Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答方向正确，但语法和表达不够自然。不要说“when I was six years ago six years”，应说“when I was six”。“paper flight”应改为“paper airplane”，“my father teach me”应改为过去式“my father taught me”。同时避免重复“with paper”，并补充一个具体细节，例如你做纸飞机的频率或感受。

例: Yes, I made paper airplanes when I was six. My father taught me how to make them, and I used to make them quite often. It was simple, but I really enjoyed seeing how far they could fly.

提案: 答案包含过去经历和原因，但核心名词不清楚。“paper air pranch”和“paper aprons”应统一为“paper airplanes”。“I liked my...”表达错误，应说“I liked making...”。句子中两个“because”重复，建议使用“so”或“which was why”连接，并说明你喜欢它的具体原因。

例: When I was a child, I liked making paper airplanes. My father taught me how to make them when I was six, and I used to make them all the time. I enjoyed testing different designs to see which one could fly the farthest.

提案: 回答基本回应了问题，但有多处词语误用。“physical writers”应为“physical letters”，“infected”可能想表达“connected”或“touched”。“when I want to do something, tell my friend”意思不清，应具体说明写信的场景，例如分享重要消息或表达感谢。建议直接回答“Yes, occasionally”并给出一个自然的理由。

例: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally. They make me feel more connected to people because they are more personal than text messages. I usually write to my close friends when I want to share important news or express my feelings.

提案: 这部分内容较完整，回答直接，也提供了原因和例子。不过要注意语法和搭配：“handwriter letters”应为“handwritten letters”，“make me feel touching”应为“make me feel touched”，“keeps memory”应为“preserves memories”，“show”应为“shows”。建议使用句号或连接词分开过长的句子，并减少重复使用“because”。

例: Yes, I think people still keep handwritten letters because they feel more personal and meaningful. I sometimes write to close friends on their birthdays or when I want to share important news. A letter can preserve memories and show that I truly care about someone.

提案: 回答有相关例子，但许多词语和时态使意思难以理解。“take papers and pencils with”后面应加“me”，“last week I carry”应改为“last week I carried”。“pants”应为“pens”；“drop a picture about birth trees”意思不清，可能想表达“draw a picture of the trees around us”。建议先直接回答，再用清晰的过去时例子说明用途。

例: Yes, I often carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. For example, last week I took them with me when I went to the park with my son. We used the paper to draw pictures of the trees around us.

× Yes, I had made a paper flight with paper when I was six years ago six years my father teach me how to make it and I made it a lot off.

✓ Yes, I made a paper airplane when I was six years old. My father taught me how to make it, and I made paper airplanes a lot.

这里描述童年时发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。had made 是过去完成时，通常需要另一个过去动作作为参照；teach 也要改为过去式 taught。

× Yes, I had made a paper flight with paper when I was six years ago six years my father teach me how to make it and I made it a lot off.

✓ Yes, I made a paper airplane when I was six years old. My father taught me how to make it, and I made paper airplanes a lot.

原句包含多个意思，但没有正确分句，且“when I was six years ago six years”结构错误。应拆成两个句子，并使用“when I was six years old”表示“我六岁时”。

× When I was a child, I liked my paper air pranch because my father taught me how to make a paper aprons when I was six, so I used to make them all the time because it was fun.

✓ When I was a child, I liked making paper airplanes because my father taught me how to make them when I was six, so I used to make them all the time because it was fun.

like 后面表示“喜欢做某事”时，通常使用动名词形式 like doing。这里应使用 liked making，而不是 liked my paper airplane。

× When I was a child, I liked my paper air pranch because my father taught me how to make a paper aprons when I was six, so I used to make them all the time because it was fun.

✓ When I was a child, I liked making paper airplanes because my father taught me how to make them when I was six, so I used to make them all the time because it was fun.

a 后面必须接单数可数名词，因此不能说 a paper aprons。改写后使用复数 paper airplanes，并用 them 指代这些纸飞机。

× Yes, I think so because physical writers let me feel happy and infected. So when I want to do something, tell my friend, I also write physical letters.

✓ Yes, I think so. Physical letters make me feel happy and connected. When I want to tell my friend something, I also write physical letters.

原句中“when I want to do something, tell my friend”语序和结构不完整。应把 tell 放在 want to 后面，并把 something 放在 tell my friend 后面，形成完整结构 want to tell my friend something。

× Yes, I think so because physical writers let me feel happy and infected. So when I want to do something, tell my friend, I also write physical letters.

✓ Yes, I think so. Physical letters make me feel happy and connected. When I want to tell my friend something, I also write physical letters.

这里想表达“感到被联系起来或感到亲切”，应使用形容词 connected。infected 表示“被感染的”，意思不符合语境。

× Yes, I think so I still write handwriter letters sometimes because they feel more personal and they make me feel touching for example I usually write letters to close friends on their birthday or when I want to share important news because a letter keeps memory and show I care.

✓ Yes, I think so. I still write handwritten letters sometimes because they feel more personal and make me feel touched. For example, I usually write letters to close friends on their birthdays or when I want to share important news because a letter preserves memories and shows that I care.

handwriter 不能作正确的形容词，应使用 handwritten，表示“手写的”。另外，make me feel 后面应使用描述人的感受的过去分词形容词 touched，而不是 touching。

× Yes, I think so I still write handwriter letters sometimes because they feel more personal and they make me feel touching for example I usually write letters to close friends on their birthday or when I want to share important news because a letter keeps memory and show I care.

✓ Yes, I think so. I still write handwritten letters sometimes because they feel more personal and make me feel touched. For example, I usually write letters to close friends on their birthdays or when I want to share important news because a letter preserves memories and shows that I care.

主语 a letter 是第三人称单数，所以并列谓语也要使用第三人称单数形式：show 应改为 shows。

× Yes, I think so I still write handwriter letters sometimes because they feel more personal and they make me feel touching for example I usually write letters to close friends on their birthday or when I want to share important news because a letter keeps memory and show I care.

✓ Yes, I think so. I still write handwritten letters sometimes because they feel more personal and make me feel touched. For example, I usually write letters to close friends on their birthdays or when I want to share important news because a letter preserves memories and shows that I care.

原句连接了多个完整意思，却没有使用句号或合适的连接结构，形成长句和连写句。应使用句号分隔主要观点，并在例子前使用 For example。

× Yes, I often take papers and pencils with when I go out for example last week I carry a paper and pants go outside with my son and we drop a picture about birth trees we are from.

✓ Yes, I often take paper and pens with me when I go out. For example, last week I carried a piece of paper and pens when I went outside with my son, and we drew a picture of the trees where we are from.

last week 表示过去的明确时间，因此 carry 和 go 都要使用一般过去时：carried 和 went。

× Yes, I often take papers and pencils with when I go out for example last week I carry a paper and pants go outside with my son and we drop a picture about birth trees we are from.

✓ Yes, I often take paper and pens with me when I go out. For example, last week I carried a piece of paper and pens when I went outside with my son, and we drew a picture of the trees where we are from.

take something with 后面需要加宾语 me，表示“随身带着某物”。此外，表达“画一幅……的画”时使用 draw a picture of，而不是 drop a picture about。

× Yes, I often take papers and pencils with when I go out for example last week I carry a paper and pants go outside with my son and we drop a picture about birth trees we are from.

✓ Yes, I often take paper and pens with me when I go out. For example, last week I carried a piece of paper and pens when I went outside with my son, and we drew a picture of the trees where we are from.

原句包含多个连续动作，但缺少标点、主语和清晰的连接词。应拆分句子，并使用 For example、when 和 and 来连接不同的信息。