Paper— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời chưa trả lời trực tiếp về việc làm đồ thủ công bằng giấy; em nên nói rõ “Yes/No” và đề cập đến một sản phẩm cụ thể như thiệp, origami hoặc thư tay. Cụm “strengthen family bond models” không tự nhiên; nên dùng “strengthen our family bond”. Ngoài ra, cần sửa “handwritten letter” thành “handwritten letters”, “which make” thành “which makes”, và tránh tự sửa câu giữa chừng như “I had right?”.

例: Yes, I have made paper crafts before, especially handmade cards for my family. I usually decorate them with drawings and short messages for special occasions. Making these cards helps me strengthen my bond with my mother, and I find it very relaxing.

提案: Em cần sử dụng thì quá khứ vì câu hỏi hỏi về thời thơ ấu: “I loved” và “I often wrote”. Câu trả lời đang lặp lại ý “write for myself in the future” từ câu trước và chưa đưa ra chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động khi còn nhỏ. Sửa “little letter” thành “little letters”, “a free times” thành “free time”, và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn như “I liked writing short letters and drawing pictures.”

例: When I was a child, I liked writing short letters and drawing pictures on paper. I sometimes wrote notes to my future self, which I found exciting at the time. I also enjoyed making simple paper airplanes with my friends.

提案: Em đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng nên tránh mở đầu “As I mentioned earlier” vì câu trả lời Part 1 nên tự nhiên và độc lập. Cần dùng giới từ chính xác: “write letters to my family and close friends”, không dùng “for” trong ngữ cảnh này. Câu “We connect us” sai cấu trúc; có thể thay bằng “They help us stay connected.” Nên thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về thời điểm em viết thư.

例: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally, especially to my family and close friends. I usually write them on birthdays or when someone is going through a difficult time. Although messaging is faster, a handwritten letter feels more personal and memorable.

提案: Câu trả lời có quan điểm và lý do hợp lý, nhưng quan điểm hơi tuyệt đối khi nói mọi người không còn giữ thư tay. Em nên dùng cách diễn đạt cân bằng như “Many people” hoặc “some people”. Cần sửa “everyone now have” thành “everyone now has”, “they are usually chat” thành “they usually chat”, và “instead of write” thành “instead of writing”. Có thể bổ sung rằng một số người vẫn giữ thư vì giá trị tình cảm hoặc kỷ niệm.

例: Many people do not keep handwritten letters because they usually communicate through their phones. However, some people still keep them as meaningful memories, especially letters from family members or loved ones. I think these letters can become valuable keepsakes over time.

提案: Em trả lời trực tiếp, có lý do và sự so sánh với điện thoại, nhưng cần tránh lặp “I have I have” và dùng từ chính xác hơn. “My app or my website” chưa tự nhiên; nên nói “a note-taking app on my phone”. Cụm “very unnecessary” có thể thay bằng “not very practical” hoặc “unnecessary”. Em cũng nên dùng thì hiện tại đơn nhất quán: “I use” thay vì “I will use” khi nói về thói quen.

例: I rarely carry paper and pens when I go out because they are not very practical for me. I usually use a note-taking app on my phone instead. It is more convenient because I always have my phone with me and can easily organize my notes.

× I often write handwritten letter for my family, especially my mother.

✓ I often write handwritten letters for my family, especially my mother.

The noun letters is countable and refers to more than one letter as a general habit, so it should be plural.

× I often write handwritten letter for my family, especially my mother because I think it can help her strengthen family bond models.

✓ I often write handwritten letters for my family, especially my mother, because I think they can help strengthen our family bond.

A singular countable noun needs an article, but the general meaning is better expressed with the plural form letters. The phrase family bond also needs a determiner such as our. The pronoun they agrees with letters.

× I had written a little for myself in the future.

✓ I have written a few letters to my future self.

The past perfect had written is used to describe an action completed before another past action. Here, the speaker is describing life experience connected to the present, so the present perfect have written is more appropriate.

× which make me feel more nervous when I read it again

✓ which makes me feel more nervous when I read them again

The relative pronoun which refers to the singular idea of writing letters, so the verb should be makes. Because letters is plural, the object pronoun should be them rather than it.

× To be honest, I love writing very much, so I often write little letter when I have a free times.

✓ To be honest, I loved writing very much, so I often wrote little letters when I had free time.

The question asks about the speaker's childhood, so the verbs should be in the simple past: loved, wrote, and had.

× I often write little letter when I have a free times.

✓ I often wrote little letters when I had free time.

The countable noun letter should be plural because the speaker is describing a repeated activity. Time is uncountable in this expression, so free time is correct, not a free times.

× especially write a little for myself in the future

✓ especially writing a little for myself in the future

The phrase should be parallel with the preceding phrase writing very much. After especially in this coordinated description, writing is the appropriate -ing form.

× We connect us.

✓ We connect with each other.

The verb connect normally takes the preposition with when describing communication or relationships between people. The phrase each other correctly shows that the connection is mutual.

× We connect us.

✓ We connect with each other.

Us cannot be used as the object directly after the subject we in this sentence. Each other is the correct reciprocal pronoun because the people connect mutually.

× People now don't keep a handwritten letter.

✓ People nowadays do not keep handwritten letters.

The sentence refers to handwritten letters in general, so the countable noun should be plural. The plural form also avoids using an unnecessary singular article.

× People now don't keep a handwritten letter.

✓ People nowadays do not keep handwritten letters.

When speaking generally about countable items, use the plural form without the indefinite article a. A handwritten letter would refer to one specific letter.

× Everyone now have their own mobile phones.

✓ Everyone now has their own mobile phone.

Everyone is grammatically singular, so it takes has, not have. Because everyone refers to each person individually, mobile phone is normally singular here.

× They are usually chat with each other instead of write a letter.

✓ They usually chat with each other instead of writing letters.

For a general present habit, use the simple present chat rather than the incorrect combination are chat. The verb after instead of should be in the -ing form, and letters is plural when referring to letters generally.

× instead of write a letter

✓ instead of writing letters

After the preposition instead of, use a gerund, so writing is required. The plural noun letters expresses the general activity.

× Today I have I have my own mobile phone so when I need to take notes I will use my app or my website instead of paper.

✓ Today, I have my own mobile phone, so when I need to take notes, I use an app or a website instead of paper.

The subject and verb have are repeated, which creates an incorrect sentence structure. Removing the repetition makes the sentence grammatical. The simple present use is suitable for describing a usual method.