', and 'easier for you'.