Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 整体表达可以理解，但存在语法、用词和连贯性问题。建议： 1) 开头用一句明确的主题句直接回答问题，例如“I learned politeness mainly from my parents.”避免口头填充词（umm）。 2) 用1–2句具体细节支持观点，使用连接词（for example, they would…）使结构更清晰。 3) 修正不准确的短语（如“great to the person”应为“greet people”或“be polite to others”），并使用更恰当的词汇（express gratitude, say please and thank you）。 4) 控制在最多5句内，句子简洁，语法准确（注意时态和主谓一致）。

例: I learned politeness mainly from my parents. For example, they always reminded me to say “please” and “thank you,” and to greet people when meeting them. Because of their example, I try to show respect and express gratitude in daily situations.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但内容短、组织不清晰且包含不恰当或模糊的短语。建议： 1) 直接给出主题句（Yes, I think it is very important.），然后用连接词（because, for example）展开理由。 2) 提供具体原因或举例（e.g., it helps build good relationships at work and school），避免使用不恰当或不清楚的短语（如“screw it to my colleagues”）。 3) 修正语法错误（完整主谓结构，例如“It makes me feel appreciated”），并删除填充词以提升流利度。 4) 控制答案长度在2–4句内，逻辑连贯。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps build good relationships. For example, saying thank you when someone helps you makes them feel appreciated and creates a positive atmosphere at work or school.

× Umm my mom and dad always remind me that to say please and thank you and also great to the person that you know when you meet them.

✓ Umm my mom and dad always reminded me to say 'please' and 'thank you' and also to greet the person you know when you meet them.

错误类型：第三人称单数/时态和动词形式问题。解释（简体中文）：原句中“always remind me that to say”结构不自然且时态不一致。父母作为过去教导，应使用过去时“reminded”。另外不需要“that to say”，应直接用不定式“to say”或简单动词不带that。并且“great”拼写错误，应为“greet”。建议：使用一致的时态（此处用过去时），使用不定式结构“reminded me to say…”，并改正拼写为“greet”。

× So I learned a lot from them.

✓ So I learned a lot from them.

错误类型：时态问题（检查项）。解释（简体中文）：原句为过去时“I learned”，与前文“My parents taught me... when I was a child”时态一致，句子本身语法正确。此处无需修改。提示：保持时态一致即可。

× Good job!

✓ Yes, I think being polite is quite important.

错误类型：句子结构/省略动词和主语。解释（简体中文）：考官问“Do you think being polite is very important?”需要学生给出完整回答。原稿“Good job!”与问题无关且不是完整答句，缺乏主语和谓语。建议使用完整句子表达观点，例如“Yes, I think being polite is quite important.”以包含主语、谓语和完整意思。

× Yeah, think being polite is quite important

✓ Yes, I think being polite is quite important.

错误类型：句子结构问题（省略主语和助词）。解释（简体中文）：口语中常省略“I”或助动词，但在正式回答中应完整表达。原句缺少主语“I”和助动词，使句子不完整。建议在正式场合使用完整形式“Yes, I think...”。

× when someone helps me, umm, make me feel really kindness

✓ When someone helps me, it makes me feel really appreciated.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当及句子结构。解释（简体中文）：原句“make me feel really kindness”中“kindness”是名词，不能与“feel”直接搭配表示“感到受重视”。应使用形容词或过去分词短语，如“appreciated”或“valued”。同时主句缺少形式主语“it”。建议改为“It makes me feel really appreciated/valued.”并避免填充语“umm”。

× I always screw it to my colleagues

✓ I always show politeness to my colleagues / I always treat my colleagues politely.

错误类型：代词/词语使用不当（表达错误）。解释（简体中文）：原句中“screw it to my colleagues”是错误或不恰当的短语，可能是想表达“对同事表示礼貌”。“screw”有粗俗或完全不同含义，且“it”用法不当。建议使用“show politeness to...”或“treat ... politely”等表达，清晰且礼貌。