Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in the first sentence and avoid unnecessary hesitation and repetition. Use the correct phrase “a craft made from paper” and clarify the unclear word “racket,” which may have been intended to mean “rocket.” Add one specific detail about the activity or your feelings to make the response more effective.

例: Yes, I made a paper craft when I was at school. My teacher asked us to make a paper rocket, so I folded and glued several pieces of paper together. It was quite simple, but I enjoyed decorating it with colorful pens.

提案: Give a clear answer about one or two activities you enjoyed. Correct the unclear expressions and word choices: say “make paper crafts,” “fold paper,” and “make animals such as sheep” rather than “among the crops.” Explain why you liked the activity, and use a linking word such as “because” to connect your reason.

例: When I was a child, I liked cutting and folding paper to make simple crafts. I especially enjoyed making animals, such as sheep, because I could use different colors and be creative. Sometimes I gave my paper models to my classmates.

提案: Start with a direct response, such as “No, I don’t.” Avoid the incorrect phrase “Temperature really honest” and repeated fillers. Use “write letters on paper” or “write physical letters,” and complete your final idea by explaining what you would write to your wife and why.

例: To be honest, no, I don’t usually write physical letters. I mainly use email and messaging apps, especially for work, because they are faster and more convenient. However, I would like to write a letter to my wife one day as a meaningful reminder of our relationship.

提案: This is a well-organized answer with a clear opinion, a reason, and a contrast introduced by “however.” Improve grammatical accuracy by saying “handwritten letters are becoming less common” instead of “people letters,” and use the more natural phrase “cards expressing condolences” rather than “condolence ceremonies.”

例: Not as often as they used to. Because of modern technology, people now rely on email, messaging apps, and social media, so handwritten letters are becoming less common. However, some people still keep or write them for sentimental reasons, especially for weddings, anniversaries, or when expressing condolences.

提案: Answer directly and distinguish between paper and pens. The opening phrase is unclear, and “pants” should be “pens”; also say “in my pocket” rather than “in my pants.” Explain when you use the pen, and avoid repeated fillers and unfinished phrases.

例: I don’t usually carry paper, but I do carry a pen. I keep it in my pocket because I sometimes need to write down important information, such as an address or a phone number. If I need paper, I usually use my phone instead.

× Honestly, I cannot exactly remember when I made craft from paper.

✓ Honestly, I cannot exactly remember when I made a craft from paper.

The singular countable noun craft needs the indefinite article a.

× Honestly, I cannot exactly remember when I made a craft from paper.

✓ Honestly, I cannot exactly remember when I made a craft out of paper.

Out of is the more natural preposition when describing the material used to make something.

× It was during the school time.

✓ It was during my school years.

School time is not normally used with the definite article the in this context. My school years is a natural expression for this period of life.

× I used to cut and fold the paper for making crafts.

✓ I used to cut and fold paper to make crafts.

To make expresses purpose more naturally than for making in this sentence. Also, paper is usually uncountable when referring to the material in general.

× Sometime, you know, among the crafts, then a shape.

✓ Sometimes, you know, I made different shapes from the crafts.

Sometimes is the adverb meaning on some occasions. Sometime means at an unspecified time and does not fit this repeated activity.

× What the was my favorite part.

✓ That was my favorite part.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order and includes the unnecessary word the. That was my favorite part is a complete and correctly structured sentence.

× I don't write the letters on papers.

✓ I don't write letters on paper.

Letter is used in the plural when speaking generally, while paper is normally an uncountable material noun in this context.

× I don't write letters on paper, but using emails.

✓ I don't write letters on paper; instead, I use email.

The original sentence incorrectly joins a complete clause with the incomplete phrase but using emails. Instead, I use email forms a complete contrasting clause.

× Especially in a corporate ways.

✓ Especially in corporate settings.

The singular article a cannot be used with the plural noun ways. Corporate settings is a natural plural expression for this meaning.

× I should write a physical letter to my wife for as a reminder of.

✓ I should write a physical letter to my wife as a reminder of our relationship.

The preposition for is unnecessary before as a reminder. In addition, the phrase needs a complement after of to complete its meaning.

× I don't carry any papers and like papers, but pens, yes.

✓ I don't carry any paper, but I do carry pens.

Paper is generally uncountable when referring to the material. Pens is correctly plural because the speaker is referring to pens in general.

× I keep my pens in my pocket when I go to somewhere.

✓ I keep my pens in my pocket when I go somewhere.

Somewhere already functions as an adverb of place, so it does not take the preposition to before it.