Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but could be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid vague endings like “I try to respect.” Use more natural phrasing (e.g. “show respect” or “treat others respectfully”) and keep to a maximum of five sentences.

例: I learned to be polite mostly from my parents and teachers. For example, my mother always insisted I say “please” and “thank you,” and my teachers praised students who listened respectfully. As a result, I grew up valuing good manners because they make conversations smoother and help maintain friendships.

提案: This is a well-structured and relevant response. To improve, make the opening sentence slightly stronger and vary vocabulary (for instance, use ‘courtesy’ or ‘good manners’). Add one specific example or brief personal experience and use a linking phrase to connect points for coherence.

例: Yes, I believe politeness is essential because it fosters respectful and friendly communication. For instance, a simple ‘please’ or ‘thank you’ can ease tension and make colleagues more cooperative. Consequently, courtesy often prevents misunderstandings and helps build trust, especially in professional situations.

× So nowadays I try to respect.

✓ So nowadays I try to be respectful.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward: 'try to respect' needs a direct object (respect whom?) or a different form. This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). 'Be respectful' correctly expresses the intended state. Suggestion: use 'be respectful' or 'try to show respect to others' to make the meaning clear.

× They also encouraged me to listen to others and respect all other people.

✓ They also encouraged me to listen to others and respect other people.

Using both 'others' and 'all other people' in the same clause is redundant and awkward. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/articles (ID 12). Removing 'all' and the second 'other' makes the sentence concise and natural. Suggestion: say 'respect other people' or 'respect everyone.'

× I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers.

✓ I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and my teachers.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but parallelism benefits from repeating the possessive 'my' for clarity. This relates to present participle/phrase clarity (ID 10). Suggestion: include 'my' before 'teachers' or keep as-is; both are correct, but 'my parents and my teachers' is clearer.

× When I was a child, they taught me to say please, thank you, I'm sorry, when appropriate.

✓ When I was a child, they taught me to say 'please,' 'thank you,' and 'I'm sorry' when appropriate.

The original punctuation and listing of phrases is awkward. This is a present tense/formatting clarity issue (ID 6). Adding conjunction 'and' and moving the comma improves readability. Suggestion: use commas between items and 'and' before the last item; include quotations or commas for clarity.

× I also believe that politeness can help avoid misunderstandings and conflicts, especially at work when dealing with other people we don't know well.

✓ I also believe that politeness can help avoid misunderstandings and conflicts, especially at work when dealing with people we don't know well.

The phrase 'other people we don't know well' is redundant after 'dealing with' and 'other' is unnecessary. This is a present tense/word choice issue (ID 6). Removing 'other' yields a more natural sentence. Suggestion: say 'people we don't know well' or 'strangers.'

× For example, saying please and thank you may seem like small things, but they can make a big difference in how people feel.

✓ For example, saying 'please' and 'thank you' may seem like small things, but they can make a big difference in how people feel.

This sentence is essentially correct but needs clearer punctuation for the phrases being referred to. The issue falls under singular/plural clarity (ID 1). Suggestion: place commas or quotes around the words 'please' and 'thank you' to show they are examples of phrases.