Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答结构清晰且内容具体，但可提升自然性与流畅度。建议：1) 开头用一句主题句直接回应问题（如“主要从父母和老师那里学到的”）；2) 使用更多连接词（例如“for example,” “also”）使细节更连贯；3) 将重复的表达简化，避免冗余；4) 加入一两处小例子或简短情境以增加真实感。

例: I mainly learned politeness from my parents and teachers. For example, my parents always encouraged me to make eye contact when speaking to someone to show attentiveness, and my teachers taught me to greet elders politely and listen respectfully. These simple habits helped me communicate more confidently and to build better relationships.

提案: 回答总体不错，观点明确且有举例支撑。可改进点：1) 开头用更自然的主题句（如“I do, because...”）；2) 用连接词（such as, therefore）使句子更连贯；3) 进一步具体化举例（描述一次真实情境或结果），并把句子稍微缩短以避免冗长。

例: I do think politeness is very important because it helps build trust and mutual respect. For example, when I meet someone new I make a point of greeting them warmly and listening carefully; as a result, conversations feel more relaxed and we usually get off to a good start.

× My parents and teachers told me some codes of conduct.

✓ My parents and teachers taught me some codes of conduct.

原句中用 told me 的结构不是严格错误，但与后面的宾语搭配不太自然。英文中通常用 teach/taught 来表达“教导某人某种行为/规范”，而 tell/told 更常用于告知具体信息或讲述。建议使用 taught 来更准确地表达“教导”的含义。

× For instance, my parents asked me to make eye contact when communicating with others, while my teachers told me that I should show respect to the elders by greeting them politely and listening carefully.

✓ For instance, my parents asked me to make eye contact when communicating with others, while my teachers told me that I should show respect to elders by greeting them politely and listening carefully.

“the elders” 在此处不需要定冠词。英语中表示“对长辈”一般用“elders”或“older people”而不用“the elders”，加“the”会显得不自然。建议去掉定冠词以提高表达的地道性。

× Yes, it's important because being polite strengthens the relationship and also helps gain respect.

✓ Yes, it's important because being polite strengthens relationships and also helps to gain respect.

原句中“the relationship”用单数不够通用，且缺少不定式“to”更符合“helps to gain respect”的常见搭配。建议将关系复数化为 relationships，并在 helps 后加 to，使结构更自然。

× For instance, when I meet someone new, I'd show my respect by listening carefully and greeting politely, which also leaves a good impression on others and lightens the communication.

✓ For instance, when I meet someone new, I show my respect by listening carefully and greeting them politely, which also leaves a good impression on others and makes communication easier.

1) 原句中 I'd（I would）在一般现在时的条件下不合适，因问题是一般情况，用一般现在时更恰当，故改为 I show。2) “greeting politely” 缺少宾语，可加 them（或 the person）明确对象。3) “lightens the communication” 表达不地道，常用的说法是 “make communication easier” 或 “facilitate communication”，故改为 makes communication easier。这些改动使句子更自然、准确。