Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use more natural phrasing such as “I was really interested in paper crafts” instead of “I was so much into crafts.” Correct the structure “techniques that I can use how to have to shape paper” to “techniques for shaping paper.” Also use parallel forms: “flowers, leaves, boxes, and other items.”

例: Yes, I have. When I was at school, I was really interested in paper crafts, so I bought a book that taught me how to make flowers, leaves, boxes, and other decorations. I especially enjoyed trying different folding techniques.

提案: Answer in the past tense because the question asks about childhood. Avoid repeating information from the previous answer and replace “making boots” with “making boats.” Use a clear topic sentence, followed by a reason and a specific result. “As I live in like in a region” should be simplified to “because I lived in a region with heavy rainfall.”

例: As a child, I loved making paper boats, especially during the rainy season. I lived in a region where it rained heavily, so I would fold several boats and float them in a pond. It was a simple activity, but I found it really entertaining.

提案: Use the present perfect correctly: “I have stopped,” not “I stop.” Avoid repeating “fast” and “easier,” and complete the final comparison. The response should end with a clear reason, such as being able to receive an immediate reply. A concise two-sentence answer would sound more natural and effective.

例: To be honest, I have stopped writing physical letters. Messages and emails are much more convenient because they are delivered instantly, and I can usually receive a reply within a few minutes.

提案: Improve the grammar in “stop using sending” and use “physical mail” or “letters” naturally. Clarify the contrast between older and younger generations, and explain why people keep letters—for example, because they are sentimental or preserve important memories. Avoid the vague ending “nowadays people are connected.”

例: Yes, I think some people still keep handwritten letters, although they are less common now. Older people may treasure letters from the past because they preserve special memories and feel more personal than digital messages. Younger people, however, usually rely on email and messaging apps.

提案: The answer is relevant and includes a personal reason, but “papers” should usually be “paper” or “a notebook.” Avoid sentence fragments such as “So whenever I am travelling...” and reduce repeated phrases like “I carry pens.” Use parallel structure in “what I did, how I felt, and what the scenery was like.”

例: Yes, I do. I usually carry a pen and a small notebook because I enjoy keeping a travel diary. When I visit a new place, I write about what I did, how I felt, and what the scenery was like.

× lots of different techniques that I can use how to have to shape paper into different kinds of flowers, also in leaves and also boxes and several other kind of stuff

✓ lots of different techniques that I can use to shape paper into different kinds of flowers, leaves, boxes, and several other kinds of things

Kind must be plural because it follows several. Also, things is more appropriate than stuff in this context because the speaker is referring to several types of paper crafts.

× techniques that I can use how to have to shape paper

✓ techniques that I can use to shape paper

Use is followed by to plus the base form of the verb: use something to shape paper. The phrases how to have to are unnecessary and incorrect here.

× flowers, also in leaves and also boxes

✓ flowers, leaves, and boxes

The preposition in is not needed before leaves or boxes because these items are the results of shaping the paper.

× the one thing the most that I love to do with paper was making boots during the rainy season

✓ the thing I loved most doing with paper was making boats during the rainy season

Because the speaker is describing a childhood preference, loved should be in the past tense. Most should be placed after loved to form the natural expression loved most.

× the one thing the most that I love to do

✓ the thing I loved most doing

The superlative most should be placed after the verb it modifies. The phrase one thing the most is not grammatically natural.

× as I live in like in a region we receive a lot of rainfall

✓ because I lived in a region that received a lot of rainfall

The phrase in like in is incorrect and repetitive. Use lived and received because the answer is describing the speaker's childhood. The relative pronoun that correctly connects region with the following clause.

× I used to make some boats and just put it in the pond

✓ I used to make some boats and just put them in the pond

Boats is plural, so it must be replaced with the plural pronoun them.

× I stop writing any physical letters anymore

✓ I do not write physical letters anymore

For a current habit, use the present simple negative do not write. Stop writing is possible, but I do not write is more natural when answering whether the activity still happens.

× because it's fast and it's easier to deliver rather than just wait like waiting for somebody to get my letter

✓ because it is faster and easier than waiting for somebody to receive my letter

Than is used for a comparison, not rather than in this structure. The conjunction and correctly joins the two adjectives, and the parallel form faster and easier makes the comparison clear.

× because it's fast and it's easier to deliver

✓ because it is faster and easier to send

The sentence compares sending a message or email with sending a physical letter, so the comparative form faster is needed. Both adjectives should also follow the same comparative pattern.

× rather than just wait like waiting for somebody to get my letter

✓ rather than waiting for somebody to receive my letter

After rather than, the -ing form is appropriate when comparing activities. The phrase wait like waiting is repetitive and grammatically awkward.

× a lot of people stop using sending any physical mails

✓ a lot of people have stopped sending physical mail

People is a plural subject, so it cannot take stops. Have stopped is suitable for a change that began in the past and continues to be relevant now. Mail is generally uncountable in this meaning.

× people stop using sending any physical mails

✓ people have stopped sending physical mail

Stop should be followed by a gerund when describing the activity that has ended: stopped sending. Using before sending is unnecessary.

× the old people still have their letters from the past that they are keeping as a memory

✓ older people still have letters from the past that they have kept as memories

After have, use the past participle kept to form the present perfect. Memories should be plural because the letters represent multiple personal reminders.

× as a memory

✓ as memories

The sentence refers to multiple letters and the memories associated with them, so the plural form memories is appropriate.

× So whenever I am travelling or I am visiting any new place.

✓ So whenever I am travelling or visiting a new place, I carry pens and paper.

This is a dependent clause beginning with whenever, so it cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. It needs a main clause, such as I carry pens and paper.

× whenever I am travelling or I am visiting any new place

✓ whenever I am travelling or visiting a new place

Use the indefinite article a before singular countable noun place. The second subject and verb are unnecessary because they are shared with the first part of the clause.

× I do carry pens and papers whenever I go around

✓ I do carry pens and paper whenever I go out

Paper is normally uncountable when referring to the material used for writing, so paper is more appropriate than papers. Go out is the natural expression for leaving home or moving around outside.

× what I did on like what I how I feel, what's the scenery over there?

✓ what I did, how I felt, and what the scenery was like

The original phrase contains incomplete and repeated structures. Each item is changed into a complete embedded question with the correct word order: what I did, how I felt, and what the scenery was like.

× what I did on like what I how I feel

✓ what I did and how I felt

The speaker is describing what they write about after a trip, so the verbs should remain consistently in the past tense: did and felt.