Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接表明了“是”，但语法和表达不够自然。应使用现在完成时或一般过去时，并避免重复“sheep sheep”。“which is taught”应改为“which I learned from my parents”或“which I learned to make from YouTube videos”。建议补充一个具体细节，例如制作这些动物的场景或感受，并使用“especially”或“for example”连接信息。

例: Yes, I have. I have made paper animals, especially dogs and sheep, which I learned to make from my parents and YouTube videos. I enjoyed it because it was a simple and creative activity.

提案: 回答内容相关，也给出了原因，但存在单复数、冠词和搭配问题。“color pen”应改为“colored pens”，“flower house”可改为“flowers and houses”。“something that I like”表达较笼统，建议给出具体绘画内容，并用“because”清楚连接原因。

例: When I was a child, I really enjoyed drawing on paper. I often used colored pens to draw flowers, houses, and pictures of my family. I liked it because drawing allowed me to be creative and express my ideas.

提案: 回答观点明确，且进行了过去与现在的比较，这是较好的结构。不过，“I write I wrote”是明显的自我修正；“in my homework”不太符合语境，可能应表达为“for my homework”；“online letter”应使用复数或更自然的“emails/messages”。建议用“However”连接过去和现在，使答案更流畅。

例: No, I don’t. When I was in secondary school, I sometimes wrote physical letters for my homework. However, now that I’m a university student, I usually send emails or messages online because it is quicker and more convenient.

提案: 回答的主要观点可以理解，但语法错误较多，例如“don't will not”只能选择一种形式，“by pens”应改为“with a pen”，“letters online”不能替代“handwritten letters”。此外，题目问的是人们是否仍然保留手写信，而你的回答主要讨论是否书写，建议明确回答“有些人仍会保留”，再说明原因。

例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially letters from family members or close friends. Although digital messages are faster and more convenient, handwritten letters often have sentimental value. People may keep them as special memories.

提案: 回答直接，并提供了不携带纸笔的两个原因以及替代方式，内容比较完整。但“papers and pens”应根据语境改为“paper and a pen”，“paper is”应改为“paper and pens are”或重组句子；“drop down some notes”不自然，应使用“write down/take notes”。原句过长，建议拆分并用“Instead”连接替代方案。

例: No, I usually don’t. My bag is quite small, and I prefer to carry only essential items when I go out. Instead, I use my phone to take notes or record interesting ideas.

× Yes, I have sometimes I will make some dogs or sheep sheep which is taught by my parents or from the video like YouTube

✓ Yes, I have. Sometimes I make paper dogs or sheep, which I learned to make from my parents or videos on YouTube.

原句把两个完整句子“ I have”和“ I will make”直接连接在一起，造成句子结构错误。应在“Yes, I have”后加句号，再开始新句子。回答“Have you made...?”时，也可以先用“Yes, I have”直接回答。

× Yes, I have sometimes I will make some dogs or sheep sheep which is taught by my parents or from the video like YouTube

✓ Yes, I have. Sometimes I make paper dogs or sheep, which I learned to make from my parents or videos on YouTube.

“dogs or sheep”表示复数，不能使用单数形式“is”。修改后的句子使用“I learned to make them”，避免了主语和谓语不一致的问题。

× When I was a child I liked drawing on paper very much. I tried to use some color pen to draw something like flower house and something that I like because drawing is very inspiring and creative

✓ When I was a child, I liked drawing on paper very much. I tried to use some colored pens to draw things like flowers and houses, as well as things that I liked, because drawing was very inspiring and creative.

“some”后面通常要接可数名词复数，因此“some color pen”应改为“some colored pens”。另外，举例时“flower”和“house”应使用复数形式“flowers”和“houses”。过去的经历中，“that I like”也应改为过去式“that I liked”。

× When I was a child I liked drawing on paper very much. I tried to use some color pen to draw something like flower house and something that I like because drawing is very inspiring and creative

✓ When I was a child, I liked drawing on paper very much. I tried to use some colored pens to draw things like flowers and houses, as well as things that I liked, because drawing was very inspiring and creative.

“some”表示“一些”，后面接可数名词时，名词要用复数，所以“some color pen”应改为“some colored pens”。

× When I was a child I liked drawing on paper very much. I tried to use some color pen to draw something like flower house and something that I like because drawing is very inspiring and creative

✓ When I was a child, I liked drawing on paper very much. I tried to use some colored pens to draw things like flowers and houses, as well as things that I liked, because drawing was very inspiring and creative.

“flower”和“house”是可数名词。表示单个事物时需要冠词，或者像修改后的句子一样使用复数形式“flowers”和“houses”。

× No, I don't write physical letters. When I was a secondary student, I write I wrote physical letters in my homework but now I'm a university student so I usually write online letter on computer.

✓ No, I don't write physical letters. When I was a secondary student, I wrote physical letters for my homework, but now I am a university student, so I usually write online letters on a computer.

“When I was...”说明是在过去谈论事情，因此动词应使用过去式“wrote”，不能使用现在式“write”。口语中不需要同时说“I write”和“I wrote”，保留正确的“wrote”即可。

× No, I don't write physical letters. When I was a secondary student, I write I wrote physical letters in my homework but now I'm a university student so I usually write online letter on computer.

✓ No, I don't write physical letters. When I was a secondary student, I wrote physical letters for my homework, but now I am a university student, so I usually write online letters on a computer.

“usually”表示经常性的行为，后面的可数名词通常使用复数，因此“online letter”应改为“online letters”。

× No, I don't write physical letters. When I was a secondary student, I write I wrote physical letters in my homework but now I'm a university student so I usually write online letter on computer.

✓ No, I don't write physical letters. When I was a secondary student, I wrote physical letters for my homework, but now I am a university student, so I usually write online letters on a computer.

表示“为了作业而写信”时，应使用“for my homework”，而不是“in my homework”。“for”表示目的或用途。

× Nowadays, the technology has become more advanced so people don't will not write written letters by pens because written letters online by computer is more convenient and faster and yes.

✓ Nowadays, technology has become more advanced, so people will not write letters by hand because writing letters online on a computer is more convenient and faster.

“will”是情态动词，前面不能再使用助动词“do”或“don't”。“don't will not”是错误组合，应改为“will not”。

× Nowadays, the technology has become more advanced so people don't will not write written letters by pens because written letters online by computer is more convenient and faster and yes.

✓ Nowadays, technology has become more advanced, so people will not write letters by hand because writing letters online on a computer is more convenient and faster.

表示“用笔写”时，通常使用“with pens”，但这里表达“手写信”更自然的说法是“write letters by hand”。表示在电脑上写则使用“on a computer”，而不是“by computer”。

× Nowadays, the technology has become more advanced so people don't will not write written letters by pens because written letters online by computer is more convenient and faster and yes.

✓ Nowadays, technology has become more advanced, so people will not write letters by hand because writing letters online on a computer is more convenient and faster.

原句中“written letters ... is”存在主谓不一致问题。如果主语是复数“letters”，谓语应使用“are”；修改后的主语是动名词短语“writing letters online”，整体看作单数，所以使用“is”。

× Nowadays, the technology has become more advanced so people don't will not write written letters by pens because written letters online by computer is more convenient and faster and yes.

✓ Nowadays, technology has become more advanced, so people will not write letters by hand because writing letters online on a computer is more convenient and faster.

“technology”在这里表示一般意义上的科技，不是特定的某项科技，因此通常不加定冠词“the”。“computer”是单数可数名词，前面需要冠词，所以使用“a computer”。

× No, I don't carry papers and pens when I go out because pens and paper is a little bit heavy for me and my bag is not big enough for me to carry them and I usually need to use my phone to drop down some notes and some interesting things.

✓ No, I don't carry paper and pens when I go out because pens and paper are a little bit heavy for me. My bag is not big enough for me to carry them, and I usually need to use my phone to write down some notes and interesting things.

“pens and paper”由两个并列成分组成，整体是复数概念，因此谓语应使用“are”，不能使用“is”。