Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (verb forms, subject-verb agreement) and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Be specific: name behaviours you observed and how they influenced you. Keep answers natural and under five sentences.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents. For example, they always said “please” and “thank you” and treated neighbors with respect, so I copied their behaviour. Also, reading novels helped me understand polite conversation and etiquette.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with one or two specific reasons and a brief consequence. Correct basic grammar (use full forms, correct articles, and pluralization) and use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore'. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it helps people get along. For instance, polite behaviour reduces conflicts and makes daily interactions more pleasant, so communities can be more peaceful and people feel happier.

× Novels teach me the politeness, but I can learning from my parents because my parents is always always polite to everyone and I live with my parents and they show many politeness that's why I can naturally learning their politeness.

✓ Novels taught me about politeness, but I learned from my parents because my parents were always polite to everyone. I lived with them and they showed a lot of politeness, so I naturally learned polite behavior from them.

Multiple errors addressed: 'teach' should be past tense 'taught' to match the context (Past tense issue, ID 5). 'Teach me the politeness' is unnatural—use 'taught me about politeness' (Sentence structure, ID 26). 'I can learning' incorrectly mixes modal and -ing form; it should be 'I learned' (Verb + -ing form and Past tense, IDs 8 and 5). 'My parents is' is subject-verb agreement error; use 'my parents were' (Subject-verb agreement, ID 27). 'Always always' is repetitive; use single 'always' (Sentence structure, ID 26). 'They show many politeness' is incorrect: use 'they showed a lot of politeness' or 'they showed polite behavior' (Incorrect use of quantifiers/adjectives, IDs 14 and 13). 'That's why I can naturally learning' mixes modal + -ing and tense; correct to 'so I naturally learned' (Verb + -ing and Past tense, IDs 8 and 5). Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past when describing childhood), ensure subject and verb agree in number, avoid mixing modals with continuous forms incorrectly, and use natural collocations like 'learned about politeness' or 'showed polite behavior'.

× Yeah, sure, polite is really, really important because it's kind of manner and we leave this world many peoples and we have to more polite each other that can be the peaceful in the world and everyone is get happiness.

✓ Yes, being polite is really important because it is a matter of good manners. Many people live in this world, and we should be more polite to each other so the world can be more peaceful and everyone can be happy.

Errors fixed include: 'polite is' should be 'being polite' to use a noun phrase (Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns, ID 13). 'It's kind of manner' is incorrect; use 'it is a matter of good manners' (Sentence structure and incorrect word choice, IDs 26 and 13). 'We leave this world many peoples' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'Many people live in this world' (Singular/plural and word order issues, IDs 1 and 26). 'We have to more polite each other' should be 'we should be more polite to each other' (Modal verb usage and incorrect preposition, IDs 4 and 11). 'That can be the peaceful in the world' corrected to 'so the world can be more peaceful' (Sentence structure and adjective use, IDs 26 and 13). 'Everyone is get happiness' should be 'everyone can be happy' or 'everyone will be happy' (Incorrect verb usage and tense/modal, IDs 6 and 4). Suggestions: use 'being + adjective' for general states, choose correct collocations ('good manners', 'be polite to someone'), correct word order, and use appropriate modals ('should' for advice) and auxiliaries ('can' or 'will') to express possibility or outcome.