Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中心明确，但有重复与语法小错误，句子较长且略显啰嗦。建议：1) 开头直接给出主旨句（I learned politeness from my parents），2) 使用连接词分段说明原因与举例（for example / because），3) 避免重复短语并修正语法（parents' behaviors → my parents' behaviour / habits），4) 控制答案长度不超过5句。可练习用更具体的例子说明父母如何示范礼貌（例如，说“please/thank you”、帮忙邻居等）。

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. They were my first role models and always treated others with respect, so I copied their behaviour. For example, they regularly said “please” and “thank you” and helped neighbours, which taught me simple polite habits. As a result, being polite became a natural part of my daily behaviour.

提案: 回答直接且观点明确，但用词和表达可更自然、具体。建议：1) 开头给出明确立场（Yes, I think...），2) 用更自然的短语替代“limited self-control and vague discipline”（e.g. have less self-control or guidance），3) 提供具体好处并用连接词展开（for example / as a result），4) 保持句子简洁，避免学术化表达。可增加一两个具体情景说明礼貌的实际作用。

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important, especially for children. Young kids often lack self-control and clear guidance, so learning politeness helps them interact smoothly with others. For example, knowing how to greet teachers or share toys reduces conflicts and builds friendships. In the long run, polite behaviour also makes it easier to form good relationships at school and at home.

× As a child I learned to be polite because of my parents behaviors, because parents are the first role models in my life, so I would easily be influenced by them by by their habits and for example, if they were kind to people around them, I would do that too.

✓ As a child, I learned to be polite because of my parents' behavior. Parents are the first role models in my life, so I was easily influenced by their habits. For example, if they were kind to people around them, I would be kind too.

错误类型主要是介词/所有格以及措辞不当： 1. "parents behaviors" 应为所有格 "parents' behavior" 或复数名词搭配 "parents' behaviors"。此处强调的是父母的行为整体，用单数不可数名词 "behavior" 更自然。建议使用所有格表示所属关系。 2. 句子中重复使用 "because"、"so" 和两次 "by" 导致结构混乱，应拆分为更清晰的句子。建议用逗号分隔并拆成独立句。 3. "I would easily be influenced by them by by their habits" 中有重复的 "by"，且时态/语态不够自然，改为过去时短语 "I was easily influenced by their habits" 更符合语境。 4. 最后一句改为 "I would be kind too" 更符合英语表达习惯，避免重复使用代词和冗余结构。 改进建议：使用所有格或正确的名词形式，避免重复介词，保持句子简洁并注意时态一致。

× That is for sure, especially for children, because children are often limited self-control and vague discipline.

✓ That is for sure, especially for children, because children often have limited self-control and lack clear discipline.

错误类型为时态/词形与形容词用法不当： 1. "are often limited self-control" 结构错误，英文中应使用动词短语 "have limited self-control" 来表达“有有限的自控力”。 2. "vague discipline" 用词不当且结构不完整，应改为短语 "lack clear discipline"（缺乏明确的纪律）更符合语义。 改进建议：用正确的动词搭配（have/lack），并选择更恰当的名词或短语来表达意思，确保主语和谓语搭配自然。

× Being polite could make them learn how to get on well with others and some basic rules of interpersonal communication.

✓ Being polite can help them learn how to get on well with others and the basic rules of interpersonal communication.

错误类型为句子结构问题： 1. "Being polite could make them learn" 结构虽能理解但不自然，常用表达为 "help them learn" 或 "enable them to learn"。 2. "and some basic rules of interpersonal communication" 缺少连贯性，前后并列项应在语法上对等，改为 "and the basic rules of interpersonal communication" 更自然。 改进建议：用固定搭配如 "help/enable sb to do sth"，确保并列成分在形式上对等，调整冠词使表达更准确。