Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有明显的语法、词汇和表达问题，导致部分内容难以理解。例如，“ordinance”应改为“experience”或“activities”，“fell paper”应改为“fold paper”，“small books”可能想表达“small paper books”。建议先直接回答，再用 because 和 for example 补充原因及具体例子；同时注意最多使用3—4个清晰句子，避免重复和过长的句子。

例: Yes, I have. When I was a student, I often made paper crafts because it was relaxing and inexpensive. For example, I folded paper into cranes and small boxes.

提案: 回答基本涉及折纸动物，但时态和词汇错误较多。“I’d like”应改为过去时“I liked”，“fell pepper into animals”应表达为“fold paper into animal shapes”。建议使用清晰的主题句，然后说明这种活动为什么有趣，并给出送给朋友这一具体细节；避免“play to play”等重复表达。

例: When I was a child, I liked folding paper into animal shapes. It was fun and creative, and I sometimes played with the paper animals or gave them to my friends.

提案: 回答结构较好：先表明观点，再解释原因并举例。不过，“physical later”“rail later”应为“physical letters”，“special organisms”应为“special occasions”，“once a years”应为“once a year”。建议将过长的句子拆开，并使用“However”或“For example”使信息衔接更自然。

例: No, I don’t usually write physical letters nowadays. Most people use email or messaging apps because they are faster and more convenient. However, I might write one on special occasions, such as for a thank-you note or a birthday card, perhaps once a year.

提案: 回答有明确观点，也提到了手写信更有个人感以及祖母的例子，但很多词语和句子不清楚，影响连贯性。例如，“right hardwarten later”应为“write and keep handwritten letters”，“feels”应与复数主语搭配为“feel”。建议只保留一个具体例子，并用“because”和“For example”连接观点与细节，避免重复或无意义的结尾。

例: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they feel more personal and meaningful than digital messages. For example, my grandmother keeps letters from relatives and sometimes writes back to them. These letters can also become special memories over time.

提案: 回答直接，包含了通常情况、原因和例外情况，基本符合Part 1的结构。需要改进词汇和语法：“carve”应为“carry”，“my phones of notice”应为“my phone for taking notes”，“convert”应为“convenient”，“I’m borrowing”应改为“I borrow”或“I take”。建议使用更自然的表达，并明确说明什么时候会带笔记本。

例: No, I don’t usually carry paper and pens when I go out. I prefer to use my phone for taking notes because it’s more convenient. However, I sometimes take a small notebook and a pen when I know I’ll need to write something down.

× Yes, I have I had some ordinance for the paper when I was a student because it is so relaxing and cheap.

✓ Yes, I have. I made some paper crafts when I was a student because making them was relaxing and cheap.

“when I was a student”表示过去时间，因此相关动作应使用过去时。这里用“I made”比“I had”更准确；“making them”作主语时，动名词形式更自然。

× I often fell paper, cranks and small books.

✓ I often enjoyed folding paper to make cranes and small books.

“enjoy”后面应接动名词，所以应说“enjoyed folding”，不能说“enjoyed fold”。“folding”表示折纸这一活动。

× Well, I'd like to fell pepper into animals. When I was a child it was a fan symbol and I like mai and I cook like twice to play to play with them or I often felt people crazed and give them to my friends.

✓ Well, I liked folding paper into animals. When I was a child, it was a fun activity, and I liked making them. I often folded paper cranes and gave them to my friends.

问题描述的是童年经历，所以主要动词应使用过去时，如“liked”“was”“folded”和“gave”。不要在同一段过去经历中混用现在时“I like”和过去时。

× Well, I'd like to fell pepper into animals.

✓ Well, I liked folding paper into animals.

表达“喜欢做某事”时，可以使用“like + doing”。由于问题询问童年时期的喜好，应使用过去式“liked”，并使用“folding”表示“折”。

× I don't usually write physical later now. Most people use email or messaging app, so it's faster and easier.

✓ I don't usually write physical letters now. Most people use email or messaging apps, so they are faster and easier.

“letter”是可数名词，泛指多封信时应使用复数“letters”。“messaging app”泛指多种应用时应使用复数“apps”；主语是复数“apps”，所以后面应使用“they are”。

× I only write a rail later on special organisms like a stank you note or birthday card maybe once a years.

✓ I only write a real letter on special occasions, like a thank-you note or a birthday card, maybe once a year.

单数可数名词前通常需要冠词，因此应说“a real letter”“a thank-you note”和“a birthday card”。固定表达是“once a year”，其中“year”使用单数。

× I only write a real letter on special occasions, like a thank-you note or a birthday card, maybe once a years.

✓ I only write a real letter on special occasions, like a thank-you note or a birthday card, maybe once a year.

“once a year”表示“一年一次”，频率表达中“year”使用单数，不能说“once a years”。“occasions”表示多个特殊场合，使用复数是正确的。

× Well, I think some people right hardwarten later is today.

✓ Well, I think some people still write handwritten letters today.

“today”和“still”表示现在的情况，因此应使用一般现在时“write”。主语“some people”是复数，动词使用“write”，不能添加第三人称单数词尾。

× For example, my grandmother sometimes rise and later to relactives.

✓ For example, my grandmother sometimes writes letters to relatives.

主语“my grandmother”是第三人称单数，因此一般现在时的动词应使用“writes”，而不是“write”。“sometimes”后面的动作仍然需要与主语保持一致。

× For example, my grandmother sometimes writes letters to relactives.

✓ For example, my grandmother sometimes writes letters to her relatives.

表示“写信给某人”时，使用介词“to”，即“write letters to someone”。“relatives”前加“her”可以明确表示“她的亲戚”。

× Heartwartons now feels more personal and older people for further than for example, my grandmother sometimes rise and later to relactives.

✓ Handwritten letters feel more personal, and older people prefer them. For example, my grandmother sometimes writes letters to her relatives.

“letters”是复数，所以代词应使用宾格复数“them”，不能使用单数代词。使用“prefer them”可以避免重复“handwritten letters”，并且代词指代清楚。

× Handwritten letters now feels more personal.

✓ Handwritten letters now feel more personal.

主语“handwritten letters”是复数，因此动词应使用“feel”，不能使用第三人称单数形式“feels”。动词的单复数必须与主语一致。

× Well, I don't usually carve paper and pens when I go out. I prefer to use my phones of notice because it's more convert, but sometimes I'm borrowing a small notebook when I know I will need to write things down.

✓ Well, I don't usually carry paper and pens when I go out. I prefer to use my phone for notes because it's more convenient, but sometimes I borrow a small notebook when I know I will need to write things down.

这里描述的是平时的习惯，应使用一般现在时“carry”“prefer”和“borrow”。“I'm borrowing”是现在进行时，通常不用于表示长期或反复的习惯。

× I prefer to use my phones of notice because it's more convert.

✓ I prefer to use my phone for notes because it's more convenient.

表示用途时使用“for”，所以应说“for notes”，不能说“of notes”。“phone”在这里表示通常使用的设备，可以用单数“my phone”。

× I prefer to use my phones of notice because it's more convert.

✓ I prefer to use my phone for notes because it's more convenient.

“convenient”是形容词，用来描述手机使用起来方便；“convert”不是这里需要的形容词。系动词“is”后面应接形容词“convenient”。