Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives sources (mom and teacher), but it is slightly repetitive, has grammar errors, and lacks clear linking and specific examples. To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, correct grammar (use plurals and articles), add one brief specific example of what you were taught, and use a linking word to connect idea and result. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: I learned to be polite as a child mainly from my mother and my teachers. For example, my mother always told me to say “please” and “thank you,” and my teacher praised respectful behaviour in class. As a result, I find it easier to get along with people and avoid misunderstandings.

提案: Your answer shows the correct view (politeness is important) but is unclear, repetitive, and grammatically weak. Improve by giving a direct topic sentence stating your opinion, then give one clear reason with a brief specific example or result using a linking word (e.g., because, therefore). Avoid repeating words and check subject-verb agreement and plural forms.

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build and maintain relationships. For example, when I speak politely to new colleagues, they are more willing to cooperate, so teamwork becomes smoother.

× When I was a child I learned to be polite to everyone, even strangers, very close friend and of course a teacher.

✓ When I was a child I learned to be polite to everyone, even strangers, very close friends and, of course, teachers.

The sentence mixes singular and plural nouns inconsistently. 'Very close friend' should be plural 'very close friends' to match 'everyone' and 'strangers'. 'A teacher' is better as the plural 'teachers' when speaking generally. Use commas around 'of course' for clarity. Improve by matching number across items and adding commas for natural pause.

× I learned this from my mom and teacher and this makes my life very better.

✓ I learned this from my mom and my teacher, and this has made my life much better.

Pronoun/reference and article use are inconsistent: 'my mom and teacher' should be 'my mom and my teacher' to show both possessive relations. 'This makes my life very better' is ungrammatical: use present perfect 'has made' to indicate a change that affects the present, and 'much better' is the correct comparative phrase. Add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses.

× **** *** I guess.

✓ I guess so.

The original contains placeholders '**** ***' which are not valid words. Replace with 'I guess so' to provide a short, natural response. Ensure the sentence contains a subject and verb or a complete phrase.

× I think being polite is very important as having a relationship or making your relationship or even having a new friends talking to someone.

✓ I think being polite is very important for forming relationships, maintaining them, or when talking to new friends.

The original has awkward phrasing and tense/number errors: 'as having a relationship' and 'making your relationship' are incorrect constructions. Use 'for forming relationships' and 'maintaining them' for clarity. 'A new friends' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'new friends' or 'a new friend'. Verb forms are adjusted to parallel structure ('forming', 'maintaining', 'talking').

× I learned to be polite as I can even to like family members, friends and friends.

✓ I learned to be as polite as I can, even to family members and friends.

This sentence has redundancy ('friends and friends') and incorrect comparative structure. Use 'as polite as I can' for the correct comparative form. Remove duplicate 'friends' and omit unnecessary 'to like'. Keep consistent plural nouns 'family members and friends'.