Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition and incomplete phrases. Use a clear structure: state what you made, explain how you made it, and add one specific detail about its appearance or purpose. The phrase “a Grab it” is unclear, so use a familiar noun such as “a paper bird” or “an origami crane.”

例: Yes, I have. I once made a simple origami bird by folding a square piece of paper. It was quite cute, and I kept it on my desk for a few weeks.

提案: Use the past tense consistently because the question asks about your childhood. Give one clear activity and explain briefly how you did it or why you enjoyed it. Avoid repeated words and unfinished expressions such as “paper paper” and “I will.”

例: When I was a child, I liked making paper people and small animals. I usually folded a piece of paper and drew faces and clothes on them. I enjoyed it because I could create different characters and play with my friends.

提案: Make sure your answer responds to “write” rather than “read.” Use a clear present-tense answer and explain how often you write letters and in what situation. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases such as “physical lighter”; the natural expression is “handwritten letters.”

例: Yes, but only occasionally. I sometimes write handwritten letters to former students or colleagues because they feel more personal than messages sent online. However, I usually communicate by email because it is faster.

提案: Your opening opinion is appropriate, but the supporting ideas need clearer vocabulary and grammar. Explain that people may keep letters when they are emotionally meaningful, while others may discard them because digital communication is more convenient. Use correct subject-verb agreement, such as “someone doesn’t” and “they keep.”

例: I think it depends on the person and the letter. People are likely to keep handwritten letters if they come from someone special or contain meaningful memories. However, others may throw them away because they prefer convenient digital messages and do not like keeping physical items.

提案: Answer directly and complete the comparison. Use natural phrases such as “I don’t usually carry” and “make notes on my phone.” Explain one or two advantages, such as convenience, accessibility, or avoiding extra items. The final sentence is incomplete, so state what your phone is more convenient than.

例: No, I don’t usually carry paper and pens when I go out. I normally use my phone to write notes, make shopping lists, or save information. It is more convenient because I always have it with me and can access my notes anywhere.

× I I made a Grab it by folding paper.

✓ I made a rabbit by folding a piece of paper.

The noun phrase needs an article and a suitable determiner: a piece of paper. The repeated subject I is also removed. Use a before a singular countable noun when mentioning it for the first time.

× I can

✓ I can make many other things with paper.

I can is incomplete because the modal verb can must be followed by a base-form verb. Add a complete verb phrase, such as can make.

× When I was a child, I will You I made of paper paper playing him, people playing him by folding a piece of paper and I will through the

✓ When I was a child, I made paper people by folding pieces of paper.

The time expression when I was a child refers to the past, so use the past-tense verb made rather than will. The sentence should also contain one clear subject and verb instead of switching between incomplete phrases.

× Yes, recently I still read physical letters because I was a school teacher teacher of university so I showed that physical lighter to produce produce all missing that could eye could eye.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally because I was a school teacher at a university, so I showed my students how to produce them.

Use at with a specific workplace or institution: at a university. The phrase teacher of university is not the normal prepositional expression. Also, how to produce them creates a grammatically complete verb structure and avoids the incomplete phrase showed that physical letter to produce.

× Yes, recently I still read physical letters because I was a school teacher teacher of university so I showed that physical lighter to produce produce all missing that could eye could eye.

✓ Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally because I was a school teacher at a university, so I showed my students how to produce them.

Still normally appears before the main verb, while occasionally can be placed after the object or at the end of the clause. This word order makes the time meaning clearer and more natural.

× If someone don't like the recognitors, maybe they will not take a respect.

✓ If someone does not like receiving letters, they may not keep them.

Someone is grammatically singular, so the present-tense auxiliary must be does, not do. The negative form is does not or doesn't. The pronoun them correctly refers to plural letters.

× If someone survives writing letters, it will keep it safe. If someone don't like the recognitors, maybe they will not take a respect.

✓ If someone enjoys writing letters, they will keep them safe. If someone does not like receiving letters, they may not keep them.

Letters is plural, so use the plural pronoun them instead of it. The pronoun they can refer to someone when the person's gender is unknown, but the object pronoun for letters must still be them.

× No, not actually when I go out where I will bring my phone with me.

✓ No, not usually. When I go out, I bring my phone with me.

This describes a usual habit, so use the simple present bring rather than the future form will bring. Use a comma after the introductory when-clause.

× If I want to read something, I will write in my phone so I can find anywhere.

✓ If I want to write something down, I write it on my phone so I can find it anywhere.

Use on with a phone or screen: write it on my phone. The preposition in is not natural in this expression.

× If I want to read something, I will write in my phone so I can find anywhere.

✓ If I want to write something down, I write it on my phone so I can find it anywhere.

The verbs write and find need clear objects in this context. Use it to refer to the thing being written and found. The pronoun it makes both clauses grammatically complete.

× It's more convenient than

✓ It's more convenient than carrying paper and pens.

After than in a comparison, use a parallel noun phrase or gerund phrase. Carrying matches the implied activity of taking paper and pens with you.