Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意図が伝わるものの、文法や語彙の誤用が多く、表現が不自然です。まずは主題文で直接答え（how you learned）を簡潔に述べ、その後に具体的な方法（例：親の指導、見本を示された、ルールや習慣）を1〜2文で補足してください。接続詞（and, so, therefore, becauseなど）を使って文をつなぎ、語彙は “kindful”（誤用）ではなく “kind” や “considerate” を用いると自然です。また、冗長な表現を避け、文は最大5文に収めてください。具体的練習方法：① 親の教えを短い文で述べる、② 具体例（手伝いや礼儀）を1つ挙げる、③ 結果や感想を簡潔に述べる、という順で練習しましょう。

例: I learned to be polite from my parents. They taught me to be considerate by helping others at home and by saying “please” and “thank you.” For example, my parents encouraged me to help elderly neighbors with groceries, which showed me why small acts of kindness matter. As a result, I try to be polite in everyday situations because it helps build good relationships.

提案: 意見は肯定しているが、根拠や具体例が不明瞭で文法も不正確です。まず短く明確に主張（Yes, I think it is important）を述べ、次に理由を1〜2文で示してください。理由は具体的で関連する語彙（respect, trust, cooperation, positive impression）を使い、接続詞（because, so, therefore）でつなげてください。不要な語や不確かな表現（maybe, is patient experience）を避け、例を一つ挙げて理由を補強しましょう。練習方法：理由→具体例→結果の順に組み立て、各文で文法と語彙の正確さを確認してください。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps people cooperate. For instance, when I greet colleagues politely at work, they are more willing to help me with tasks. This creates trust and makes communication smoother.

× When I was a child, my parents told me that I should be kindful for others through take care of others hardships and doing some cooperation for the activity is very good.

✓ When I was a child, my parents told me that I should be kind to others by taking care of them when they had hardships and by cooperating in activities.

The original sentence has multiple structural and word-choice issues. Use 'kind to others' not 'kindful for others' (word choice/adjective error). The phrase 'through take care of others hardships' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'taking care of' plus an object: 'taking care of them when they had hardships.' 'Doing some cooperation for the activity is very good' is awkward; use 'by cooperating in activities.' Suggestions: break complex ideas into parallel gerund phrases ('by taking care..., and by cooperating...') and use correct adjectives and verb forms to keep sentence structure clear.

× Yes, I do of course as being provide.

✓ Yes, of course I do; being polite provides benefits.

'I do of course as being provide' is incorrect in word order and form. 'Of course' should be set in a natural position ('Yes, of course, I do'). 'Being provide' mixes noun phrase and verb incorrectly; use 'being polite provides benefits' or 'it provides benefits.' Suggestion: place 'of course' after 'Yes,' and use a complete clause with a correct verb form ('provides').

× Others who face and fearing become more grateful and sometimes they provide or offers me a cooperation or some feedback or reward is patient experience maybe.

✓ People who face difficulties and feel afraid often become more grateful, and sometimes they offer me help, feedback, or even a reward; it can be a valuable experience.

This sentence contains incorrect pronoun and verb forms and unclear structure. 'Others who face and fearing' should be 'people who face difficulties and feel afraid' (use parallel verb forms and clearer noun). 'They provide or offers me a cooperation' mixes plural subjects with singular verb and uses 'cooperation' incorrectly; use 'they offer me help' (correct verb and noun). The clause 'or some feedback or reward is patient experience maybe' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'feedback, or even a reward; it can be a valuable experience.' Suggestions: use consistent subject-verb agreement, clearer nouns ('help' instead of 'cooperation'), and concise clauses.