Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid hesitation fillers (umm) and use past tense consistently. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and more natural phrasing (e.g., “I learned manners from my parents”).

例: I learned to be polite from my parents because they always treated others with respect. For example, they encouraged me to say “please” and “thank you,” and they modeled calm behavior when resolving conflicts, so I grew up copying their manners.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence then provide 1–2 clear reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (prevent problems, avoid conflicts) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and remove fillers and vague phrases like “and etcetera.”

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps prevent conflicts and makes daily interactions smoother. For instance, polite behavior reduces misunderstandings at work or school, and as a result people feel more comfortable cooperating with each other.

× I believe that umm my mom and dad learn teach me how to be polite because they are the politest people that I've ever met and I believe that I heritage their behaviors and characteristic to me.

✓ I believe that my mom and dad taught me how to be polite because they are the most polite people I have ever met, and I inherited their behaviors and characteristics.

Multiple grammar problems: 1) 'learn teach me' is incorrect verb sequence and tense; use past tense 'taught' because the learning happened in the past (Grammar Problem Type IDs 5 and 8/9). 2) Subject-verb agreement and wrong comparative/superlative: use 'the most polite' instead of 'the politest' for more natural superlative form (Type 25). 3) 'I've ever met' is fine but contracted present perfect is written out here as 'I have ever met' in the correction. 4) 'I heritage their behaviors and characteristic to me' uses the wrong verb and noun forms: 'heritage' is a noun, the correct past tense verb is 'inherited', and plural 'characteristics' is required (Type 9 and 1). Suggestion: use simple past 'taught' for past events, 'inherited' for receiving traits, and ensure plural nouns and correct superlative form 'the most polite'.

× Yes, definitely. Because we as human beings, we're, we live in a society where people need to be polite to each other in case to inhibit problems, fights, disturbance and etcetera.

✓ Yes, definitely, because we, as human beings, live in a society where people need to be polite to each other to prevent problems, fights, and disturbances.

Problems addressed: 1) Sentence fragment and punctuation: starting a sentence with 'Because' created a disconnected fragment; combine clauses into one sentence (Type 26 and 23). 2) Redundancy and filler words: remove repeated 'we're, we' and 'etcetera' (Type 26). 3) Incorrect phrase 'in case to inhibit problems' — use 'to prevent' for correct collocation and meaning (Type 11/4). 4) 'disturbance' should be plural 'disturbances' to match list noun forms (Type 1). Suggestion: join clauses into one sentence, remove filler, use 'to prevent' and make listed nouns parallel and plural.

× So everyone, everybody needs to be polite in a society.

✓ So everyone needs to be polite in society.

Problems: 1) Redundancy: 'everyone, everybody' repeats the same idea; choose one (Type 26). 2) Article and noun phrase: 'in a society' is unnatural here; use 'in society' to express the general idea (Type 17/11). Suggestion: remove redundancy and use the idiomatic phrase 'in society' to make the sentence concise and correct.