Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，但句子连接不自然，且时态和表达有错误。“Yes”后应加逗号；“when I was a child”描述过去经历，后面的动词应使用过去时；“I call it little white shape”不符合语境，也不清楚你想表达的手工作品是什么。建议直接说明你做过什么纸艺，并补充一个具体例子或结果。

例: Yes, I made paper crafts quite often when I was a child. I especially enjoyed folding paper into animals, flowers, and other simple shapes. It was a fun way to be creative, and I often gave my paper animals to my family.

提案: 回答表达了两个活动，但“draw it”不自然，因为纸不是被画的对象，应说“draw pictures on it”。此外，问题使用过去时，所以“usually draw”应改为“usually drew”。建议使用连接词连接两个兴趣，并增加具体内容，例如你画什么、故事讲什么。

例: As a child, I usually drew pictures on paper, especially animals and people. I also wrote short stories about them. For example, I once created a story about a lost dog finding its way home.

提案: 回答观点清楚，也进行了现在与过去的对比，但“Last time I wrote physical letter is”时态错误，应改为“The last time I wrote a physical letter was...”。“a physical letter”前需要冠词，且最后一句的时间逻辑略不清楚：如果是计划写，应使用“I’m planning to write...”。建议说明写信的具体场合以及相比电子邮件的优点。

例: Yes, occasionally, although I usually use email or messaging apps now. The last time I wrote a physical letter was for my best friend’s birthday. I’m planning to write her another one this year because a handwritten letter feels more personal.

提案: 回答切题，使用了“but”进行对比，逻辑较清楚。不过，“have the habit of handwriting”搭配不自然，应改为“keep handwritten letters”或“write by hand”。“type something on their phones”过于笼统，可以改为“send messages or emails”。建议补充人们保留手写信的原因，例如纪念价值或情感价值。

例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters, especially letters from family members or close friends. However, most people now prefer to send emails or messages because they are faster and more convenient. Handwritten letters are often kept as special memories because they feel more personal.

提案: 回答直接，但语法错误较多。“except for taking class”应改为“except when I go to class”或“unless I’m going to class”；“If I when go out”结构错误，应直接说“When I go out”。建议说明为什么不带纸笔，并用一个完整、自然的句子进行补充。

例: No, I usually don’t carry paper or pens unless I’m going to class. When I go out, I normally just take my iPhone because I can use it to take notes, make lists, or check information. It’s much more convenient than carrying stationery.

× Yes when I was a child I really loved making shapes with paper and I call it little white shape.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I really loved making shapes with paper, and I called them little white shapes.

句子描述的是童年发生的事情，时间背景是过去时，所以 call 应改为过去式 called。由于 shapes 是复数，后面的代词和名词也应使用复数：it 改为 them，shape 改为 shapes。

× Yes when I was a child I really loved making shapes with paper and I call it little white shape.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I really loved making shapes with paper, and I called them little white shapes.

前面提到的是复数名词 shapes，因此不能使用单数代词 it，应使用复数代词 them。代词的单复数必须与所指的名词保持一致。

× Yes when I was a child I really loved making shapes with paper and I call it little white shape.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I really loved making shapes with paper, and I called them little white shapes.

前面说的是多个形状（shapes），所以后面应使用复数形式 shapes，而不是单数形式 shape。

× I usually draw it and sometimes I wrote some little stories about animals and people.

✓ I usually drew on it, and sometimes I wrote some little stories about animals and people.

问题询问的是小时候的活动，整句话应使用过去时。draw 的过去式是不规则变化 drew。

× I usually draw it and sometimes I wrote some little stories about animals and people.

✓ I usually drew on it, and sometimes I wrote some little stories about animals and people.

表示“在纸上画画”时，draw 后面通常使用介词 on，因此应说 draw on paper 或 draw on it，而不是 draw it。

× Last time I wrote physical letter is to my best friend. I think I need to write something for her birthday.

✓ The last time I wrote a physical letter was to my best friend. I think I need to write something for her birthday.

可数名词 letter 是单数，前面需要使用不定冠词 a，因此应为 a physical letter。

× Last time I wrote physical letter is to my best friend. I think I need to write something for her birthday.

✓ The last time I wrote a physical letter was to my best friend. I think I need to write something for her birthday.

句子中的 The last time 指过去最后一次写信的经历，主句应使用过去时，所以 is 应改为 was。

× No, except for taking class. If I when go out I usually just take my iPhone.

✓ No, except when I am taking a class. When I go out, I usually just take my iPhone.

If I when go out 不能构成正确的英语句子，因为 if 和 when 不能这样同时使用。这里想表达“当我外出时”，应直接使用 When I go out。

× No, except for taking class. If I when go out I usually just take my iPhone.

✓ No, except when I am taking a class. When I go out, I usually just take my iPhone.

class 是可数名词，表示“上一堂课”时通常需要使用不定冠词 a，因此应说 taking a class。